Recent Comments

7/18/23, 10:59 PM
As always, another wonderful chapter, Soren. And it's great to see months of preparation, planning, and writing come to fruition! The interactions between Talley and Nate were the highlight of the chapter for me, personally, and I can't wait to see how more outrageous the two boys will get in their efforts to prove their manhood to the other. And your refs, as usual, are all mouthwatering! You have _very_ good taste! Keep up the great work!

8/5/23, 7:49 PM
@[Franco Apollo](/user/show/10029736) Two bottom-coded frat boys with a chip on their shoulder? Who knows what shenanigans they'll get up to... I'm really glad you enjoyed it; it took me long enough to finally get it out, but I'm glad I did!
7/24/23, 1:49 AM
This really hits my buttons and the writing is very good. I'd just say don't try to ram the descriptions in so hard at the start. It's jarring and the reader knows you're trying to get the descriptive stuff in too much, but you can tell later on you're way better at slipping the details in then. I think it's a lot more natural for you to take your time on the descriptive bits than try to push too much in right up front, and you've got the writing talent to do that for sure!

Author (name hidden)
8/5/23, 4:50 PM
@[edhypnofan](/user/show/10002490) Yeah, sorry. Was my first time writing a TF story, and I was a bit rushing to not hit deadline, could not make the description smoother. But I felt it was needed to get a bit of an idea of what everyone looked like early on. Thanks!
7/19/23, 10:34 AM
I love this world so much. The character mean a lot to me and their interactions feel so real and natural. The relationships are important so knowing that Jasper has to keep a secret and deceive Rhys is painful. Nova. Oh dear. If you're going to accept being converted into a pet, that mind-blowing sex training is probably a good trade for paying that price. That was a great scene. My favourites of this chapter are the attitude and personality planning with Nova and his rehabilitation person/trainer. As always, I can't wait for more.

8/5/23, 2:41 AM
@[Evan Jackson](/user/show/133763) Cuddle-switch says: "Evan! Our more most consistent and frequent commenter -- and always such great and in-depth comments! We're loving the interactions as well. That's definitely my favourite part. The mind-melting sex kinda had me giggling as I wrote it. That was fun." You know how much it means to me to hear your thoughts and have your encouragement! <3 Thank you for being one of our most constant readers and supporters. <3 <3 <3
7/17/23, 1:07 PM
Fives everywhere. Wish I could give more. What an amazing series.

8/5/23, 2:39 AM
@[Beaner](/user/show/2654278) Cuddle-switch says: "Thank you so much -- it really makes me feel good to see positive numbers on my first series that I've ever written." I also really appreciate you encouraging us and taking the time to share your thoughts! Thank you!
7/17/23, 1:06 PM
Still very hot!!! Nova, nooooooooooo, don't be fooled by the hot sex and the brainwashing, think of your friends! I guess next chapter will have Jewel's side of things. Oh boy, that auction seems like the next big event in the story.šŸ˜° Hyped!

8/5/23, 2:38 AM
@[BobbyBlobfish](/user/show/700733) You're right on the money with what's coming down the line for the auction! We have to make Nova and the others suffer sexily as much as possible before we give them a happily ever after ending, right? Right? Thank you so much for your encouraging comment! It's great to hear what you're thinking! Cuddle-switch agrees and says that you still aren't as hyped as he is! :P
8/3/23, 11:07 PM
This was fantastic. Really loved the well developed characters, the humor, and sex was filthy and hot. Iā€™m so into Chase and Oliver, I would love to read more of them. Good job!

8/5/23, 1:23 AM
@[Charlie Walker](/user/show/1052782) Ah, Charlie! Thank you so much for the kind words! I'm glad you took a liking to Chase and Oliver! And who knows what lies next for the Stallions of St. Sebastian's University? :shushing_face:
8/4/23, 1:22 PM
oh wow! Please keep the brainwashing elements alive. I am hoping that FRED finds a little addiction. I am INTO him. THANKYOU. Your writing is fantastic.
Anonymous
8/3/23, 12:36 PM
this story keeps building and buildingā€¦ so hotā€¦ so well written!!!
8/2/23, 4:25 AM
What a hit! Super hot. My phone autocorrected that to super big, and y'know what, that too!

8/2/23, 10:52 PM
@[Ganymede and Co.](/user/show/956270) Well you know what they say, ā€œGo big or go home!ā€, and I certainly like 'em big! šŸ˜œ Glad you enjoyed!
8/2/23, 10:00 PM
I loved the little details and personal touches that made all the same-looking people different. Not my favourite thing in the world but I liked the characters and the happy ending. :kissing_heart:
8/2/23, 7:12 AM
This was very hot, I always love diversity and representation in porn and it was great imagining more than just a typical white guy. The final sex scene felt like it was what I was waiting for, and it was super sexy.
8/1/23, 10:51 PM
I love pecs, so this was a great addition to the story! The only thing that could have made it even better would have been some lactation, but who am I to complain?
7/30/23, 9:52 PM
Oh good LORD, what an ENDING! Iā€™m a sucker for sweet stories about love, and watching Will and Connor confess their feelings is so cute. And yet you did a great job providing a sinister undercurrent: love or not, theyā€™ve still been brainwashed into being into gaining and laziness. Was the love always there, or is it a result of the experiment? Or does it matter? That IS a _riddle_, isnā€™t itā€¦ Also, the scene where all of the guys join together and feast has that similar dichotomy: joy at them being reunited, but also sinister in the fact that they were hypnotized to have totally different personalities. Amazing! In addition to a big fat epilogue, it would be cool to hear a detail that the plan has been working in other countriesā€”a sign that the experiment was a success. Congratulations on your incredible story! :)

8/1/23, 2:31 AM
@[Feed Your Head](/user/show/1170832) Yeees the dubious nature of all relationships was an interesting concept I wanted to tackle, that and the guilt if enabling or interfering in peoples relations. Im happy you liked it šŸ’š
slavethruhypno@yahoo.com
7/30/23, 6:53 PM
Sorry to see the story end. I always enjoy reading about in-shape straight men becoming fat, over-indulgent gay pigs! But it was a good ending, nonetheless.

8/1/23, 2:29 AM
@slavethruhypno@yahoo.com Thanks for the comments, Im thinking about expanding the story outside of camp but we will see hehe there is always more guys to corrupt
8/1/23, 12:06 AM
Your world-building, even on a small.scale, is great, Cockatrice. The attention to detail you put into everything, and the way you use dialog between characters to talk it out, is always intriguing.
7/31/23, 9:08 PM
This was beautifully written. I loved the showcasing of how seemingly small moments can hit us hard as kids. I remember my dad once telling me that boys didn't button their shirts from the bottom, only girls did. He always had phrases like that. I did it because I'd sometimes get the buttons lopsided if I did it from the top, but it was always making me think of if I was doing things "wrong" as a boy. I told my dad about this decades later and he was baffled at his own comment. We don't even think about this stuff and how it impacts our psyche. But I think you carried that well. In fact, this was so beautifully done for the toxic masculinity part that the romance bits and your usual merging thing kinda felt tacked on -- not because they were bad, they were fine -- but because they didn't much hit with the same flair as the larger theme. Anyway. This wasn't really erotica, but it was amazing to me.
7/31/23, 5:39 PM
> ā€œHeā€™s not a bum!ā€ > ā€œNoā€ Sean confirms. ā€œQuite the opposite." Ok, that got me. I giggled my head off!
7/22/23, 12:34 PM
I've been reading this one since you started. Such a hot and well written story. Thanks for sharing it.

7/22/23, 10:12 PM
@[Anon](/user/show/10001245) Hard to believe itā€™s been almost two years! Very glad you found it hot.

Anonymous
7/31/23, 6:03 AM
@[S. Q. Neemie](/user/show/767920) It's really one of the hottest father/son long story I've read! I haven't written much in a while but now I'm inspired to write some myself!
7/31/23, 2:20 AM
I LOVE this series. It's so fun, hot, and sexy. I love your writing style and the brainwashing and mind break aspects of the story especially. The almost-too-easy acceptance of something that shouldn't make any sense at all and should shock them from the get go, yet doesn't when Alex explains it like it's nothing, is great. Like, oh, so I just need to swallow your cum and get creampied by you to get protein? Sure, don't see anything wrong with that! And the fact that all these straight dudues are seeing this through their heterosexual lenses, deluding themselves (or actually truly believing) that none of this is gay and it's just to score some brotein, is such a turn on. Seeing the Coach, the boys, and the hot married dads (another major kink of mine) slowly being mind broken and corrupted by their craving for brotein is so hot and up my alley. I can't wait for the next chapter!
7/30/23, 9:43 PM
This concept is a great mix of humor and hot, love it!
7/30/23, 5:30 AM
I hope you'll continue this story. It was very enjoyable and seemed primed for sequels. Especially regarding the pack of well-endowed werewolves that await the protagonist, forbidden to touch themselves and dedicated to the service of their Alpha.

7/30/23, 6:20 AM
@[Rock Creek Werewolf](/user/show/10002145) I have every intention of continuing, when the inspiration for it strikes. :)

7/30/23, 12:30 PM
@[Charlie Walker](/user/show/1052782) Very cool. Thereā€™s a great implicit tension in the scenario you describe. Many horny hung werewolves, forbidden to touch themselves, competing for Alphaā€™s time, attention, & ass. What if theyā€™re horny but cannot serve Alpha at a given moment? What if Alpha punishes a bad-packmember, withholding his ass? How do they keep Alphaā€™s status as an Alpha-Omega a secret from other packs? What will they think of this new small & scrawny stray that Alpha brings home as his favorite? How do they jostle to be the new latest favorite? Lots of great potential for drama & hot hot sex. Looking fwd to the characters/personalities you will create. Bravo!
Martin
7/28/23, 9:42 PM
What a wonderful intriguing and unique story! Thank you for posting this!

7/30/23, 10:38 AM
@[Martin](/user/show/125990) Thanks, I'd have never written it if I didn't have somewhere to publish it so thanks for having me!
7/29/23, 10:59 PM
A great ending!

7/30/23, 2:46 AM
@[Cutlerfan](/user/show/14171) Thaaanks one last upload next week šŸ’š

7/30/23, 3:27 AM
@[Blue85](/user/show/10011960) Yayyy, an epilogue!
7/29/23, 5:56 PM
PLEASE GIVE US MORE
7/29/23, 3:11 PM
Hot!!
7/29/23, 12:42 PM
You're just tackling all my kinks with this one. šŸ”„ SENT
7/29/23, 3:55 AM
Thanks man! Keep writing
puppy boi
7/28/23, 7:10 PM
These series is so good and hot on so many levels.. like pls i can't wait to see how this continues...

7/29/23, 2:06 AM
@puppy boi Oh thank you so much. I do have the next part all planned out, I just have too many stories I need to write and finding time to get to it is tough right now.