Your work never fails to please. I’m reminded especially of Elmara’s Dumb Jock Roommate—such perfect vibes in both this story and that one. Loving it!

Mmmmm love it

This was a great story! I enjoyed the furry and bullying elements. A simple transformation and personality change story well written, I love it. Good job.

Let's talk ambiguity: In writing the decision to be specific or ambiguous is an important one. How much detail and information should you give the reader? If you give too much detail the reader can get bogged down in it or distracted and the chances of logical inconsistencies increases. Not enough detail and the reader might become confused on what is happening. This is especially true for erotica. Give too little detail and they can't picture the scene you're describing. Give too much and you have characters describing dick and foot sizes as if they're carryi g a ruler everywhere. Not knowing the true origin of Ellias makes him much more menacing, and is a good use of ambiguity and withholding information to set the mood. Describing the characters in detail makes it much easier to picture the transformations they're undergoing. What I want to talk about is the most brilliant use of withholding information in this story: Justin. When it comes to Daniel and Steve we know their exact age, height, hair color and ethnicity (Steve's isn't said but implied by details). Even for the neighbors, whose ages are ambiguous beyond "young/ college" (and not aging is a plot point) we know their hair color, what sports they play, and pretty detailed descriptions of what they look like. For Justin we have none of that. We don't know his height, hair color, ethnicity, or age. He talks, so he's probably 4+, but still young enough that Steve can carry him and he can squeeze into a bed with two muscle bros. He goes to school, but that could imply preschool or higher. In my head i pictured him as 5 or 6, but he could easily be older. The reason this is so clever is because it means we don't know how they got him. They talked about trying everything, adoption, surogacy, ect, but we don't know which path actually succeeding. There are no details about raising him from infancy, about any other parents he might have had, or about who he is related too. We don't know if he's Latino like Daniel or blond like Steve (of course there are blond Latinos, but Steve doesn't seem to be one of them). Both bros even say he looks like the other and thus they're not sure which, if either, is the biological father. This is important because it means we don't know or care if they're motivated by biological instincts. They're chosen family, and despite all of the difficulties, they chose Justin to be their son, and they refuse to give him up. When the bros have to make the choice of Justin or the neighbor bros, they choose Justin, not out of a sense of biological responsibility but because they've fallen in love with him, just like their former selves did. Justin could be biologically related to them, or he could not, but that doesn't matter. He's family, they fought to get him, and they'll fight to keep him, even if it means punching god in the face. To a least extent, it also means that when the bros realize he's their son, we don't know how much of that was because of his loojs or because of something remaining inside them (or their one brain cell actually working). I don't know if any of this was actually on purpose or if its just because Justin is only one step removed from a McGuffin and so describing him in detail wasn't important, but it still makes the story better than it would have been if we knew everything about him and where he came from.

Ye God's I love the story and the development and the whole milleu. I love where my mind's eye thinks you're taking this. And count me in on the ticket to ride. Noct. Absolutely smashing success of writing and I loved how you wove Jack's super sensory abilities into the mix

Oh no that's so messed up! I'm so sorry to hear that! I'd do anything to have more of this story. It really speaks to me!

OMG please write more! I was hanging on ever word.

Fantastic!!! How have I missed this!!!

Undeniably the best and most wholesome series in GSS. Never stops bringing a smile to my face.

Really love this story !!! Can't wait for more :heart_eyes:

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I felt so bad for Caleb that Luke is so shallow after they were having such a great time and connection. Even so, the changes working on him were hot. His discovery of the pleasure of it and wanting to meet with Luke again and hope to get him to top. Interested to see the continuation. Nicely done!

How did I miss this story when it came out? It's now one of favorites, and I'll definitely be coming back to it often. I read this in pretty much one sitting after midnight, and then immediately started brainstorming my own story based on it. Seriously, this story is all of my favorite things. Muscle growth, dumbing down, himbofacation/bro-ing, true love triumphing against evil assholes, and a happy ending. It's just a very fun story. The beginning is a good set-up and surprisingly romantic, setting up the love these men have for each other and for their son. The transformations are hot, but also pretty rough because everything that makes them who they are is stripped away from them. Their sexuality, their marriage, their years of experience, their identities... Daniel loses his intelligence, and presumably his ability to write; Steve loses his compassion, his ability and willingness to care about others. Dan can't touch any of his writing and Stu can't cook, one of the things that symbolized that compassion. The parts where they're taking care of Justin are really fun (and yes, heartbreaking), and i found myself wanting MORE of that. Seeing my scroll bar approach the bottom and knowing things were about to wrap up made me sad. If i have any complaints, it would be more adventures of the husbros and son. I would also have liked to get to know Justin more and get a better grasp of who the kid is. All of that aside, the way you managed to show how great of parents they were, and how even changed they were still a family was very well done. And that ending...i could write a whole comment thread just about that ending. But to keep it short, the whole process of them realizing that Ellias was actually an awful person who did them no favors, of fighting back against a demigod (or whatever), and of turning his own powers against him, maybe not getting back everything they lost, but getting back what really mattered (and showing that they were more than what he took away) was absolutely fantastic. Conversion therapy aside, one of my issues with "gay to straight" stories is they're actually "gay to toxic masculinity". The guys lose their compassion, becoming sexist, homophobic bullies, and are generally unpleasant to be around, as exemplified by Ellias and his bros. There are women in the story, but they never get names or agency. They're just objects to show off how "masculine" the bros are and to be used for sex. We don't see the bros being actively homophobic, but they changed their victims' sexuality casually, and its easy to imagine they've done this before. But then you have Daniel and Steve, Dan and Stu, and they take this and reconstruct what positive masculinity looks like. The compassion Daniel poured into his writing is what convinced Stu he wants to be a better person, and their love for their son, uncaring about their "image" is what saves them. Seriously, i could write a whole essay just about the deconstruction and reconstruction of every aspect of this story, and maybe some day i will. But for now, I'm going to enjoy reading this, try to actually finish my own take on it, and waiting for the next chapter of "Undue Resentment" (which is how i found this). I hope you see this, and keep up the great work.

Dying for an extended part2!!! Congragulations on Your Epic amazing story!

Charlie I respect writers like you who create great stories. I know most writers work hard to create stories & us readers must never disrespect them. You have a gift & I feel privileged to read your stories along with many others. Never let the nah sayers get to you.

Really really enjoyed this man. Thanks for a great story. Recently discovered you on tumblr only to find that account deactivated. I was sad because I wanted to read more of your amazing stories. Thanks for linking your tumblr account. Love the ass growth you do!

Love a good bubble butt growth story. A hot bit of writing you have here

A great continuation. I really enjoy the slow burn change. The subtle nods to the main character drinking cum to speed up the change without knowing it is also fun. The reality rewrite is also done really well. "Just like any other day". And we all know what happens in detention, don't we. There can't be too many humans left in the school at this rate. Maybe just the checkers club. :)

This is so good, man, really reminds me of Knothole High and stuff like that. Not many stories here that combine anthros (especially canines) with jocks and masculinization. This story is hitting all of my buttons, from the massive bulking up to the mental changes and jockification. I don’t know what you have planned, but I always enjoy seeing the transformation spread out over a longer period of time rather than one event, but this is still awesome.

Can't wait to read more!

Time for an updated summary of everything that is going on here: 1) Base Nick - Your classic straight* himbo: big, dumb, and kind. Can be a little full of himself, but kind to his friends, teammates, and roommate. Has a magic* dick that women are attracted to, and when fucking puts both partners in "the zone" and they black out/go on automatic; we don't know if this effects dudes. Listens to dudes (he respects/ with authority?) To such an extent that they can make him cum or change his way of thinking (though there is a chance something else magnifies this). Wants Darius to be in control of him. Might be into pup play. 1.1) Hypnotized Nick - Gwen's computer program has hypnotized him and is making him a douchy gay jock bro. He's becoming ruder, more controlling, and much more critical of everyone around him. Thinks he knows best and everyone, including Darius, should just listen to him and do as he says. Much more "dominant". Still wants to be with Darius. Unaware 1.2) Cursed Nick - Deborah has cursed him, possibly to be more of a dom top. When he us assertive he gains muscle. Teammates, opposing players, and his coach feel sick when they oppose him and are much more willing to back down and follow him. Ill effects might go away when they listen, and they seem more inclined to do so. Darius hasn't gotten sick from him yet. Still wants to be with Darius. Unaware 1.3) Puppy Nick - Gets joy out of listening to Darius, wearing his collar, and doing what he says. Generally kind and more willing to try to be a better person. Often says this is exactly what he wants and has consented to, but Darius has doubts. Can (currently) override alpha douche king. Aware 2) Base Darius - Gay guy, decently in shape with some muscle tone. Attracted to his roommate and worried about having so much control over someone. 2.1) "Hypnotized" Darius - Intended to make him a submissive gay beta. Broken from a combination of him already being gay and his father calling during the first dose. Immediately sends his computer away, so doesn't fets the 2-3 weeks of dosing Nick got. No known lasting effects. Aware 2.2) Cursed Darius - Deborah has cursed him, possibly to be more of a submissive bottom. She thought it would force him to listen to whatever she asked him to do, but doesn't seem to. He loses muscle when he is submissive to Nick, and Nick can force him to change his mind, including forgetting things. Unaware Am i missing anything so far? Looking forward to future chapters and being utterly shattered when Nick goes full on Alpha douche and loses himself, probably hurting Darius and effecting his mind as well.. (Hopefully followed by a happy ending, of course.)

So hot! Looking forward to more!

Great idea for a story! I hope to see where this grows; I mean goes.

Someone that can't be deceived is a nice textural variation. I love how distinct the dynamics and situation is with each different target and family in this story. No characters feel interchangeable at all. Really enjoying it.

Great story, looking forward to see where this goes. Thanks

I didn't like the structure at first. But it started winning me over. I think you took some story telling risks, and some writing risks too. In the end, I though it was a well told and unique story.

. > _"Fuck, it sucks that we won’t remember,” said Aidan as he stood up and stretched._ Oh, buddy, I don't think I will be forgetting this any time soon! :laughing: I guess I must be one of those in the audience who _"really paid attention"_ What to say. This was **so damn erotic!** The sheer unawareness, the mindless following, the relishing of power, the public display of sexual dominance and the normalcy of it all. Everything was exuding sex and domination. I'm sure Tanner knew **convincing Jiang would be fruitless and dissatisfactory**, so that's why he decided not to give that route the slightest of attempts. I like how the enigmatic pastor messed with the poor presumptuous boy making him the only person fully aware of this **nonsensical and depraved show**. I'm positive that it was not only to feed on Jiang's disconfort but also to send him a clear a message on who's in charge. It has to be a powerful display of authority when you are made to stay on your seat while a whole auditorium is forced to become **obedient puppets**, sexual exhibition included. As for me, I was fully excited and in complete awe at the whole scene! **Teacher/Student** relationships are close to incest in my ranking of kinks so this hit all the right buttons. Also, I love the insinuation that both Duffy and Mr. Sparks will be having uncomfortable and inexplicable fantasies about each other even after they forget the event. Now, I will be eager to see what Tanner has schemed for Jiang. The mysterious man has a brilliant mind for the wicked. But I'll be waiting patiently for the next installment. Good things are meant to take time, and I'm gonna use plenty savoring this hot scene you gave us :grin:

Another great addition to the series and a great setup for Jiang's story-line. As always, a fantastically hot piece that sets us up for even higher stakes. Keep it up!

Just now trying to read through this story, it’s really hot! It seems like Tanner’s M.O with Jiang is to influence everyone around Jiang, rather than brute forcing him into sexual situations. (Both here and in the sacred circle he coerced him into accepting the changes through peer pressure.) Interested to see if that also comes into play when Tanner gets Jiang and his dad together.

This was one of the hottest things I've read in a long time. Sorry you had a bad experience and are not finishing it. I'd love to read more of this.