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2/11/24, 1:45 AM
Hot.

CasualWanderer82
2/11/24, 1:33 PM
@Jonanator Thank you!
Zander
2/10/24, 2:39 PM
An interesting start, I think this story will be different from your other stories.

CasualWanderer82
2/10/24, 8:14 PM
@[Zander](/user/show/10015044) I'm trying something new with this one, for sure. Excited about this project!
2/10/24, 1:51 PM
THis is FANTASTIC! Go ADAM! The references to the smells of the environment makes the story even MORE compelling and 3 dimentional... and easy to find yourself completely captured by your words! THANK YOU. Excellent storytelling. I cant wait for the follow up!

CasualWanderer82
2/10/24, 8:12 PM
@[MChicago](/user/show/10024403) I'm glad you're invested! Stay tuned šŸ˜‰
2/7/24, 9:01 AM
I loved this chapter! With how the last one ended i wasn't expecting something so lovely. One of the best series on the site by far!

2/9/24, 4:53 AM
@[Norismo](/user/show/2849185) Well you know I do like to put a little scare into things. The overarching story is really serious. The characters have been through some bad shit, and there are good and bad things ahead for everyone. But as someone noted in a comment on an earlier chapter, this story is basically set in a sci fi island of misfit toys.
2/8/24, 2:28 PM
Great and hot chapter.
2/7/24, 3:31 PM
I need another chapter!
2/7/24, 2:01 PM
Not where I was expecting this to go after chapter one, but definitely not complaining! I really like how you were able to just explain something from chapter 1 that most people would just take as porn logic and flipped it into something even sexier than that.
CRH
2/1/24, 8:07 PM
Interesting idea, but I couldn't get through the writing. It's giving A.I. vibes. If not A.I., then bad writing. To hopefully illustrate that I'm not trying to be mean, but give constructive feedback, here are specific things that look A.I., and whether or not if it is A.I. or bad writing, could be touched up. Reusing same words/sentence structure: **Like always,** Marc wore an unbuttoned flowing shirt over a white tanktop and tight speedos. **Like always**, the blue-collar pool boy looked dirty-hot. **his Dad had been dating men barely older than Alan’s 18 years old. His 50-year-old father dating 20-somethings** certainly did not inspire Alan **Then, he would** make Marc obedient. **Then, he would** use Marc to seduce his father. Marc was absolutely his father’s type. **Then, he would** use Marc to dose his father with X-1207 and take control of the household.

Anon
2/1/24, 9:47 PM
@[CRH](/user/show/10047236) Hi CRH, sorry you didn't like my writing. For the record, the repetitive beginning to sentences is an intentional writing technique (Called Anaphora. I'll admit I had to look up the name to respond to this comment, and to prove to myself I wasn't crazy.) It is intended to create a cadence and emphasis. If you had read to the part where the PoV character changes, you would see the intentional repetition of '*Today is the day.*' as well. This is not AI writing, but the intentional creation of a parallel between the thought processes of the two main characters. There is some intentional repetition as the story shifts perspectives, where dialog is repeated but the narration indicates how the words have different meaning depending on who the PoV character is. Personally, I find the repetition enjoyable as it creates a cadence and (hopefully) evokes a hypnotic subtext. Sorry you didn't enjoy it.

Anon
2/6/24, 9:18 PM
@The Author (name hidden due to challenge) For what it's worth, I clocked the use of anaphora. I liked it.
2/6/24, 1:05 AM
I remember reading this back in the day and I didnt know it got continued all these years later. Is there gonna be any future chapters?

2/6/24, 1:09 AM
@[Rad Pits](/user/show/2239300) @[Rad Pits](/user/show/2239300) Yes there will be. It's just that I have several different projects going. So I write a couple chapters and then move to the next project, write a couple there, and then eventually will circle back to this.

2/6/24, 4:44 PM
@[Nocturne13] Thats good to hear! I’m a little hesitant to finish ch 6 cuz i didnt wanna be stuck on a cliffhanger

2/6/24, 4:48 PM
@[Rad Pits](/user/show/2239300) No I don't think it's really a cliffhanger at the end of part 6. I was originally going to go a little bit longer and have a second sex scene right in the same part but I knew I wasn't going to have the time to finish it and I thought that the material was long enough to be a chapter. Now at the end of the next segment there's a little something that comes up that would feel like more of a cliffhanger I think. But that would be a spoiler if I said right?

2/6/24, 6:16 PM
@[Nocturne13](/user/show/263497) If I end up wanting to read more by the end of the chapter (which I think I will) then its ending on a cliffhanger on my books haha. Ive been reading this slowly for now and bookmarking my progress so that i can savor it more

2/6/24, 6:21 PM
@[Rad Pits](/user/show/2239300) Okay well if you need to read something after this then just go read Fracture: Physical
Ribomfairy
2/6/24, 12:13 AM
At this point I think that reading to much stories is making me dumb, I was all the story thing about how weird is the name of the experiment until I realized that is BOYSEX, anyway I love it