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9/13/20, 11:04 AM
I think you're more the Tolstoy of gay porn. Although if, say, Snake turns out to be Tully's long-lost father, I'll call you the Dickens of gay porn.
9/13/20, 10:44 AM
> I’ve always been a fan of this and can’t wait to see where it goes! > Me, too! It took me four chapters to cycle through all the subplots and reintroduce the cast. Whatever else this behemoth has, it's got a lot of characters. I feel a little like the Dostoyevski of gay porn. In this case, I know where I want to end up, but haven't worked out all the details yet of how I'm going to get there. As I did the first time I worked on this series, I'm letting the characters tell me what's next. So far, that seems to be working. Thank you for hanging in -- we'll see what happens together!
9/13/20, 10:18 AM
> The diversion from the narrative was fantastic. I smiled all the way through it thinking, “I want to be able to write like this one day.” > This Narrative Diversion (and the one in Chapter 9) is my Tom Robbins influence. Clearly I was reading something of his at the time to so clearly emulate his voice. I've always admired the way he plays with words and constructs his ideas. To me, the narrative break underscores how lost I was as an author -- how I felt I was losing control. I tried very hard to get rid of these breaks (here and next chapter) and I successfully edited them down, but couldn't rid myself of them completely -- there is vital information contained in both. I just feel they disrupt the flow. Glad you like it! > Now to jerk off to this and in the spirit of the story, I’m using coconut oil. > Hahaha! Well done!
9/13/20, 1:32 AM
I've waited so long for this series to be continued, i can wait for more. I've always been a fan of this and can't wait to see where it goes!
9/13/20, 1:05 AM
Damn, I loved that! From beginning to end. The diversion from the narrative was fantastic. I smiled all the way through it thinking, "I want to be able to write like this one day." And another evolution about to take place. Hot hot hot...a 5 starrer in all categories! Now to jerk off to this and in the spirit of the story, I'm using coconut oil.
9/12/20, 2:17 PM
> Tully’d better be careful! > Now, THAT I agree with.
9/12/20, 11:54 AM
@Hypnothrill I choose to believe that your second suggestion of what's happening IS what's happening, whether it's explained or not. The plants seemingly have one goal and they can pacify any man that seems to stand in their way. I assume that there must be a way to pacify the women too. Tully'd better be careful!
9/11/20, 3:16 PM
@absman420, I feel like in a story like this, you can handle the "But what about the women?" question one of two ways: 1) Ignore them completely, knowing that most of your readers only really care about what happens to the men and will be willing to suspend disbelief and write women out of this reality. 2) Create a pseudoscientific explanation for why the women don't notice or care what's happening. For instance, maybe when they breathe in a small amount of the plant's pollen, they start to believe that whatever's happening is perfectly normal. But having Mrs. Lenoldi come back, observe that her husband and son are now grotesquely well-endowed gay muscle freaks who are growing weird penis-shaped plants that seem to be taking over the town, and then not really care about that... (Like, did she get a lobotomy when she was away on that retreat?) I'm just giving you a hard time on that one detail because I love and admire your writing so much.
9/11/20, 3:01 PM
> Mr Mac’s three boys are a particularly hot touch. > The Variants are proving to be great fun to work with, too! They're easy to write.
9/11/20, 2:58 PM
> I was honestly a little worried when I read the first two sections, because it seemed to be starting off very slow. > Well, slow-er to be sure. If I'd started off at the breakneck pace that Book One ended on, I'd have no place to ramp up to -- we'd end up with single-sentence sections! I think the "establishing shots" of our cast after such a long break is forgivable. As you note, I pick it up by the end. > And I think I would have been happier if Mrs. Lenoldi had stayed off the canvas entirely; her presence in the household only messed with my suspension of disbelief > I'm legit sorry about that -- GOOD NEWS! We'll never see her again! > Maybe I’ll have to write that story someday :-) > ME: Fanboy drooling...