Recent Comments

11/8/21, 9:55 PM
Love the story so far. I wonder who Issac ends up with?

11/8/21, 10:11 PM
Good question! More coming soon. I’m glad you’re enjoying it! @Jonanator
11/8/21, 2:16 PM
The tempo remains great here! Feels like it’s building toward something—looking forward to culmination. (Culmination autocorrected to cum inflation on my phone. If you know it you know it =P )

11/8/21, 7:35 PM
@Soren Fitz Haha your phone is getting too intuitive!
11/8/21, 2:07 PM
The subtle homoeroticism during the cupcake scene is great and keeps the sexual tempo up. I enjoyed it!

11/8/21, 7:34 PM
@Soren Fitz Love a bit of homoeroticism!
11/8/21, 2:05 PM
The slow burn switch here is good—you used that sex scene in the first chapter to get readers hooked, and the idea here is great.

11/8/21, 7:32 PM
@Soren Fitz Wow. You have a good eye for detail. Well done on picking up on that change of pace. It was a deliberate move to slow down the story and move from sex to romance, reflecting on the character's changing motivations. I appreciate you mentioning it!
11/8/21, 2:02 PM
Your writing style is easy to read and yet flows really well and has great descriptions! Your concision + elegance is admirable. Keep up the good work. (Also, the sex scene was hot.)

11/8/21, 7:29 PM
@Soren Fitz Aww thank you so much. I really appreciate the feedback about my writing style! It's great to hear you are enjoying it.
11/8/21, 2:18 PM
That was fun as hell! I’m looking forward to more. (Clearly I’ve been binging. Sorry for the influx of comments! And if you ever find it in your heart to include mild cum inflation… I ask everyone that. Don’t mind me.)
11/8/21, 1:38 PM
This is a great start! I love his lack of awareness to start! Don't spend too much time on the explanation, at least all at once!

Martin
11/8/21, 2:08 PM
@Drajon Thank you! I can't wait to start to write the second chapter...
11/7/21, 3:25 PM
Intrigued Hope develops and see how plays out like both sort of lose control So aliens or angels? Eh doesn't

Martin
11/7/21, 4:10 PM
@Darmani I want to concentrate on our hero's adventures as an incubus - but I think there should be some room for the backstory as well. Let's see :)

11/7/21, 10:44 PM
@Martin No, please. forward no need for backstory focus. That can draw attention. I appreciate setup. No need for more, its perfunctory, macguffin people. I'm fine.

Martin
11/8/21, 2:08 PM
@Darmani Don't worry, I'll find the right balance... I'm full of ideas already. They keep me from being able to concentrate on my actual day job!
11/7/21, 10:09 PM
Off to a great start, Martin! Anxious to see where you go! Title Option: Mis-Incubus

Martin
11/8/21, 2:07 PM
@absman420 Now I'm almost as flushed as the waiter in our story :) Mis-Incubus... Hm. I have to think about that. Do you think "Suddenly Incubus" doesn't work?