What a sweet ending, and hot to boot. Kinda sad Brett had to leave though, I hope he'll find his own happiness

What a beautiful story! I feel sorry for Brett, but am glad that Harry and Charlie found happiness in the end.

Holy crap that was hot! I enjoyed him treating Derek as an object - I considered that part of the fantasy/magic for that "scene" he did for him. I came back to re-read it and I see the edits made, and I think that will help some of these observations others had. Me, I *thoroughly* enjoyed this.

Gonna be honest, I'm missing the romantic angle to this story. Is it a slow-burn?

I hope to see more of their adventures in the years in between. There is a tension in the story from start to end, it is a pleasure tu read and an unusual setting. Thank you.

I hope Jimmy gets to turn the tables on both Sid and Whit. Or at the very least, Ralph intervenes and helps him take back what's his and get away from that relationship.

I haven't read any of your other stories (but that is going to change) and I see that I've come to this after some edits were made. I love the happy ending of this. Your edits definitely did the trick in making me fully aware that this was just a dark fantasy of Derek's, and I can understand why. I think my favorite part, though, is Razz insisting that Derek quit his job. Having relatively recently ended a job that was doing the same thing to me, it spoke volumes and made me wish I had someone like Razz to have talked me into leaving earlier.

I hope things get better for Jimmy.

Great dialog with the computer. Barista is a jerk....he realizes a dog can understand what they're saying and he leaves? I'd be on my knees asking him how do I too turn into a dog? And I loved the description of scents when he was looking for the Barista after he left.

Intriguing, but not sure quite yet what to think so far.

**SPOILER ALERT - COMMENTS REQUIRE CITING PARTS OF THE STORY** Excellently written - very accomplished in creating a fantasy world, but I actually stopped at first a little over half-way through as I started to hate the magical character thinking he was basically a murderer who didn't care in the least about his boyfriend, in fact held him in contempt, so killed him, and apparently was about to with complete lack of any humanity kill someone else. Dropped my cock from hard to soft. Forced myself to come back after a few minutes, and jumped to the end to find out where the heck this went. Okay, the return scene is kind of sweet and backs it off from all the conclusions the majority of the tale would have the reader jump to - it was a redemption for the Razz character, and the whole story, but unfortunately it came (for me at least) TOO LATE. (The musical "CHESS" famously suffered from this same situation. The character referred to as "The American" acts like a complete douche throughout the entire musical - however, he has a song called "Pity the Child" that explains why he's such an asshole and the staggeringly abusive treatment he suffered as a child. On the West End in London, that song appeared in the First Act and kind of early too, so you knew the whole time BEFORE you saw him act so obnoxiously that there was a reason and you the audience member remained sympathetic to him even as you saw him do apparently awful things. When it was brought to New York, since this was now America, the producers thought that the American audience would want their "hero" to have his big diva song happen right before the end, where big diva power ballads traditionally GO in Broadway Musicals. But it back-fired, it back-fired spectacularly - by the time the song appeared 2 plus hours into the show, the entire audience HATED the character having watched him be a phenomenal prick the whole time, and they NO LONGER CARED if he had an excuse or not, they had ZERO sympathy for him, and a really well-written and unique show died a fast death on Broadway because American audiences hated the American character. This is the way I felt here - if I had been given a clue early on that this wasn't permanent AND especially that Razz was "acting" with his disdain for his boyfriend, and his contempt for his very life and existence, it would have - for me - allowed it to remain a hot, unique fantasy story rather than me hating Razz and wondering what was sexy about a murderous selfish narcissist, who apparently was going to become a serial killer. Again, this is my opinion - I'm sure others went straight through without a problem - but as a Dom Top/Vers the complete lack of care for his Sub angered me, and I've never been able to wrap my own mind around the idea of being just an object or ignored or hated by a partner or partners though I know that some subs do go for that and have a right to find hot what they find hot. I've gone on way long, but I find you an excellent writer and because you do it so well, your story hit hard, if it hadn't I would never have said anything - I just felt maybe I could suggest something that would broaden the appeal of your tale without changing its uniqueness and powerful fantasy qualities. And I know, I might be completely alone in this and others may think I'm nuts or worse, insulting, which very much NOT where I'm going with this missive. It is a compliment of the highest measure that your storytelling was powerful enough and good enough for me to respond this passionately. In the end, I look forward to reading more of your stories, perhaps now "pre-warned" that you won't go to the most egregious extreme in the end. Thanks for writing for the site, and if you read through this missive, thanks for reading it.

I was slightly disturbed but I felt there was plenty of set-up at the beginning to establish that Razz and Derek were in love and that Derek was pretty cognizant about how his partner's magic works. He wasn't worried, so I wasn't very worried. I did feel a bit of anxiety at the false perception of time - two months, and thought that maybe the "solution" to the problem with the shit job was that Razz kept him like that for long enough that he'd be fired from the job, but I was not at all surprised when that was revealed to simply be false, part of the fantasy. Great story and expertly written.

Nice. Can't wait for more

next one please!!!

I seriously appreciate your warning to wait. Haha Will there he sex later on? Also you’re one of my favorite writers. If you ever wanna chat I’m on discord or something. Just saying.

This was nice and hot, and it didn’t need a montage to do it! I appreciated the focus on the single foursome, with the occasional mention of other things happening that added to the general hotness. This was a great story.

I'm really intrigued by this story. There's so many things that *could* happen. After all, he was just imagining Marcello's reaction. I don't know if just one response is enough for you, but I'd love to see more of this!

Well, if you accept hints from readers....where was one really nice dog transformation story, [Fulfilling Their Destiny](https://www.gayspiralstories.com/series/show/105313), where the author knew that dogs have hypersensitive scent glands (humans have about 6 million receptors; dogs have about 100 million) and made it part of the story. Still loving it so far - although maybe it it's more appropriate to Gay Cupid. But enjoying it anyway.

great story!!!!

great start, can't wait to see the "gift" Jimmy gets and what he does with it

Very good. I like the potential here. Dom/sub ethics in BDSM is such a ripe topic.

Woof! Charles was quite the dog, wasnt he. Going in raw like that, he sure deserved what he got.

What next!? Is he dead? What's going to happen now??? So many questions. Can't wait for the next part.

I loved the way you told the story in this chapter, alternating between the present and Charlie's past. Is there more to come?

This has been such a wonderful story

Hmmm, as they get closer to each other and share intimacy, I'm beginning to wonder if the same power that turned Charlie from dog to man or vice versa, could start to work its magic on the narrator. This is a delightful story and very well written character-wise.

Loving this! The imagery was vivid and enthralling. I like how Trey's hold on Chui is continuing to escalate in a way thats certain to take him by surprise soon. Hoping to see Chui even more helpless and brainwashed as his body opens up and accepts Trey as its owner. Can't wait to see what's next!

Oooh, I really enjoyed this! Very sensual and descriptive, without losing any emotion.

I kind of hope for an ending where the world is put back to normal. Maybe thanks to the black suits or the shawled ladies, but somehow Sam and Gabe lose control of the book and the world goes back to how it was before they got their hands on it. But thanks to their own edits to safeguard them, the changes made to them cannot be reverted. So while the world returns to normal, Sam and Gabe (and maybe Marc?) remain these sex-beasts and of course no one finds it unusual in the least. Only the boys remember something is off, but are helpless to fix it. I dunno, I both wish and don't wish for an ending like that.

What....Oh man you got me on my seat here. I need more.