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Aug 31, 2023
9/2/23, 4:54 PM
I'm a sucker for a romantic possession story and this one is great so far. I hope our officer is treated as well as Ben by whomever continues this tale.

9/2/23, 7:56 PM
@[Moo68au](/user/show/919772) Thank you! I also hope someone treats him well -- there's a lot of potential there!
Aug 31, 2023
9/2/23, 5:11 AM
I am sorry but the moment I saw "Ben Shapiro" I couldn't stop reading all his lines in that nasaly voice and my boner died down, really liked the writing though ngl

9/2/23, 7:55 PM
@[Lavender Lad](/user/show/10019272) Thanks to both you and @Speaks for giving me your reactions. I really appreciate it! And I changed the name.
9/2/23, 5:58 PM
I'm delighted to see you continue this storyline. It's a refreshing take on the genre and full of anticipation and potential. Can't wait to read the next installment.

9/2/23, 6:00 PM
@[Marcus](/user/show/454905) Hopefully coming sooner than the last part. 😊
9/2/23, 4:56 AM
I'm a sucker for process-focused changes and control, so this was a real delight! I'm so glad I finally had the chance to read it.

9/2/23, 6:00 PM
@[time.to.occur](/user/show/1662851) Glad you liked it!
9/2/23, 2:32 PM
What an amazing start to a series!
Aug 31, 2023
9/1/23, 3:11 PM
You named your protagonist “Ben Shapiro”?

9/1/23, 3:36 PM
@[Speaks](/user/show/964546) _“Well, when the war couldn’t kill him and neither could the Republicans, Mother Nature — that bitch — turned to the only thing that could. Cancer. Three weeks. That’s all it took and his body became a memory.”_ There might be a bit of a political riff in this one, but let me assure you with every honest bone in my body: "The characters are fictional. Any similarity to persons dead or alive is coincidental." :)
Aug 31, 2023
9/1/23, 2:40 PM
You write with an amazing & unique voice. This one really stands out. Excellent work. Bravo!!

9/1/23, 3:30 PM
@[Rock Creek Werewolf](/user/show/10002145) Thank you! The idea just sprang into my head the other day when I was walking past a "retirement" complex thinking about how cool it would be if somehow thieves were punished for their thieving. Weird combination, right? And then, of course, sex had to have its place... ;)
Aug 31, 2023
8/31/23, 10:14 PM
Very good writing! This would be a good screenplay!

9/1/23, 3:24 PM
@[OU812](/user/show/14254) Thank you! LA is in my blood -- can't seem to get very far from movies!
Aug 31, 2023
8/31/23, 8:24 AM
I hope someone continues it!

9/1/23, 3:23 PM
@[Cutlerfan](/user/show/14171) So do I! I really like the concept; there are just too many other ideas I need to get out of my skull. Plus, some of the writers here are so good I'm excited by what they might do!
8/31/23, 3:21 AM
Can't wait for the next part. Trying to figure out if this went according to Sean's plan or not. Hoping something backfired on him. The Florida imagery with the mutant gators looks like foreshadowing. Is that the compromised tech that will infect other workers or will Patrick have to take them out. Thanks for the twist (and tug).

8/31/23, 4:55 PM
@[TexMuscle](/user/show/10002223) Thank you! (I can't say anything else though. Too spoiler-y.)

8/31/23, 5:32 PM
@[Nocturne13](/user/show/263497) Did Patrick get to alter his own course by selecting the hunter wedge from the wheel? Sounded like he did with his reasoning on why he is qualified.

8/31/23, 6:29 PM
@[TexMuscle](/user/show/10002223) That was a big oops on someone's part. He was absolutely not supposed to be able to choose what is effectively the _brat tamer_ character class.
8/31/23, 2:20 AM
I am really, really loving this.

8/31/23, 2:28 AM
@[Beaner](/user/show/2654278) Oh thank you! This is one of those stories where I thought pretty much nobody would like it.
8/30/23, 9:48 AM
Keep going please
Anonymous
8/29/23, 7:58 PM
This was so hot! So excited to read the next chapter.
Anonymous
8/27/23, 2:15 PM
I got confused. Doesn't he get 3 cards but picks only 1? I'm not following all 3 at each story. I may not be getting it. Not being critical, just trying to follow.

8/27/23, 2:43 PM
@Anonymous When I posted this story on Tumblr, each chapter included a three-option poll. The option that won each poll is the first, largest section of the chapter, which continues the main story. I also wrote short versions of the other two options, which don't continue the story. I think I should have clarified that in the text haha.

Anonymous
8/29/23, 4:59 PM
@[Fred W. Kong](/user/show/476663) thanks

Martin
8/29/23, 5:05 PM
@[Fred W. Kong](/user/show/476663) You could use the branching feature of this site to present the alternative story pathes.
8/29/23, 1:47 AM
Grandotes y vueltos sumisos, asi me gustan~
8/28/23, 4:08 PM
Ese papá si que se puso a divertirse XD me encanta como va la historia, no puedo esperar para leer mas :3 💙💙💙💙
8/28/23, 3:11 PM
I enjoy the way he resists his changes and keeps the new and old in some kind of balance. I prefer when personalities aren’t totally overwritten (though I understand this is already written, and things might change, lol). But the changes are great and he’s a damn mankiller, getting ass left and right, I love it.
Elm
8/28/23, 2:04 PM
Me gusto!
8/28/23, 12:30 AM
What's the tumblr btw? :)

8/28/23, 2:27 AM
@[Sieg](/user/show/9699) fredwkong.tumblr.com
8/27/23, 7:03 PM
This was so beautifully done, and so evocative. I have loved every minute of this, and I think you should feel very proud to have written it.
8/27/23, 11:53 AM
I honestly loved the peach as well, sad I missed my chance to vote on the Tumblr story.

8/27/23, 12:30 PM
@[Sieg](/user/show/9699) In his tumblr there is shorter stories exploring all the other missed possibilities!

8/27/23, 2:41 PM
@[Sieg](/user/show/9699) Thanks for your comment! Not to worry, I'll definitely be doing more poll based stories on Tumblr in the future.
8/27/23, 12:53 PM
fun stuff. I loved his energy. so dismissive. sexy
johnlee88888888@yahoo.com
8/27/23, 9:21 AM
Novel and sexy, loved it!!
8/26/23, 11:24 PM
I hope each choice gets its own equal screentime haha this was so hot
8/26/23, 6:29 PM
I love this.
8/26/23, 12:54 PM
The gradual transformation was incredible, and the sexual payoff was hot as fuck! I really enjoyed this, and the more cum the better.
8/26/23, 5:36 AM
Wow, I'm actually a bit upset that I missed this when it was first uploaded two weeks ago, but I'm glad that I found it now! Very good work - managing to convey a light, almost otherworldly tone, while still grounding it in reality. Looking forward to the rest of Luke's story and his relationship with Clay, keep it up!
8/26/23, 4:11 AM
You do such a great job of humanizing everyone in this story!
8/25/23, 11:32 PM
So anyway, I love me a good going-back-in-time regret wish fulfillment story, and I'm surprised that there aren't more of them on this site. After all, Himringyo brought us a ton of game-based stories, and with this excellent example I'd think it'd be a rich field to explore, but you wrote this 6/7 years ago and I'll be damned if I can think of any stories that followed suit (I may just have missed them). But like with all your stories I read, this is witty and sexy and not anachronistic, with a bit of the cautionary tale, and a little sweet all at once. I love the way you write.
8/25/23, 11:21 PM
"Scott didn’t know much about Art, but he knew what he liked." I laughed, I cried, I groaned a _lot_. That was snare drum territory and I loved it despite myself.