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Aug 31, 2023
8/31/23, 10:14 PM
Very good writing! This would be a good screenplay!

9/1/23, 3:24 PM
@[OU812](/user/show/14254) Thank you! LA is in my blood -- can't seem to get very far from movies!
Aug 31, 2023
8/31/23, 8:24 AM
I hope someone continues it!

9/1/23, 3:23 PM
@[Cutlerfan](/user/show/14171) So do I! I really like the concept; there are just too many other ideas I need to get out of my skull. Plus, some of the writers here are so good I'm excited by what they might do!
Gay Harem
9/1/23, 1:15 PM
Comment and receive rewards! :heart_eyes: :smiling_face_with_three_hearts:
8/31/23, 3:21 AM
Can't wait for the next part. Trying to figure out if this went according to Sean's plan or not. Hoping something backfired on him. The Florida imagery with the mutant gators looks like foreshadowing. Is that the compromised tech that will infect other workers or will Patrick have to take them out. Thanks for the twist (and tug).

8/31/23, 4:55 PM
@[TexMuscle](/user/show/10002223) Thank you! (I can't say anything else though. Too spoiler-y.)

8/31/23, 5:32 PM
@[Nocturne13](/user/show/263497) Did Patrick get to alter his own course by selecting the hunter wedge from the wheel? Sounded like he did with his reasoning on why he is qualified.

8/31/23, 6:29 PM
@[TexMuscle](/user/show/10002223) That was a big oops on someone's part. He was absolutely not supposed to be able to choose what is effectively the _brat tamer_ character class.
8/31/23, 2:20 AM
I am really, really loving this.

8/31/23, 2:28 AM
@[Beaner](/user/show/2654278) Oh thank you! This is one of those stories where I thought pretty much nobody would like it.
8/30/23, 9:48 AM
Keep going please
Anonymous
8/29/23, 7:58 PM
This was so hot! So excited to read the next chapter.
Anonymous
8/27/23, 2:15 PM
I got confused. Doesn't he get 3 cards but picks only 1? I'm not following all 3 at each story. I may not be getting it. Not being critical, just trying to follow.

8/27/23, 2:43 PM
@Anonymous When I posted this story on Tumblr, each chapter included a three-option poll. The option that won each poll is the first, largest section of the chapter, which continues the main story. I also wrote short versions of the other two options, which don't continue the story. I think I should have clarified that in the text haha.

Anonymous
8/29/23, 4:59 PM
@[Fred W. Kong](/user/show/476663) thanks

Martin
8/29/23, 5:05 PM
@[Fred W. Kong](/user/show/476663) You could use the branching feature of this site to present the alternative story pathes.
8/29/23, 1:47 AM
Grandotes y vueltos sumisos, asi me gustan~
8/28/23, 4:08 PM
Ese papá si que se puso a divertirse XD me encanta como va la historia, no puedo esperar para leer mas :3 💙💙💙💙