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2/1/24, 5:46 AM
What an amazing story. Really looking forward to it continuing.
2/1/24, 4:03 AM
Oh so Ben is just a horny swimmer, got it. But im confused, is the test/trial a fluke or not? Since both of them are dosed. And also, that is so cute that both of them have feelings to each other.
2/1/24, 12:57 AM
Super hot dude! Made me hard. I'd be interested in reading more of your writing ;)
1/31/24, 11:41 PM
A very hot story. Spoiler: They all seemed to want to be jock boys by the end. The change in their brains was sudden but spread slowly to their entire minds.
1/31/24, 11:04 PM
Like where this is headed! Wondering if this is a 3some in the making or a love triangle, but excited to find out 😁
1/31/24, 8:35 AM
I'm more of a fan of the Oli storyline and ship that relationship

1/31/24, 7:06 PM
@[mutak](/user/show/952269) Oli is back from his holiday soon!

1/31/24, 10:40 PM
@[Amero](/user/show/10014920) Shoo! Good deal! Thanks!
1/31/24, 6:30 PM
This was an amazing story. So much work into this and it was well worth the read. Enjoyed the pacing and had just a bit of everything I like in a story.
1/31/24, 6:27 PM
Oh wow, what a wonderful emotional story. A tragic and heartful story in one. Enjoyed reading it.
Yes
1/31/24, 3:20 PM
Hoping they DP him, personally
1/31/24, 2:18 PM
I agree with mutak. Im more of an Oli shipper. But i like that there will be drama happening. And i wonder if Ben is just curious or its just a chemical side effect happening to him.
1/31/24, 4:37 AM
Hotter and hotter.
1/31/24, 3:05 AM
Sensitive, Poignant and on point. Exceptional!!
1/31/24, 2:36 AM
The fact that the next chapter hasn’t come out yet is distressing to say the least
1/30/24, 11:33 PM
This chapter was a highlight of the series. Having Dan and Taylor be converted like that was incredible. How they each had different kinks that ultimately meshed together was also well done. The whole scene of these big muscular subs begging to be owned by a smaller top will never stop driving me wild. Also the melding the three jocks went through was well laid out. How they could become more of a single mind. Influencing each other. Building off each other was beautiful. What they felt. What they thought. What they wanted. Very compelling. Though I must admit to being a bit bummed with the epilogue. Our nerd essentially has three jock slaves that are constantly 'brainwashed' by their own desires to submit to their Sir. It feels like a lost opportunity to explore what they did moving forward from there. Having the 'Jockboy' do any manner of things at the order or request of their shared Sir. Such as them going back to that gym and showing off? Or that Sir orders them to only go to that gym with certain dress requirements. Or just generally taking more dominance and control over their lives in general? It was just more of a happy ending. Not to say that was bad, just felt...quick.

1/30/24, 11:41 PM
@[Marik29](/user/show/10021139) Thanks for the kind comments! I actually struggled on including the epilogue or not. I wanted to give a glimpse of the future but I also felt like it closed off future possibilities if I wanted to write them. What I ultimately decided is that I don’t currently have any plans to expand this story, so I included it. BUT, if I do want to explore these characters more, I can edit the story and insert more chapters before the epilogue. So, no promises, but if get inspired, I might write about the morning after, or the first time Simon develops the dual broadcaster/receiver. Or go past the epilogue and write what happens when the first commercial Neurobridge is released.

1/31/24, 2:27 AM
@[Naedre](/user/show/931338) Oh, I fully get why you did the epilogue. It definitely shows a window into the aftermath. The story could have excluded it and still would have worked. That ending was just the right amount where the readers would have gone 'where is the rest of it?' or 'it can't stop there!' because it has the sudden cut off with the story being concluded. It can make your audience go crazy because they want more. And I must admit I am partly guilty of that with this ending. I am much more into the master/slave troupe with obvious controls and dominance like collars, chastity, and rubber. And having such elements in the story with these characters would have been beyond incredible in my eyes. So I was trying to impose my own interests into the story. And that isn't how this story was set up. This is much more of the resounding happy ending. With the characters finding a balance with each other. Everything was mutual and agreed upon.
1/31/24, 2:19 AM
Once again, I am blown away by your talent. You can write a truly wonderful story, and this is no exception. Beautiful and moving, wonderfully told. Kudos!
1/30/24, 10:36 PM
Wow!
1/30/24, 4:56 PM
A genuinely well written, incredibly hot story. Very very much enjoyed it!
1/30/24, 12:30 AM
Oh my oh my oh my oh my!! Gdhdndhrfdg Do fucking good! Everything about this was amazing! So good! Great plot, great porn, great sex, great end. So good! So sexy.

Martin
1/30/24, 6:13 AM
@[Heru Kane](/user/show/56823) I hear you. This is one amazingly hot and cum-inducing story, well written, great concept, and prefect execution!
1/30/24, 2:42 AM
@Martin, I guess you mean January 30 in European time because it's January 29 in the States and I just finished reading this leg of the story. I like this ending. It's not an overwhelming change in Dan and Taylor; it's more Inception style without the whole depression. And all three being Simon's jockboys just comes gradually. It's really nice to see a story where the mind control doesn't dominate but comes on gradually and there is an acceptance of the control. And you left room for the story to go in different directions. Thank you for writing this story.

Martin
1/30/24, 6:12 AM
@[New Guy in Town](/user/show/820450) The intricacies of time zones :) The system always shows a timestamp adjusted for your local time zone. So I'm always talking MET :)
1/30/24, 4:56 AM
4 stars
1/29/24, 1:18 PM
I went back and re read this recently. Such a great series!

Anonymous
1/30/24, 4:20 AM
@[Mrdick](/user/show/1001656) Thank you so much!
1/29/24, 5:47 PM
Aww i feel bad for Jared. I mean im happy that Daniel is now part of the pact but all the drama he brought wirh him is not fun. He is stirring emotions and soon bringing danger. Looking forward for an update again.

Anonymous
1/30/24, 4:19 AM
@[DJeiKier](/user/show/10021357) Thanks a lot! Yeah, it's a bit difficult (It was difficult to write as well) but I promise it will all work out at the end.
1/30/24, 4:14 AM
Great finale! You're right in your comment to Martin: this ending is pretty clearly signposted, but no less hot for it! The fact that all the jockboys end up being a hivemind at the end is very sexy, and you do a great job showing them absorb Jake's personality during the orgy scene. Too bad I don't know any hot nerds who can mindfuck me into submission.
1/30/24, 2:22 AM
The ending was even better than I dreamed. Glad the time zones allowed this to appear Monday night instead of Tuesday. Yay! And why isn’t this in the running for Mad Science?

1/30/24, 3:34 AM
@[Beaner](/user/show/2654278) I thought about putting this in mad science, but really only the last chapter fits with the contest, imho. And I started posting the story before the contest started. I don’t think you can put a later chapter of a story in a contest, since it wouldn’t be fair for the anonymous judging. Think of this as your Mad Science appetizer before the contest. 😃

1/30/24, 4:04 AM
@[Naedre](/user/show/931338) Yeah, I get it. But this is one hell of an appetizer ! Just about the best series I’ve read here in a long time.
1/30/24, 3:17 AM
Another great addition to the JPS Universe, Charlie! Insanely hot while still carrying a fun vibe, very well done!
EJG
1/29/24, 1:41 PM
Damn, this was one of the hottest stories i've read in a long while,even with the str8 sex all element. I am a sucker for CNC,bad boys and dominant bullies, and it's just about damned time we get a BIG TOP/small sub rather than the token sbig sub tags i tend to see. Claudio seemed to even have a hypnotic aura about his dominance,even though it was not a hypno theme. Ya got me privately fantasizing about Claudio inviting his boys round to 'spear the queer' or even the other scenario's with other dom jocks poor Dylan found himself in

1/30/24, 1:04 AM
@[EJG](/user/show/1050471) Thank you for the kind words! I love to walk the line between reality/supernatural in my stories, so the reader themself can make their own conclusions of whether or not it was Claudio's mere presence that did Dylan in, or there was something more in the works. > Ya got me privately fantasizing about Claudio inviting his boys round to ‘spear the queer’ or even the other scenario’s with other dom jocks poor Dylan found himself in Oh, believe me, you are _not_ alone! :wink:
1/24/24, 7:38 AM
Waiting eagerly for the next part - hoping you haven't abandoned this story! It's hot as hell!

1/24/24, 9:15 AM
@[chonk](/user/show/909025) I hope it too

1/28/24, 10:46 PM
@[Male-meat-suit](/user/show/10046570) I'm not abandoning anything. I was able to do a lot when I was on break. Now I'm back to work and dealing with some things. But I am working on the next chapter. Hopefully it will be done soon.

1/30/24, 12:52 AM
@[Landers](/user/show/429288) No, I'm glad to know you're moving on. I'm looking forward to a new chapter
1/30/24, 12:37 AM
This was truly incredible.
1/29/24, 5:52 PM
Fuck, what a story!!!
1/29/24, 12:50 PM
OhBOY OhBOY... I did not want that chapter to end. What a FUN way that you described their intimacy. it was incredibly hot. Do you think that Brian and Kyle are making incredible sex smells when they cum so much and all over each other? I bet Brian smells like a man meets sex... so good. THANK YOU