Recent Comments

8/25/21, 7:51 PM
AMAZING new chapter! I love the fixes to Sam's selfish brojob edit and the slow spiral he's on toward just straight up wanting to be gay. The dance around putting him and Marc together is masterful, and I can't wait to see all the changes on the way there. Personally, I'm enjoying the way their constant horniness is getting the better of them and leading them to make poorly thought out edits. I wouldn't mind a mix of occasional smarter edits thrown in, but I'm absolutely on board for horny college bros letting their dicks and butts do the thinking for them ;)

8/26/21, 2:29 AM
Thanks! I originally had more Marc in this chapter, but it got too long so I split it into two chapters. I have a mix of dumb horny edits and at least *moderately* clever changes planned for future chapters. @Curiosity
8/25/21, 11:25 PM
Holy fuck dude, good job.

8/26/21, 12:37 AM
Thanks! Nutiper and MonsterMash62 really helped me punch up this chapter! @Dace
Dec 24, 2020
8/25/21, 3:49 AM
Loved the story, excellent sex scenes that got me hard & leaking, great story build and fun to read. Now, where can I find a Bradley for my own!
8/25/21, 3:18 AM
Interesting. So the sex was hot. That said the logical smart elements of the start seem to have faded into sex crazed changes which aren't as stellar. I hope the gay guy can get a focused mind to like fix the chaos edits. Honestly, I really like the sex parts, thats quite enjoyable, but the story feels less real, less complex, now.

8/25/21, 3:31 AM
Thanks for commenting! I'm trying to write this story as if two horny college dudes got their hands on a reality-altering magic book -- and sometimes they think with their dick (or butt) instead of their brains! @Heru Kane

8/25/21, 3:37 AM
@bluesuedewho Yeah I noticed that. Its just that at the start there was a bit more using their brains and I liked that element. Now Sam is basically a dumb jock and Gabe isn't as nice as he was original, at least it doesn't feel like he was. Also the whole thing with Sam's hole is like "come on, let him get rimmed and/or fucked." Like I said, the sex parts are super sexy and enjoyable. I liked that. It just had other elements that were fun at the start that have given way to pure sex and they are missed by me.

8/25/21, 3:42 AM
I can't promise that future chapters are going to be *exactly* what you're looking for, but I can say that this chapter sets up future changes beyond just Sam loving blowjobs! @Heru Kane
8/24/21, 10:08 PM
Well, hot damn. This is, by far, the hottest chapter so far. Especially the end with the new edits both Sam and Gabe did. Gabe's edit to make apology blowjobs fun for Sam, too, was a nice touch and brought his character back to being more like the other chapters. Sam making an edit to himself to be a fantastic sex partner for anyone made me incredibly turned on at the end of this chapter. Especially the part where he flexed each butt cheek separately. Woof. A few minor things to point out, though. The paragraph starting with "Gabe moaned "Ah fuck, Sam..."" was repeated and that threw me off a little as I was reading. There were also a couple times in this and previous chapters where the textbook was referred to as a notebook. It made it a little confusing. Other things I liked: Everything about Marc, and Sam inadvertently turning him on. Sam admitting he blocked Marc, and then giving in and trying to get a good word put in with Melanie. The man in black being at the GSA meeting. I really want to know more about him. I mean, really, this whole chapter was top notch. I'm looking forward to seeing what other antics Sam and Gabe will get into. Really great world building, great sex scenes, and fantastic characterizations. I can't say enough about how much I'm enjoying this story.

8/24/21, 11:51 PM
Thanks for the feedback! I might go back and tidy up mentions to "notebooks" at some point, but I've done so much editing the past week or so I need a bit of a break! @Proteus

8/25/21, 1:27 AM
@bluesuedewho I don't blame you. This was a lot of story to edit, and you deserve a break from it!
SC Walker
8/24/21, 10:39 PM
Just Fantastic!! My favorite story on here by far. The relationship between Sam and Gabe is so hot but also wholesome. The sex scenes are so descriptive and intense. The anticipation to see Sam finally get fucked is killing me but I know the wait is gonna be worth it.

8/24/21, 11:49 PM
Thanks! I came across some erotic media over the last year or so that kind of opened my eyes to the possibility of stuff that is both playful but also pushes the right kink buttons for me. @SC Walker

SC Walker
8/25/21, 12:52 AM
I'd really appreciate if you could share some of your inspiration! Your stories have unlocked some new kinks for me too. @bluesuedewho

8/25/21, 1:05 AM
It was lots of little things that built up, but the biggest influence was probably my discovery of audio roleplay? I'd never heard of it before, but there were some clips that mixed emotional depth, fun tone, and then hot sex. Most of them were straight erotica, to be honest. No idea how the algorithm directed me there! I *do* remember that the video that pushed me in the direction was this SFW gay audio roleplay https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XQFtn1rsrMA&t=1s&ab_channel=ASMRGav and then I just started googling and found a whole new world of erotica. @SC Walker
8/24/21, 8:31 PM
Glad this is back. this chapter was very fun. Loved trying to figure out exactly what the changes were before the reveal.

8/25/21, 12:23 AM
Thanks! I'm glad the guessing was fun! @Cadek
8/24/21, 9:08 PM
This chapter was just as hot as the last chapter, but I do kind of agree with some of the earlier posters that said that Gabe's attitude seemed to have changed. It's clear that it must have seemed darker in an earlier version, and it's clear that it's better now. But I do hope we haven't lost the fun Gabe just because he's a dom top now. That being said, I'm digging the looser restrictions on heterosexuality that Sam is editing into this reality. It makes me think that maybe if actual reality were like that, maybe things would be better.
8/24/21, 6:14 PM
This is by far my favorite story of the year so far. I love the dialogue between Gabe and Sam. It feels really natural and fun and light-hearted. And I love the edits they’ve made, and seeing the impact on Sam. And it’s soooo damn hot. Thanks for writing Blue and Nutiper. The two of you make an incredible team, and having seen you write these chapters, I know how much work and thought goes into them. I really appreciate it.
Btm
8/23/21, 10:58 PM
Eagerly waiting for the next chapter!

8/24/21, 3:21 AM
It's super close! Just gotta do some minor editing... @Btm