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Oct 2, 2020
Anonymous
2/25/21, 4:42 AM
This is so sweet like wow
Anonymous
2/5/21, 12:04 AM
well i hope Cozbi will come to regret his plan but somehow i doubt it now i can't wait to see how the humans react to aliens among them even if they are willing to help and share tech
2/3/21, 9:17 AM
thank you for posting this! To be honest, this is one of my favorite stories in the site! I love your three characters, keep it up!
2/3/21, 7:55 AM
I actually don't think that this story's syntax is horrible. But I think the set-up portion of this story makes a mistake that I see in a lot of works by beginning authors: too many unnecessary descriptions. A lot of times, authors feel obligated to describe every single detail of what a character looks like, even if it has no bearing on the story's actual themes or character arcs. And some of the descriptions in this story actually make it harder to picture the characters, rather than easier; Micah is supposed to be a fit young 5'6' guy who also somehow weighs 200 pounds. And while we get these slow-paced descriptive passages, the human interactions seem incredibly rushed; within the course of a single paragraph, Ballard introduces himself, offers Micah a well-paying job, and Micah accepts it. But all of this is stuff that writers have to learn by experience: how to pace a story, what details to elaborate upon and what details can be omitted. @Meltedzentai, I hope you keep at this, and I'm sure you'll see constant improvement.
Anonymous
2/3/21, 6:45 AM
Your syntax is horrible. The insistence on piling multiple adjectives in front of every noun during the scene-setting part of the story is exhausting and laboured. And it is incredibly difficult to work out what's actually happening.
1/19/21, 12:20 PM
Thank you guys. It took me more then a year to write it. Part II coming eventually.
1/19/21, 1:09 AM
What a fun and magical story. I loved the style of their conversations and the manner of their talk. Great job portraying how a wolf made into a man would act. And I appreciate your underlying theme of respecting the woods and the seen and unseen creatures that live in them.
1/18/21, 12:30 AM
I really enjoyed it, for obvious reasons. Looking forward to seeing additional chapters of this story. you're a gifted writer.
Anonymous
1/17/21, 3:26 PM
This is an amazing story. I can't wait to see more!
1/17/21, 6:24 AM
Great beginning! I look forward to more of this story.
1/17/21, 3:08 AM
A truly beautiful piece of writing and a great story. Very nice shifting of the perspectives between the wolf and the hunter that sets up the relationship between the two. I don't think there will be mind control in the story; it's more about the bond between the hunter and the wolf-man. I'll be looking forward to the next parts of this fairy tale.
1/17/21, 2:20 AM
Well written and interesting. I'm curious to see how this goes. There's some spelling errors, but still a good read. Definitely looking forward to the next segment! (For example, "waste" is filth. You meant "waist" as about the hips on a body)
1/17/21, 2:16 AM
this is delightful to read, can't wait for the next parts!
1/16/21, 10:41 PM
Excelente...
1/16/21, 6:56 PM
I really love the style of writing. Waiting for the MC part.
1/14/21, 12:29 PM
@valestrian, neemie and Dace: thank you so much! @Buster Red: well, don't keep me waiting in suspense - what did you think of the rest of it? @gayeplfan: you win 10 Internet Points for making probably the most unexpected connection to a Broadway show in GSS history.
1/14/21, 4:27 AM
I can't help but think of the scene from "Annie Hall" in which Alvy Singer is in bed, post-coital, with a woman (Carole Kane, I think) who says, in a totally deadpan voice, "Making love with you is a Kafkaesque experience. I mean that as a compliment."
1/13/21, 4:02 AM
I've yet to get a second to tuck into this, but can i just say "wow if the description didn't entice the hell out of me"!!!
1/12/21, 7:14 PM
Oh, *delightful*, well done Noam!
1/12/21, 1:30 PM
Clever, clever, clever...not just the writing, which is on par as usual, but the way you've deftly sidestepped bugsex. This is, very likely, the cheeriest Kafka spoof in existence. Awesome stuff.
1/12/21, 8:02 AM
Totally bizarre but exquisitely written. You've struck a really fun balance of context/storytelling/smut, which, given the prompt, is no easy needle to thread! You've quickly become one of my favorite authors here. The Metamorphosis but make it sexy indeed!
Dec 24, 2020
1/11/21, 11:29 PM
Very cute!
1/6/21, 10:51 PM
Very unike! Congrats to You! J.J.Z.
1/6/21, 2:14 PM
Thanks so much for all your kind words! I'm glad you folks like this one and are having as much fun reading as I did writing! Your feedback really encourages me to keep writing! I honestly was just as surprised when Griffin decided he was going to seek out and fuck the Kraken xD in my first draft.
Dec 31, 2020
1/6/21, 1:42 PM
Awww, I loved Noel's unerring confidence and kind demeanor in this story, and the very hot results of that. It's a very sweet and wholesome sexy story, through and through.
Dec 31, 2020
1/6/21, 1:36 PM
I loved getting a peek into all these different multiverses and I became really invested in seeing who would wind up together! It made me think of a short story called "Happy Endings". Really well-written!
1/6/21, 1:31 PM
I love the character dynamics you set up so quickly and deftly in each scene. You could feel their reputations in the school coming through in the crowd's reactions. I also loved the way you used enemy-to-lovers here -- it felt way better than actual revenge would have and they make a very sweet couple. Incredibly well-written and super hot!
FantasyWithKinks
1/6/21, 4:54 AM
*"Let's talk consent and boundaries"* the kraken says... I don't think I've ever laughed so hard at porn as I have at this.
1/5/21, 6:08 PM
Wonderful! The reality shifts were great!
1/5/21, 3:15 PM
Weird, original and wonderful. And the thought of Jörmungandr - oh gods.