Great story I hope you come back to the bar and characters

I love that the store owner is just like (quietly) "what the fuck, what the fuck, what the fuuuuuuuck"

This was great. I like how you kept it simple all throughout. I appreciate stories that go exactly where you expect them to go. Good job!

I love the story about father and son in relationships very much. I hope you can write more about it. Changing the age and body is also good.

What a pity! This series don't move forward. Easily one of my favorites from recent years. I hope Iriefall returns this series someday.

Oh my freaking goodness, this is so freaking good!!!! CHOICES MAKE A MAN! And the mistakes influence those choices, sometimes unexpectedly. ❤️🖤❤️🖤❤️🖤

Both parts of this story are so great! It’s so well-written, fun concept and exceptionally hot. It was a great read because it felt fresh and fun. I loved the joy the characters felt about their bodies and the attraction to smaller guys. I’d love to see another part, but if we don’t, I’m happy we got these two chapters. They both made me cum!

Dude this was one of the best stories I've read on the site as someone who loves hypermasculinity, jocks, and muscle. Excellent writing, great and individualized characters, and VERY sexy. All the characters are really fun and likeable. I really liked Chase's growth with his bicuriosity, and his relationship with Oliver is really well developed and natural. Benito being that cocky stud on campus who annoys you but you always fantasize about. Eric was really sexy and I liked his bluntness and his banter with Benito. I also found Richard to be a very amusing character, he reminded me of Prince Wu from the Legend of Korra. Chase and Oliver's talk and kiss in the sauna- so sexy and natural. Eric and Patrick sucking Benito's cock was hot especially as it was their first time doing something with another guy. Eric and Benito fucking Patrick was also amazing. The BEST scene is the locker room orgy before the big game. So fucking beautiful. The tension building up as Chase calls Oliver over and begins sucking him as everyone watches. Eric fucking Benito. Chase licking Oliver's musky pits as he fucks him. I nutted when all the football jocks nutted on Chase and covered him in sperm. Fuck man. I'm not sure if the loophole to coach's rule was supposed to be obvious to the reader, since I assumed his rule said "girlfriend" to generally mean partner, so Chase revealing the orgy inducing loophole did surprise me and get my heart pumping. I also really enjoyed Eric and Benito as Asian and Latino characters, both had unique traits and were important to the story. Many authors (white) really don't know how to write poc's without disrespecting them in one way or another so it was really nice to see. I liked that Eric was the more masculine and assertive one in his relationship. Since Chase's ethnicity was never imagined, I envision him as this tall beefy stud from my gym who to me looks Latino (and who I think definitely looks like a football player). If I had some suggestions, I would like more emphasis on pecs! More pecs, more armpits. The story mentioned musk and sweat a lot which was good though. Overall one of the best stories here. PLEASE, consider making a sequel. I really want to see how Chase and Oliver's relationship grows.

I really want a neighbor like Ozzy for myself, where can I get one? Lol this was an extremely hot chapter my friend, and I loved all the rimming and the manipulation these two sluts managed to do to sweet, hunky Ozzy. I can’t wait to see how they will manipulate him next… maybe into fucking their tight holes?

Charlie pointed me here, and I'm glad he did because this was a really fun romp! A friendly competition and scorekeeping between two slutty friends, and even the very _idea_ of an "after-fuck pizza" is just so..._**porny**_, I love it! You have a really fun and personable style of writing that suits this type of story. Very well done! Keep up the good work!

Hot as fuck story as always! That rimming is chefs kiss!!

Hope this continues soon

Hope this continues soon

Wait. Doesn't Brad need to go suck Leo's cock before seeking out Ethan? His own curse is still in effect on himself. He still cannot refuse a proffered cock. Additionally, I would like to say that the writing is uber hot, the world building is very well done, and the characters are well developed. This is a fun series to jerk off to. As for choice or mistakes, I think you might need to write two different endings. Does magic in this universe allow for the creation of alternate timelines?

This was amazing lol

Is there going to be more to this story?

new chapter!

Choice please. I would love to see him request Kal change his orientation after he transfers back. He's obviously unhappy with the life he was living.

I prefer a third option: Experiences Maketh the Man as it encompasses both your mistakes and choices. It will also allow Brad to get the ending he _deserves_!

I'll vote for choice. And even better: I vote that you create two separate pathes! This story is growing from being hot to becoming absolutely amazing. You even manage to add some unexpected depth I've never expected!

Excellent series. The fact that you had me rooting *against* a transformation into a bimbo femboy is a testament to your writing! But maybe Brad can keep that version of himself around for later 👀 Mistakes sounds more fun!

Choices maketh the man. The choice to accept ones mistakes and learn from them, to choose to be better.

Well, I hadn’t considered a “Door #3” option. But I guess it’s up to what’s behind #1 & #2. Lol. Can’t wait.

I wrote a longer comment that got eaten by the void so all I'm going to say is Holy fuck. Both endings please, and a third secret ending you havent even hinted at, please and thank you

Team mistakes here. One final pitfall Brad can’t escape

I love this story! Very well-written, and loved that we got to delve more into the lore of magic in this reality. Im definitely glad brad came out on top, but would loved to have seen drake messing with brad more (making him unable to think about other things and even more physical transformations in order to show the boundaries of the power and extent to which drake had over brad...like, definitely want to see the big-titted barbie and straight versions of brad/kal come out, as well as others).

I just woke up so forgive me for the dumb humor, but it could be funny if "mistakes" refer to us, the readers. Like we'll receive a very short nonsensical paragraph, in a CYOA Goosebumps style. In more seriousness, I think it would be cool if you use the diverging plot tool and let us see both options. Only if you have the time/will for that of course.

Excuse the repeat of words, but the choices are ambiguous haha. Mistakes are just choices with regrets of some form in hindsight. I guess based on the story this far, mistakes (whether just regretting not to see Ethan, or casting a curse on another warlock, or something untold and even more chaotic 😈) sounds like a more reasonable conclusion than choices, which would imply a happy ending, especially when compared to the other option. I'd personally love to see what it was like from Kals perspective at the start. Loosing his otherwise reality controlling powers and becoming a toxic alpha, slave to his own dick, not that he'd see it that way 😂

This series has been an absolute delight to read. Every new chapter just adds more buildup towards the end and they make me grow more excited to see the ~~depraved~~ ending. I'm actually one of the few who likes Drake's mind tricks. I hope Brad picks up one or two from him :p

Wow, wow, wow. How to choose? And you could argue that either choices or mistakes can yield good or bad endings. Choose poorly and disaster can result. But we can learn from our mistakes and be better than before. So which is correct?