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11/8/21, 7:11 AM
You know it's a good story when you check for the next chapter multiple times a day :) (not trying to sound impatient, just a compliment)

11/8/21, 9:21 AM
@italianstalian1987 same

11/8/21, 11:20 PM
Thanks! It's written, just needs another round of editing. @italianstalian1987

11/9/21, 4:04 AM
@bluesuedewho Nutiper and MonsterMash told me to tell you that no edits need to be made :)

11/12/21, 4:14 AM
@bluesuedewho if anything, Sam and Gabe have only shown us how important it is to edit before you publish something :) and so sorry to hear real life has been rough, but hope things are getting better!
11/11/21, 9:44 PM
Ooooh, nice! I specially loved how you successfully wrote against our expectations. The path you took was refreshing without compromising the coherence between the characters' goals and their actions. I was awed by Tanner's change of attitude once Devon left the house. That guy sure gets intense when his pleasure is at stake! He seems adamant to not let anyone ruin his fun time among mere mortals. I also really liked how his gift to Devon and his father became a trap, both figuratively and literally. I only wish Devon had been more reluctant to get naked and to get a massage. It only seems fair given he's in front of his father who until a mere few hours was a complete wreck. I understand he might have been affected by Tanner's suggestion of showing off his hot body at the lockers, but not having any reference to that on the massage table scene made me feel confused. Yet, Tanner talking through the ear pods while the most perfect anilingus was being performed made any possible confusion dissipate from my brains. What a hot sex scene! Seriously, great chapter. I'm super happy every time I see an update from this series.
11/7/21, 4:09 AM
might not have updated yet as there are still out of place perspective changes. otherwise great story

11/11/21, 4:20 AM
@Human Dragon Fruit I did some more work on it. Thank you and everyone for the feedback.
Martin
11/10/21, 11:06 PM
This has been a very lovely experience. Cute and really well written. A bit long for my usual taste, but I'm really looking forward to the second chapter!

11/10/21, 11:39 PM
I really appreciate that! Thanks for trying it even despite the length, haha. I’m not sure I could have divided it any further without having no-sex chapters, but hopefully people will still read it! (And thanks for advertising mine and Diego Blue’s Cupid exclusives on Spiral!) I hope you enjoy chapter 2. Chapter 3 should come out in a week or two! @Martin
11/10/21, 10:12 PM
Wow, that's another steamy chapter! I didn't expect the outcome action for this family, but l sure enjoyed the vivid description of the depraved yet oblivious tongue-ass intercourse! Please carry on with Tanner's tour around town in corrupting every family in ever more depraved ways...all in the name of improving them! ;) One thought though, seems like the families visited so far are all like broken/trashy. Are you planning on also "improving" the lives of some more clean-cut, well-behaved families...or perhaps some upper class snobbish ones that need some proper "teaching" in manners? Of course, it is up to you to plan out your story as you wish, I look forward to reading whatever you have on mind for the rest of the congregation! ;)
11/10/21, 6:19 PM
your pacing is so tortuously good!!!

11/10/21, 9:47 PM
@Razz TFs I do know how to keep people hooked!
11/10/21, 2:40 PM
You tease! But that was very good timing and you kept the sexual tempo up just right until the crash. I’m looking forward to seeing if Chris can get over this.

11/10/21, 9:46 PM
@Soren Fitz We love a good tease!
11/10/21, 2:37 PM
This was very fun and very hot, and I’m trying to learn from your work here on how to pace my sex scenes effectively, too! Very well done.

11/10/21, 9:40 PM
@Soren Fitz Great to hear the repsonse is good to the sex scenes. They're by no means perfect, but feel free to take some inspiration from them!
11/10/21, 8:41 PM
Thank you for one more great chapter. I know this is not what many readers wanted or expected. I had a feeling that you would go in another direction, and I am glad for it. It is actually really hot that in some sick twisted way these families are actually getting better thanks to Tanner. James Stuart has turned his life around and has in many regards become a better father for his son. Pastor Pete must surely see the change. If giving in to these sinful and wrong father-son feelings is making these changes happening, then those wrong feelings starts to feel good in the twisted mindsets of these families. It might help the pastor accept his own sick feelings if he sees how much good that can come from them.
Anonymous
11/10/21, 6:20 PM
I'm not usually one into rimming but this was amazing!! Can't wait for the next chapter.