Recent Comments

Johnthedoe
7/16/20, 7:05 AM
Yeah my first attempt to write (I guess admitting I'm new kinda ruins the suspense) ended up being more of a learning experience than anticipated. I massively underestimated how much world building my brain was doing and by the time I realized the tangled web I'd created wouldn't fit in a space remotely close to 10k the deadline was too close for a complete rewrite. I literally hit publish less than two minutes before the deadline after spending the last four days trying to untangle and extract enough plot threads to make a smaller story. Editing is effectively nonexistent as no part of the story escaped having massive chunks ripped out and hastily stitched back together in my attempt at shrinking it down. I spent the last few hours before the deadline franticly cutting sentences apart and trying to taxidermy them back into something coherent when the sentence structure inevitably broke. I didn't completely succeed and I'm sure half of the tags apply to bits that didn't survive the unwinding. You guys wouldn't believe how much got removed before I even started putting it onto the site. The original beginning got axed completely and the ending doesn't even go in the direction it was originally going to. I told myself I was going to post a story about a swim team getting dicked into werewolves for the challenge, and despite my traitorous brain's valiant efforts to stop me that's what I did. Now I know to limit the amount of world building I allow my brain to do the next time I try to write something with a word count limit. After the challenge is over I'll put this shambling zombie of word vomit down and properly resurrect the story as the multiple chapters it should have been from the start.
7/15/20, 4:16 PM
please continue this
Anonymous
7/15/20, 2:03 PM
Really needs editing as sentences run on or stop abruptly with periods, commas and semi-colons mixed up. First paragraph makes no sense... There might be a great story in there but my brain hurt trying to get through the first lines and gave up.
7/13/20, 11:40 AM
Your back!!! And I'm super interested in what is happening! Honestly, I'm okay with you taking your time, even if I do admit a year is a bit long... Actually, I'm more interested in the four other brothers than the dad! I wonder what they act like.
Anonymous
7/13/20, 12:19 AM
Great story, so hot. Love everything about this! I hope Ram gets to enslave his dad. Turn him into a muscle daddy slave. The power trips are especially doing it for me. Bravo!
7/12/20, 10:14 PM
U are right, I had forgotten about this, but man how glad I’m it is back! This one was amazing, hope u choose to continue this story. Hope irl stuff get solved for u, best wishes!
7/12/20, 9:39 PM
Yay, its back! I hope in the end, if you continue this, even his dad comes to serve him <3
7/12/20, 2:53 PM
I really hope the "king" gets what is coming to him, make him a slutty power bottom
7/6/20, 6:06 PM
Really cool world and story you cane up with, and great character motivations. It all came through very clearly. Great job!
Martin
7/6/20, 5:07 PM
I agree with the previous commenters. What a beautifully crafted and written story. Even the sex scene, as short it is, is written beautifully and full of romance and love. I really enjoyed reading your story and thank you so much for sharing it with us!