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9/4/20, 9:40 PM
I'd like to remind everyone that when I wrote this I was just making it up as I went along, following threads (or branches, rather) that interested me and seeing where they went. I had no uber-plot in my head, really -- only the most vague of notions. With that in mind, Snake was never intended to become one of the main characters of this story. But in working with him, he quickly became one of my favorites and so his role has grown. (And I've known the whole time what he's going to Canada for -- which you'll see in Book Two.) Same with the rural Indiana boys. I got into the relationship between Danny and Chuckie, as well as the relationship between Tony Lenoldi and his Dad, and they soon became the central to that storyline. Watch as W.B. and Keith all but disappear from the narrative. I'm pretty good about holding together a large cast, but sometimes characters slip through.
9/4/20, 9:06 PM
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9/4/20, 11:31 AM
> Despite it having no sex and featuring a woman, I really enjoyed Tully’s chapter. Though we spent so little time with her, I feel like your writing expertly illustrated her personality such that I can see her in other situations. > Tully is a big problem for me. I went through an internal battle about including a female cast member in what is, ultimately, a gay sex story. Obviously, she's an X-Files homage, so her presence makes sense. I just don't know what to do with her in the long run. We don't see her much in Book One, but she's definitely unraveling the mystery in Book Two. I think my issue with her is that she's too good to kill off... but we'll see what I do in the end. At some point -- according to the rules of storytelling -- she HAS to confront her former partner, Wolf Murdock. > There is only one criticism I have, though, that you described her as a dullard, and she seems neither slow nor stupid. > Me? Use a word wrong? Not possible! Hahaha -- I meant to say that I think of her as lacking excitement or personality, not that's she's stupid. Perhaps the actual word "dull"?
9/4/20, 11:16 AM
> Definitely like this vignette style of storytelling; it reminds me of the serial books in 17th and 18th Japan minus the ad pages. > Okay, that reference predates mine! I'm using a soap-opera/ team comic-book technique, leaving the reader at a small cliff-hanger at the end of each vignette. It's a page-turning technique. It's also the only way to manage what has become a huge cast! > Looking forward to seeing what you have in store for the army unit. > Me, too!
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9/4/20, 7:37 AM
Great writing as always, absman420! I remember stumbling across the Pollination comic years ago, and I'm delighted to hear that you're continuing it. Despite it having no sex and featuring a woman, I really enjoyed Tully's chapter. Though we spent so little time with her, I feel like your writing expertly illustrated her personality such that I can see her in other situations. There is only one criticism I have, though, and that's that you described her as a dullard, and she seems neither slow nor stupid. Rather, I'd say she's just no-frills and to the point. That said, I'm looking forward to seeing more of this great story be re-posted. :]
9/4/20, 12:26 AM
Glad to see this back.
9/3/20, 11:38 PM
Definitely like this vignette style of storytelling; it reminds me of the serial books in 17th and 18th Japan minus the ad pages. Looking forward to seeing what you have in store for the army unit.
9/3/20, 4:18 PM
> Excited to see you reposting this in smaller chunks. > I know. However it got here in the first place -- I didn't originally post this story here -- they threw it up in one big chunk, nearly 80K words! It was a little daunting, so I wanted to make it more welcoming to the first time reader. Also, I've done a substantial amount of rewriting. > For now, the characters seem to have kept their original names, so I’m interested to see when that changes. > It could have with the Sheriff. Mark Lane is a person I know (knew) IRL -- the guy who inspired the story MILK MAN, as a matter of fact. That's actually the reason I decided to leave the Sheriff's name alone -- homage. I'll let you know who's real and who's not as we go along. W.B is also a real person, whose real name I don't know (someone I knew from the MGS site -- WBHulk -- who wrote a lot of fun Hulk-sex stories -- so I gave him a cameo in this). > I can’t wait to read the new chapters you’re writing. > There are nine sections of BOOK ONE -- I'll post a section a day -- and then I have four sections done of BOOK TWO -- I'll post them once a week. Hopefully, I can keep that schedule.
9/3/20, 3:42 PM
Excited to see you reposting this in smaller chunks. For now, the characters seem to have kept their original names, so I'm interested to see when that changes. I love re-reading this story that's gotten me off so many times, and I can't wait to read the new chapters you're writing.
8/23/20, 1:33 PM
Wow at first I was a little hard pressed to find enough time to dive into reading this story but you really didn't waste a word. Good world building, nice descriptions, good pacing ^.^ glad I found time finally Haha