Questions for clarification: With the current edits, what defines straight for people in this world? And even potentially gay? Because if straight people like gay porn and straight guys like blowjobs, aren't they then bisexual? And if everyone wants to "have fun" with Tyler and Marc, then wouldn't that make lesbian women bisexual if they meet Tyler and straight men bi or gay if they have sex with Marc? And do straight women have their own equivalent of sexual things they do with other women but don't see as lesbian? Finally, do gay people in this world have any edits that make them sometimes do sexual things with the opposite sex, like straight people in this story do with the same sex? ...Come to think of it, I could see Sam making some kind of everyone is bisexual edit due to the pressures of previous edits and his intense desire to be straight colliding. *** "It's completely, totally straight for all straight people to be totally attracted to both sexes" Sam wrote in the book. "What the hell are you doing? Can't you just accept you like guys? Making all straight people like both sexes...then they're not straight anymore!" Gabe said. "Screw you. Literally and otherwise." "Well, I guess you're a lot more hunky and I'm into guys and we're friends... so...but I can't believe you would--" "I can't believe you're so judgmental. I wish you knew what I felt li--oh." Sam used his mental connection to the book to write something on a page that Gabe wouldn't see. "Everyone in the world, straight, gay, bisexual, or any orientation; from this moment on, will be totally attracted to both sexes and very horny." "What did you do?!?" Gabe screamed. "I don't know." "I'm fantasizing about girls now...and guys. So confusing." "So's everyone else pal. How do you feel now that you know what it's like for your sexuality to be screwed with? You're as gay as I am straight." "Seriously. Fuck you." "In the bed?" "Hell yeah." *** I'm not sure if that fanfic of mine is due to me being horny or actually understanding the characters. Or both. I await your critique, BlueSuedeWho!

I'm so loving this story, it's my favorite.

Love the story so far. I wonder who Issac ends up with?

Cant wait for the next chapter

The tempo remains great here! Feels like it’s building toward something—looking forward to culmination. (Culmination autocorrected to cum inflation on my phone. If you know it you know it =P )

The subtle homoeroticism during the cupcake scene is great and keeps the sexual tempo up. I enjoyed it!

The slow burn switch here is good—you used that sex scene in the first chapter to get readers hooked, and the idea here is great.

Your writing style is easy to read and yet flows really well and has great descriptions! Your concision + elegance is admirable. Keep up the good work. (Also, the sex scene was hot.)

That was fun as hell! I’m looking forward to more. (Clearly I’ve been binging. Sorry for the influx of comments! And if you ever find it in your heart to include mild cum inflation… I ask everyone that. Don’t mind me.)

This is a great start! I love his lack of awareness to start! Don't spend too much time on the explanation, at least all at once!