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1/19/24, 10:48 PM
You could have saved this concept and sold it to an erotica publisher. Like, conventional publishing. They do plenty of mc. (I mean this as possibly one of the greatest compliments I can give) You do an incredible job of balancing the erotic and romantic elements of this story. Even when sex isn't happening, I'm enjoying the characters and how they move around each other. Listening to Jake's internal monologue really adds a ton to the sex scenes, and his introduction to D/s and kink play feels very, very realistic. This story is already one of the greats, Simon and Jake are going to be living in my head for a long time coming.
1/19/24, 5:53 PM
Very very hot, sexy, just great. Lovely plot and set up and romance and porn. Very good story. The tech reveal was nifty. Loved that.
1/13/24, 11:43 PM
Hot story.

1/19/24, 1:02 AM
@[Cutlerfan](/user/show/14171) Glad you enjoyed it! This fic is several years old at this point, but I have been recently been experimenting with some ideas for the characters, so I dusted it off and posted it.
Anonymous
1/18/24, 11:50 PM
It would be nice to see the archive and the stats and upgrades for his pets. There were some pretty interesting upgrade. Which could have great combinations.
StormRaven1217
1/10/24, 11:36 AM
Yey, more of Bull!!! Can't wait for the next part - he might have been forgiven but he can't get of the hook so easily.

1/18/24, 11:17 PM
@StormRaven1217 Thanks - Part Two is now up! And you're totally right - forgiven, but definitely not off the cock.
1/18/24, 1:55 PM
This series is now one of my all time favorites. Well done!
Anonymous
1/18/24, 1:30 AM
So I'm confused. Did Jake get "neurobridged"?

1/18/24, 1:33 PM
@Anonymous No, he didn't. He went on an date with Simon; Simon had Jake submit to him in the park; they went back to Simon's place together.
1/18/24, 9:02 AM
Absolutely loving this!! Can't wait to read more.
1/18/24, 1:40 AM
I love a good fantasy story with mind control… and an ongoing serial…. Swoon!
1/17/24, 11:59 AM
This story is getting dark fast :sweat_smile: I'm so curious what is going to happen next! I'm sure Norris wouldn't mind some HIMBOs walking around :rofl: It's reminding me of the old James Bond films, with Bond strapped to a table with a laser.
1/17/24, 2:52 AM
This is so hot, I'm hard the entire time Jacob is. But hot stories are plentiful in this site. What I didn't expect is how cute Jacob's growing crush on Simon is. Love this!
1/15/24, 9:43 PM
Was this whole thing an extended "Simon says" joke? :stuck_out_tongue_closed_eyes:

1/17/24, 2:47 AM
@[BlindSeer0](/user/show/381024) Lmao I can't unsee it now :rofl:
1/16/24, 11:32 PM
Very interesting. Definitely admire the emotional and physical needs that come from Jacob. And the difference between dominance and control. Though I wonder if dominance will lead to forms of control? And hopefully, 'jockboy' becomes 'jockslave'?
1/16/24, 9:49 PM
Great story, great writing! Tell me there’s gonna be more!
1/16/24, 3:23 PM
This story is so hot. Can’t wait to read on.
1/16/24, 1:21 PM
Ooh perfect combination of romance and spice. And hmm Benny, are you also attracted to our baby boy?
1/16/24, 12:40 PM
The scene with Benny has got me wondering if maybe the effects of the chemical have become contagious or maybe someone is dosing the other guys on the team now. Then again its probably just Ethan's growing confidence or his own inhibitions being supressed.
1/16/24, 11:43 AM
Awesome slow-burn story with a very cool premise!
Oct 31, 2023
1/16/24, 11:23 AM
💚💚💚💚💚
1/16/24, 6:17 AM
Hell yes! Great story. Keep going!!
1/16/24, 4:19 AM
I couldn't put this down. Just the right combination of teasing, romance, and sex.
1/16/24, 1:53 AM
Very sensual
1/16/24, 1:15 AM
Keeps getting better.
1/15/24, 4:09 PM
This is an excellent story. My only complaint is chapter 3 was released a day after chapters 1 and 2 and here I am logging on the next day looking for chapter 4 and… sadness! Seriously though… excellent story!

1/15/24, 6:35 PM
@[Mstr4slvs](/user/show/908350) I added Chapter 1 one evening. next evening, I added chapter 2. But it takes some time to verify new series and chapters released. So it just came out as both of them being released at the same time. I will add chapter 4 probably today, but when it will be released, I don't know. I think tomorrow. About future releases, I will release in days I am off work, or if I stockpile chapters. I literally release everything I have. write a chapter, if I already did 1 chapter today, do it tomorrow, if not just send it. You can expect more soon. I have planned it till chapter 9 as for now, but hopefully more is comming.

1/16/24, 12:57 AM
@[Iriefall](/user/show/10019488) Take your time. No need to rush.
1/16/24, 12:14 AM
Just my kind of story. Really nice.
1/15/24, 10:07 PM
Awesome story. That captured my first submission to a freshman roomate perfectly. Jake is a wide open character...very approachable.
1/15/24, 9:24 PM
Absolutely great start! I really admire your ability to really get into the progression of a story. We've been introduced to the Neurobridge and received some trickles of how it works, really properly met our two main characters (who have really distinctive and unique voices, bravo), and been introduced to a few other characters who could become important later. The little hints of Jake's fantasies about how the Neurobridge could work were really great for keeping up the pace, and also worked really well for narrating his headspace during the actual D/s encounter. I'm excited to see more of this setting! I could keep talking about it for ages lol, but I'm sure you have a plan and I can't wait to see where you intend to go with it.

1/15/24, 10:06 PM
Thank you. Very high praise. I have written the 3 chapters I have planned for this, so I think I have added enough foreshadowing. Now, if I decide to go beyond 3 chapters, who knows? Also, I just want to say I love "[The Transformation of Albion.](https://www.gayspiralstories.com/story/show/476709)" A favorite of mine. Anyone who enjoys supernatural transformation should go check it out. Glad you are posting here again @[Fred W. Kong](/user/show/476663)
1/15/24, 5:34 PM
Man, this is a great piece of writing!!! I'm in awe of what you've put down. You've captured something I've been striving to get on the page: the beauty and emotional bond in the master-servant relationship. Just reading through Simon and Jacob taking their roles as Dom and sub and the relationship and the bond and trust displayed left me speechless. I'm really looking forward to seeing where you go with this and I'll definitely be taking notes along the way.

1/15/24, 9:56 PM
@[New Guy in Town](/user/show/820450) Thank you. I'm trying to express what a healthy D/s relationship would look like. Glad to hear it is connecting with you. Next chapter is more of their bond before we get into more of the Mind Control stuff.
1/15/24, 2:52 PM
Super hot start, can't wait for the rest. Jake most relatable character in all of fiction?

1/15/24, 9:54 PM
@[Cervello](/user/show/354726) Parts of both Jake and Simon may or may not be based on some of my own journey :wink: Very glad you found Jake relatable.
1/15/24, 9:50 PM
Damn that was hot. This has been best reads I had here for a while. Looking forward to the next part and any of your future stories