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2/3/24, 11:32 AM
Wowza. Fingers crossed for things to mend, and what a hot scene in the meantime! Way to go Cameron!
2/3/24, 11:26 AM
So intriguing, so excited to read the next chapter!
2/3/24, 1:56 AM
I mean that title is in there, but it still took me by surprise by the twist of Simon having three jockboys. So hot and enjoyed reading it.
2/2/24, 8:22 PM
Hell yeah!! This is gonna be great. 😈
LVM
1/31/24, 3:20 AM
Woah! Woah! Please write more!! The story got hot when the POV shifted to the MC (was) in the Dad's psyche!! Maybe focus on that direction in the next part??

Makingthingsbetter
2/2/24, 6:12 PM
@[LVM](/user/show/10036073) Thanks for the comment! I am planning to do that as the original Kazuhiro will not be central for the next chapter as it will focus on Masaru and Haruto becoming a couple. I want to emphasise a bit on the perverse nature of Haruto finally getting his dream man without knowing the truth
1/25/24, 11:33 PM
I like it already, I can’t wait to see the further corruption 😈

Makingthingsbetter
2/2/24, 6:10 PM
@[EvanIshihara96](/user/show/10002685) Thanks! I will be corrupting Masaru in the sexual aspect and not the evil aspect if that makes sense.
ann
1/26/24, 3:07 AM
Love the concept

Makingthingsbetter
2/2/24, 6:09 PM
@[ann](/user/show/10005606) Sorry for the late reply, thank you so much!
2/2/24, 11:09 AM
Amazing story! Can't wait to read more!
2/2/24, 2:03 AM
Good chapter!
2/1/24, 4:18 PM
Love this story. Hope we get more
Anonymous
2/1/24, 9:56 AM
that was so good. been wanting a story of an alpha who is a cockhungry slut. idk when but i hope you do an origin story for the alpha.
2/1/24, 9:46 AM
A really cute twist :upside_down_face:
2/1/24, 9:01 AM
Another wonderful story from my buddy Cockatrice. Emotionally complex and thoughtful, you have a wonderful ability to tap into feelings we all experience at some point. Kudos to you my friend.
2/1/24, 5:46 AM
What an amazing story. Really looking forward to it continuing.
2/1/24, 4:03 AM
Oh so Ben is just a horny swimmer, got it. But im confused, is the test/trial a fluke or not? Since both of them are dosed. And also, that is so cute that both of them have feelings to each other.
2/1/24, 12:57 AM
Super hot dude! Made me hard. I'd be interested in reading more of your writing ;)
1/31/24, 11:41 PM
A very hot story. Spoiler: They all seemed to want to be jock boys by the end. The change in their brains was sudden but spread slowly to their entire minds.
1/31/24, 11:04 PM
Like where this is headed! Wondering if this is a 3some in the making or a love triangle, but excited to find out 😁
1/31/24, 8:35 AM
I'm more of a fan of the Oli storyline and ship that relationship

1/31/24, 7:06 PM
@[mutak](/user/show/952269) Oli is back from his holiday soon!

1/31/24, 10:40 PM
@[Amero](/user/show/10014920) Shoo! Good deal! Thanks!
1/31/24, 6:30 PM
This was an amazing story. So much work into this and it was well worth the read. Enjoyed the pacing and had just a bit of everything I like in a story.
1/31/24, 6:27 PM
Oh wow, what a wonderful emotional story. A tragic and heartful story in one. Enjoyed reading it.
Yes
1/31/24, 3:20 PM
Hoping they DP him, personally
1/31/24, 2:18 PM
I agree with mutak. Im more of an Oli shipper. But i like that there will be drama happening. And i wonder if Ben is just curious or its just a chemical side effect happening to him.
1/31/24, 4:37 AM
Hotter and hotter.
1/31/24, 3:05 AM
Sensitive, Poignant and on point. Exceptional!!
1/31/24, 2:36 AM
The fact that the next chapter hasn’t come out yet is distressing to say the least
1/30/24, 11:33 PM
This chapter was a highlight of the series. Having Dan and Taylor be converted like that was incredible. How they each had different kinks that ultimately meshed together was also well done. The whole scene of these big muscular subs begging to be owned by a smaller top will never stop driving me wild. Also the melding the three jocks went through was well laid out. How they could become more of a single mind. Influencing each other. Building off each other was beautiful. What they felt. What they thought. What they wanted. Very compelling. Though I must admit to being a bit bummed with the epilogue. Our nerd essentially has three jock slaves that are constantly 'brainwashed' by their own desires to submit to their Sir. It feels like a lost opportunity to explore what they did moving forward from there. Having the 'Jockboy' do any manner of things at the order or request of their shared Sir. Such as them going back to that gym and showing off? Or that Sir orders them to only go to that gym with certain dress requirements. Or just generally taking more dominance and control over their lives in general? It was just more of a happy ending. Not to say that was bad, just felt...quick.

1/30/24, 11:41 PM
@[Marik29](/user/show/10021139) Thanks for the kind comments! I actually struggled on including the epilogue or not. I wanted to give a glimpse of the future but I also felt like it closed off future possibilities if I wanted to write them. What I ultimately decided is that I don’t currently have any plans to expand this story, so I included it. BUT, if I do want to explore these characters more, I can edit the story and insert more chapters before the epilogue. So, no promises, but if get inspired, I might write about the morning after, or the first time Simon develops the dual broadcaster/receiver. Or go past the epilogue and write what happens when the first commercial Neurobridge is released.

1/31/24, 2:27 AM
@[Naedre](/user/show/931338) Oh, I fully get why you did the epilogue. It definitely shows a window into the aftermath. The story could have excluded it and still would have worked. That ending was just the right amount where the readers would have gone 'where is the rest of it?' or 'it can't stop there!' because it has the sudden cut off with the story being concluded. It can make your audience go crazy because they want more. And I must admit I am partly guilty of that with this ending. I am much more into the master/slave troupe with obvious controls and dominance like collars, chastity, and rubber. And having such elements in the story with these characters would have been beyond incredible in my eyes. So I was trying to impose my own interests into the story. And that isn't how this story was set up. This is much more of the resounding happy ending. With the characters finding a balance with each other. Everything was mutual and agreed upon.
1/31/24, 2:19 AM
Once again, I am blown away by your talent. You can write a truly wonderful story, and this is no exception. Beautiful and moving, wonderfully told. Kudos!
1/30/24, 10:36 PM
Wow!