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9/12/21, 7:19 AM
What a twist! Looking forward to more.

9/12/21, 8:46 PM
@Norismo I'll keep trying to provide more twists and turns!
Buckyboi
9/11/21, 9:48 PM
OK, **definitely** following this one!

9/12/21, 8:46 PM
@Buckyboi Well, thank you very much! I hope you enjoy it!
Martin
9/10/21, 8:33 PM
That story is amazing, really. I'm not into fisting, but reading this made me want to be Derek in that moment. There's so much potential for crazy hot perverse sex stories in this scenario, so we can only hope that you'll keep coming up with more adventures between Razz and Derek. Especially since you teased me already with your mentioning of rubber ... :)
9/10/21, 8:49 AM
ohhhh, teasing about somebody else who will probably show up! And we have a mysterious main bad guy for the story! I'm hyped!!! Wonder how Zane will react to what he'll learn. Okay, so the dad probably doesn't know what happened, that explain a lot. Hehehhehe, Dylan has his father's possessiveness.

Jonanator
9/10/21, 4:42 PM
@BobbyBlobfish I'm glad you like it. I'll post the new chapter later.
9/10/21, 2:04 PM
*Honey,* that fisting scene was hot as all hell. I don’t know how unrealistic it is, if at all, to be able to pull out your whole fist and push it right the fuck back in, but *damn,* it turned me on anyway. Also, guilty pleasure, the word “punching” calls back all my S/M tendencies even though there wasn’t a hint of pain. Switching from sexy to romantic to sexy, with dirty talk in the midst of the romance, was a great idea. Even though Razz came down in the middle, I didn’t. You focused the romantic conversation effectively and it bled right into the next scene. Once again, great story, great fun, great writing! You’re a worthy competitor. (Also, once the contest is over would you consider adding another with Razz bottoming or Derek deepthroating? I saw there were the other two Derek/Razz stories but size stealing isn’t always my thing. I might try them still, especially if they’re temporary changes.)

9/10/21, 4:28 PM
@Soren Fitz My goal with Razz and Derek is definitely "semi-unrealistic but hot as hell" hahaha. Thank you for your incredibly nice comments and detailed feedback. You managed to compliment the things I was most unsure/anxious about from a writing perspective across both parts. Also, in terms of how I write these characters, almost everything they do with major physical changes is temporary, especially the dramatic size stuff. I'm not big into "stuck with X" type things, especially for recurring characters. In my mind it's kinda like sitcom rules -- even if a story ends with them TF'd in some way, the expectation is that they'd revert "off camera". I probably will continue writing them. I have a TF-heavy story that's been in drafts for, uhhh, probably two years at this point, but I'd also like to pick up more of these early-relationship threads I hinted at in this story like what you mentioned. My writing inspiration is an unfortunately fickle beast -- I also have two non-R&D unfinished series on GSS with drafts stuck in writer's block -- so I'll try to tame it as best I can.
9/10/21, 1:48 PM
Your writing is so fluid! It reads smoothly; it’s descriptive; your vocab range is wide and it shows. I’m enjoying the fluffy romance—it’s pleasant and sweet. That you tease at it through Razz brushing it away over and over again keeps the idea of it in the reader’s head while not over-expositing, and there are so many other subtle ways their chemistry appears. The one thing I’ll say is that the wording of some of Razz’s self-reflections feel somewhat clunky, but everyone writes clunky wording sometimes, so it’s not a mark. I’m also typically not the biggest on mind control, so I like themes where things happen naturally even though the characters could use powers. It’s sweet to see the unexpected happen to someone who can do anything they expect. And a delicious sex scene! The gradual progression of Derek getting more and more eager was great. It seems like you really have a grasp on how sex works, and I found myself wishing that bottoming would feel that good for me, too. Keep up the good work. I’m on to the next!
Jack
9/9/21, 7:43 AM
I really enjoyed this story! Your characters are well written and I like this dynamic of having the hypnosis without the usual aggression that comes on GSS. I think you ought to continue this story with at least another chapter or two. Both this site and GSS would benefit from your particular style of writing. I'm glad that you found the courage to post this, and while I'm only one reader, I really think this is hot! I definitely got off on it. Please write and post more of your stuff!

Conversion Enthusiast
9/10/21, 5:06 AM
@Jack thank you! will have to get started on the next portion soon then
Martin
9/9/21, 9:31 PM
Aww.... I see myself there... the wanna-be bottom, it's me. I want so much to feel more when being fucked, and I'd love to be a slutty bottom boy... So this resonated with me a lot. So would you come visit me, please, Razz???
9/8/21, 10:30 PM
Hot story. Are you planning to do more?

Conversion Enthusiast
9/9/21, 4:25 AM
@Jonanator hoping to if i can get some of a plotline going. i have a couple chapters bouncing around in my head but making them a continuous timeline might be weird and make me wanna edit down the road. I'm glad you liked it though =)

9/9/21, 9:14 PM
@Conversion Enthusiast you welcome. take your time.
Martin
9/9/21, 6:00 PM
Razz, you are allowed to crosspost this story on GSS if you want to. Soren Fitz has done the same. The demon does qualify this as far as I'm concerned.