Recent Comments

JaketheNerdyFox
5/13/22, 9:07 AM
Wow what a story, love all the fun coil details and was surprised to see it turn into such a dramatic scenario. Very fun :3
5/13/22, 2:33 AM
A brilliant chapter overall, with a heartfelt, sweet and wholesome last part. Loved this, and you did a brilliant job.
5/13/22, 2:17 AM
This was the hottest, wholesomest hypno story, and it was so well done! Grats Twan!
Jonanator
5/13/22, 12:42 AM
Can't wait for more.
bigsad
5/12/22, 10:32 PM
The coils to the vore to the tentacles? Pushes all the right buttons. Plus some neighbor drama? I think this was your best chapter yet.
5/12/22, 7:31 PM
Welcome to the club of authors! The idea of your story is very nice, but please consider using Grammarly and a proofreader from the Discord to improve the language! Still, loved the idea!

5/12/22, 9:19 PM
@Transformheaven thank you, i will try to used it!
5/12/22, 6:42 PM
Upping the ante perfectly. A perfect mix of sweet and spooky, as all the best fairy tales.
5/12/22, 6:25 PM
Another awesome chapter. Loving the fact that Xander is so shy about what he feels and how Janus is so dedicated in helping him out.
5/12/22, 4:21 PM
Loved this and looking forward to reading the rest. Janus is so sweet!
5/12/22, 4:12 AM
I like this series tremendously! Thanks for writing it! A few little grammar comments: Your prepositions (on, in, etc.) are confusing. Secondly, I know you are doing this in 3rd person, but sometimes its unclear as to whose perspective we are in with reading further in the paragraph.

5/12/22, 3:01 PM
@tankonpoint Thanks for your comment! Oh yeah, prepositions are a bane of me since English is not my native language and the "on/in/at" is usually confusing to me, sorry about that. I will check how to make the perspective clearer in the future. Thanks!