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2/7/24, 3:31 PM
I need another chapter!
2/7/24, 2:01 PM
Not where I was expecting this to go after chapter one, but definitely not complaining! I really like how you were able to just explain something from chapter 1 that most people would just take as porn logic and flipped it into something even sexier than that.
CRH
2/1/24, 8:07 PM
Interesting idea, but I couldn't get through the writing. It's giving A.I. vibes. If not A.I., then bad writing. To hopefully illustrate that I'm not trying to be mean, but give constructive feedback, here are specific things that look A.I., and whether or not if it is A.I. or bad writing, could be touched up. Reusing same words/sentence structure: **Like always,** Marc wore an unbuttoned flowing shirt over a white tanktop and tight speedos. **Like always**, the blue-collar pool boy looked dirty-hot. **his Dad had been dating men barely older than Alan’s 18 years old. His 50-year-old father dating 20-somethings** certainly did not inspire Alan **Then, he would** make Marc obedient. **Then, he would** use Marc to seduce his father. Marc was absolutely his father’s type. **Then, he would** use Marc to dose his father with X-1207 and take control of the household.

Anon
2/1/24, 9:47 PM
@[CRH](/user/show/10047236) Hi CRH, sorry you didn't like my writing. For the record, the repetitive beginning to sentences is an intentional writing technique (Called Anaphora. I'll admit I had to look up the name to respond to this comment, and to prove to myself I wasn't crazy.) It is intended to create a cadence and emphasis. If you had read to the part where the PoV character changes, you would see the intentional repetition of '*Today is the day.*' as well. This is not AI writing, but the intentional creation of a parallel between the thought processes of the two main characters. There is some intentional repetition as the story shifts perspectives, where dialog is repeated but the narration indicates how the words have different meaning depending on who the PoV character is. Personally, I find the repetition enjoyable as it creates a cadence and (hopefully) evokes a hypnotic subtext. Sorry you didn't enjoy it.

Anon
2/6/24, 9:18 PM
@The Author (name hidden due to challenge) For what it's worth, I clocked the use of anaphora. I liked it.
2/6/24, 1:05 AM
I remember reading this back in the day and I didnt know it got continued all these years later. Is there gonna be any future chapters?

2/6/24, 1:09 AM
@[Rad Pits](/user/show/2239300) @[Rad Pits](/user/show/2239300) Yes there will be. It's just that I have several different projects going. So I write a couple chapters and then move to the next project, write a couple there, and then eventually will circle back to this.

2/6/24, 4:44 PM
@[Nocturne13] Thats good to hear! I’m a little hesitant to finish ch 6 cuz i didnt wanna be stuck on a cliffhanger

2/6/24, 4:48 PM
@[Rad Pits](/user/show/2239300) No I don't think it's really a cliffhanger at the end of part 6. I was originally going to go a little bit longer and have a second sex scene right in the same part but I knew I wasn't going to have the time to finish it and I thought that the material was long enough to be a chapter. Now at the end of the next segment there's a little something that comes up that would feel like more of a cliffhanger I think. But that would be a spoiler if I said right?

2/6/24, 6:16 PM
@[Nocturne13](/user/show/263497) If I end up wanting to read more by the end of the chapter (which I think I will) then its ending on a cliffhanger on my books haha. Ive been reading this slowly for now and bookmarking my progress so that i can savor it more

2/6/24, 6:21 PM
@[Rad Pits](/user/show/2239300) Okay well if you need to read something after this then just go read Fracture: Physical
Ribomfairy
2/6/24, 12:13 AM
At this point I think that reading to much stories is making me dumb, I was all the story thing about how weird is the name of the experiment until I realized that is BOYSEX, anyway I love it
2/5/24, 8:05 PM
More please!
2/5/24, 2:41 PM
I thought the first chapter was hot, but this was thermonuclear. That session with Taylor and Roland …. Wow! Don’t rush the next chapter. I need a few days to recover.

2/5/24, 7:20 PM
@[Beaner](/user/show/2654278) Thank you. Just as information for everyone, I'm trying to release a new chapter every Monday. (The new scheduled release date feature is great!) Current plan is 5 total chapters, so 3 more, but that might change as I write.
2/5/24, 5:44 PM
Super hot to find out that daddy made himself gay. Love the fact that he turn guys into boy sluts. Can't wait for more.
2/5/24, 4:20 PM
FANTASTIC
hairyartist
2/5/24, 2:53 PM
awesome thank you!