Recent Comments

3/27/24, 3:53 PM
Very good intro like to see where it goes, turn one into a mannequin with a hard cock
3/27/24, 12:28 PM
Very clearly inspired by Campus Magnum, by Berylforge. Interested to see what happens next!

3/27/24, 3:01 PM
@[Hinner](/user/show/10013948) I did get my inspiration from Campus Magnum by Berylforge, who knows, maybe if it'll be a hit we'll do something together haha.
3/27/24, 9:18 AM
Hot af so far, Definitely looking forward to any updates you do for the story! Not sure how long the story is, but can make a table of contentt for all the cards thats effecting the players, to help the readers keep things straight.

3/27/24, 3:00 PM
@[Speed99](/user/show/909251) I will make a table of content, right now I've got a few cards written down. I won't make an online list right now 'cause there isn't much, but I will make one when the time is right. Thank you for the feedback :)
3/27/24, 2:46 PM
Definitely want to see more!
3/27/24, 1:36 PM
Would love to read more . Seems hot!
R P
3/27/24, 1:08 PM
This is hilarious and hot
Anonymous
3/27/24, 10:57 AM
Oh this is going to be a good series!! Can’t wait for more.
3/27/24, 10:57 AM
I would love to see more, if you don't mind
3/27/24, 6:57 AM
Fun story. You've got a great ear for dialogue
3/27/24, 4:02 AM
Ooh this is a very interesting but also Hot story. I never thought a manuscript style story would be this so hot.

3/27/24, 4:08 AM
@[DJeiKier](/user/show/10021357) Thanks! I liked the idea of seeing what I could do without any visuals.
Dec 25, 2021
3/26/24, 10:44 PM
What a beautiful, and hot, Christmas story!
Mar 24, 2024
3/25/24, 7:42 PM
Dropping us right into a mystery! This will be fun. I couldn't quite picture the full situation the narrator and Ben are in (lying on the floor, wrists and ankles bound?) Seductive start! I can't wait to see what game the captor has in store, who this amusingly fiendish dude is, and what his plans are for our three rugby studs. 🏉💪
3/24/24, 5:01 PM
This was beautifully conjured, you managed to make it bittersweet without making it tragic. However, it needed more 'meat' in the middle, you had a lot of short sentences. It does not mean the story is bad per se, it's really really good, but I feel this kind of story would have worked _even_ better as a longer novella.

3/25/24, 11:50 AM
@[Twan Andersen](/user/show/10018149) Thank you and it's true yes. This story is honestly the one that I would want to revisit the most, if I ever did that. I think giving the characters more breathing room to fully develop their relationships would be a pretty good idea. Also setting up some of the payoffs better. :heart:
Mar 24, 2024
3/25/24, 8:19 AM
I love the story, for someone who have an underwear fetish, this certainly hit the spot... MORE!!!
3/24/24, 7:51 AM
I seem to have found a small discrepancy in the story, so I thought I would mention it. In the previous chapter I recall Rico is still in high school. In this chapter Mickey just turned 18 and Rico says he's 6 years older than Mickey. That means Rico is 24 and still in high school?

3/24/24, 2:54 PM
@[boi98229](/user/show/10027285) Good eyes! So, the Black Tiger stories are not in any real chronological order - in most of them. Rico IS a Senior in high school, but in the stories where Tigerboy is his sidekick, these occur later in his career when he’s in his mid-twenties, so Tigerboy can be a teenager.
3/24/24, 7:26 AM
I don't know exactly what it is you do, but it seems the way you weave details of the mind control techniques into the story makes it almost magical. i feel pretty familiar with standard kinds of hypnosis techniques but you invent other techniques which you really bring alive and make them completely believable. You are turning me from being a goodie-two-shoes to a bad-boy who wants the crime lords to enslave and use the hero in whatever way they want (especially, as Ab3 puts it, to turn this superhero into a bitch in heat!) Thanks so much for this hot entertainment.
3/24/24, 4:13 AM
Loving this series!
Anonymous
3/23/24, 11:53 PM
Super Hot!!
3/23/24, 10:08 PM
As always I love your stories… and as always, I am massively jealous of the bottom. Lucky lucky Jun.
3/23/24, 9:30 PM
Hot and entertaining reimagined of Cinderella. I was hoping at the end Sindre would tell the truth to Dom, but oh well. Its still a good story.
3/19/24, 6:56 PM
Just as lovers and friends come into our lives at the right time, so too do stories just like this one. Profoundly touching, in more ways than one 😉🤪 seriously though, thank you for writing such a beautiful work and sharing it for others to enjoy.

OneTimeWriter
3/23/24, 7:06 PM
@[ArcoNorth](/user/show/10032789) Thank you for reading it, and following my beloved characters on their journey! :)
3/23/24, 1:16 AM
Oh god, this is so hot. Them fucking each other from their original body. Thats such a hot concept. Lookinng forward to where this story would go.
3/23/24, 12:27 AM
H fucking SHIT this is so damn good!!! 🥵🥵🥵🤤🤤🤤🤩🤩🤩🤩
3/8/24, 3:20 PM
Really hot, great stuff! I like these stories that seem like a personal fantasy from the author, always feels intimate. Small writing tip: remember that character dialogue gets a new paragraph each time the speaker changes. > "Hello," I said, "how are you?" > "I'm fine, thanks." they replied. It's usually always best to add line breaks if there's a lot of action between the dialogue, too. > "I ate the hotdog." I said, rubbing my stomach. > "Then I ate the chips." I said tossing the empty bag into the trash. >"Then I drank the soda." I finished, replacing the bottle cap. Makes it easier for the reader to follow.

3/8/24, 6:54 PM
@[bak2jak](/user/show/141970) [https://i.pinimg.com/736x/f5/09/d6/f509d62a8d7e7f8e327bbc342db8cd43.jpg](https://i.pinimg.com/736x/f5/09/d6/f509d62a8d7e7f8e327bbc342db8cd43.jpg)

3/22/24, 3:46 PM
@[Skyboundbull](/user/show/10006422) While waiting to be asked to give advice can be a good general rule at times, I think their intentions were pure and their tone was very encouraging and constructive. Part of posting any kind of creative work on a public forum is getting criticism. And I'd love to get criticism as thought through and positive as @bak2jak wrote here.
3/22/24, 7:48 AM
Brad wouldn't be able to control his impulses and cast another spell, would he? :p
3/17/24, 12:48 PM
Love this series

3/22/24, 5:42 AM
@[SirD](/user/show/946083) Glad you do! It’s fun to write!
3/14/24, 1:35 PM
So hot! Hope you continue this story!

3/22/24, 5:41 AM
@[S.147](/user/show/10025257) Thank you! Any suggestions/comments are appreciated!
Itsmethevoid
3/22/24, 5:23 AM
Ughhh yes I looove where this is going …
3/21/24, 9:27 PM
Brad is slowly corrupting himself to be a bottom slut and im into it.