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Bbeef
8/9/20, 7:39 PM
really a cool one!
8/9/20, 6:07 PM
This has a wonderful potential for a series. I think the grammar and spelling distracted me severely so I would encourage you to ask Martin or one of the more prolific authors to review and correct BUT NOT CHANGE the story. It must be yours and what a wonderful idea this is. Very original and sympathetic. The more potential and twists I see , the more I'm inspired to read. Very original and enjoyable!!
8/9/20, 2:28 PM
Fascinating developments. Please continue!
8/9/20, 2:15 PM
too many long sentences and paragraphs, it's hard for me to read. A shame, since based on the tags I would've loved this story
8/7/20, 11:32 PM
Arroooo...I liked that. I hope Yates becomes a werewolf through some thick creamy dog juice jackhammered deep inside him by the husky blonde.
8/4/20, 12:17 PM
I'm glad everyone enjoyed this so much! I have a follow-on series about werewolves of this style joining the military in modern America, called War Dogs. You can find it here on GSS at this link: https://www.gayspiralstories.com/newStory/show/2156142 Enjoy!
8/4/20, 2:56 AM
A great start and a compelling set of characters. This one really stands out. I really look forward to future chapters.
8/3/20, 8:56 PM
Very good story start. Good enough to be a non-porn story, although it veered that way for obvious reasons. Is porn with a plot in our future? :- )
jamiemboy
8/3/20, 12:02 PM
Loved it so far ! :)
8/3/20, 11:28 AM
Well, every time I copy from word, the space between paragraphs disappears. I think it's just markdown who doesn't fully work the same way as other writing softwares
8/3/20, 7:30 AM
I agree with the crowd, this has a lot of potential. And like potato chips, even if it is similar to other werewolf stories (though none on this site that I can think of), there's always an appetite for more.
Anonymous
8/3/20, 7:19 AM
I hope the sarge can turn into a werewolf too
8/2/20, 8:31 PM
Thanks for the quick note on the formatting guys! I don't know why the copy-paste from my source cocked that one up. I'm glad you're enjoying it, and I'm gonna try to write a good story for each of the War Dogs and a few more besides. And trust me, the sexy stuff is coming soon!
Nutiper
8/2/20, 8:12 PM
*Damn* what a start! From the first few paragraphs, I found myself anticipating (and hoping for) a delicious, gradual development of this promising dynamic between Yates and the werewolf regiment -- and boy, did this chapter deliver! Sets up a lot of hot tension; some *great* worldbuilding going on in the background; and five distinct characters who play off each other really well. And then, that surprise at the end, with Aed's hypnotic voice, making anything he says become the new reality for Yates: whew!! I liked how clearly reluctant Aed was to have to use this power on Yates, but also, how much it affected Yates... Dreaming about it afterward... even thinking of himself as "Roman" for a moment because that's how Aed described him... I'm really looking forward to reading more of this story!
8/2/20, 7:30 PM
Awesome first chapter! I look forward to reading more. Dace, you're one of my favorite authors on this site.
8/2/20, 5:40 PM
l really hope you continue this story. it has a great start.
8/2/20, 1:57 PM
I liked the original story and this shows great promise. More please!
Evan
8/2/20, 9:43 AM
Pity about the formatting glitch. Sorry you have to fix it up but I am looking forward to reading it when it's sorted out. The tags and concept sound really interesting.
8/2/20, 8:38 AM
Hummm.... Dace, You forgot to put paragraph in the text... It's readable, but could you please edit the story to add some space?
Johnthedoe
7/31/20, 5:35 AM
Yeah the original version was much less cramped but my brain added so many interconnected plot lines that trying to fit it in the word count allowance of the challenge scrambled everything. It's taking me quite some time to weave them all back together but I will make it happen.
7/30/20, 3:53 PM
Just wanted to say that I think upon a slight rewrite and expansion this saga would be really quite amazing. The individual scenes were quite compelling and enjoyable for all that I had some confusion on the pov switches and such.
Johnthedoe
7/22/20, 9:15 AM
No worries the rewrite is currently in progress and there'll be plenty of sequels after the true ending of this story. I do have an entire world to take over after all.
7/21/20, 10:31 PM
More please. This needs to be redone and drawn out day by day then continuing after transformation. Excellent story.
Johnthedoe
7/19/20, 5:33 AM
It's coming. I've already started adding everything I yanked out trying to make it fit in the space allowed by the challenge back in. Expect an unknown number of chapters sometime in early August after the challenge ends.
7/19/20, 5:19 AM
Really need more of this
Johnthedoe
7/17/20, 6:57 AM
Yeah it is. The original intro gave more introduction to each of the characters present and made it more obvious the perspective was shifting at each break but it got cut when I was trying (and failing) to condense this monster to fit in under 10k words as per the rules of the challenge. The characters also each had longer sections for each of them and hinted a bit more at who was going next before everything got condensed and confusing. Once I start expanding it back over the multiple chapters it should have had to start with there will be fewer per chapter which should help keep what's happening straight. The idea really couldn't work on such a tight word budget and I wish I caught on soon enough to replace it as my entry with something smaller.
7/17/20, 6:29 AM
Is the story switching first-person narrators in each section? I was just so confused trying to keep track of all these characters and the complex mythology and (I think) the shifting perspectives.
Johnthedoe
7/17/20, 5:08 AM
Don't worry I still have all my design outline info. I won't just be cutting the end off though. Without the challenge limiting everything I can fully stretch it back out into what it was originally. The problem I had was that the story rapidly grew to the point it broke all but one rule of the contest. Supernatural theme: Check Single Submission: Not Happening 10k words or less: LOL we won't even be off the bus at 10k If I'd caught the problem sooner I could've put Wet Dogs on hold and whipped up a replacement entry which fit within the rules but I didn't and so the whole thing turned into a massive mess because I had to try and figuratively squeeze a whale into a shot glass. I'll start restoring it back to how it was originally before editing and continuing it in August after the challenge ends.
7/16/20, 4:55 PM
I like it and would like it to be continued also I think you made a good story that could go in a lot of good directions if carefully plan it and pace yourself.
7/16/20, 11:17 AM
I'd suggest remove the final couple of paragraphs and write all those extra chapters... you do have an entire world takeover to write potentially. I hope you saved the directors cut of this as I'm sure it will be popular. editing is far worse than writing, so many loose threads to unpick. I rarely do werewolves as there are many many stories out there... this one is noteworthy.