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9/21/20, 12:26 PM
Love the direction that the story is taking, so can’t wait to see where it’s going to go next! That said, this part feels like it could have benefitted from some more editing, especially in the second half. There are places where punctuation starts to drift off and things needed a second take to make sense. With a little more honing in that area this could go from a good story to a great one!
9/21/20, 12:25 PM
I enjoyed chapter 2..looking forward to Collin being in love with Ian and turn against Jay. Would be fun to get Collin to flex in front of Ian just to annoy Jay.. My only negative in the chapters is the guys talking about alphas and betas.. I don't think in the 'real world' you would say it out loud as doesn't feel natural, and as someone else said some tightening up with editing and punctuation. People like this series so I imagine they would be happy to help with editing if you asked. Good work!
9/21/20, 12:05 PM
super hot! I love it!
9/21/20, 11:24 AM
Awesome chapter! I found the projector scene to be very hot. Take your time, and keep up the great work!
9/21/20, 10:54 AM
> I wonder if that will lead to an inter-pollinated conflict down the road. > Hmmm......
9/20/20, 11:53 PM
The fact that Sheriff Lane is able to resist the siren call of the great symbiont only makes him hotter to me! He's so powerful on his own. I wonder if that will lead to an inter-pollinated conflict down the road.
9/20/20, 11:23 PM
I didn't even catch that was a Scenter in section 44. And well done too. My bad. Minus 3 points Slytherin.
9/20/20, 7:37 PM
thanks for all the comments xx. next chapter is uploaded sorry editor haha bad timing.
9/20/20, 11:58 AM
> What’s with the transfer of knowledge through the finger? We know of no such power in human, symbiont or fused. > Here's what we DO know: when a symbiont and a human have "normal" sex and the symbiont cums in the human, it creates a bond between the two. With time and repetition, the bond strengthens and the symbiont is able to communicate commands telepathically to the human. Whether the human "hears" the words of the command or is just compelled to obey them isn't yet clear. We've seen this demonstrated in Book One between the Sheriff and his Deputy several times and we'll see some further evidence of it between Snake and Rugby Boy in upcoming chapters. We are just now discovering the depth to which this connection exists. The "implanting of knowledge/future orders" is an extension of this ability -- at least, to my thinking. As for the finger-thing, guess which (often-high) author saw *E.T. the Extra-Terrestrial* that weekend? ("I'll be right here.") Have faith, Pup, it'll pay off in Chapter 14. > And a promise broken. Was I not promised a Scenter scene? > Perhaps you should read section 44 again. If that was too subtle, maybe you'll like Vinnie's power demonstration in Chapter 13 better?
9/20/20, 3:04 AM
Nice, keep the feet, love it <3