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9/25/20, 7:14 PM
I've wondered if Travis is oblivious to how Andy is benefiting from Travis's subliminal messages. Another hot chapter!
9/25/20, 2:56 PM
> I think Part 49 would have been hotter if it was told from the perspective of the waiter, and we only got overheard snippets of the Lenoldis’ conversation. > Valid point-- and I agree. I have discovered that POLLINATION works best when told from the victim's POV. At the time I initially plotted this scene, my intent was that it be from the waiter's perspective. But to be honest, I've been enjoying the Lenoldi's relationship and I thought the insight into the Father's motivation/ philosophy was important for plot developments later. It was all too subtle to be captured by the waiter overhearing stuff. Next chapter, you'll meet the hapless Willis, and I think that will get us all back on track with the way this narrative works most successfully. > The part with Devin especially. > There are certain new characters that I'm really enjoying: Rugby Boy, Vance, Willis (for comedy relief), and poor Devin. The fact is I haven't figured out the end of Devin's story -- I have two options for him, one good and one expected. The "good" ending will inconvenience the plot -- the "expected" ending (the ending I initially plotted) will disappoint Devin fans. (And I admit, I'm a Devin fan. I've really come to enjoy working with the character, so I'd like to keep him around. You know, expand the cast a little further.)
9/25/20, 2:32 PM
Loving this! The part with Devin especially. I'd love to get more parts from the perspective of the still-transforming men; for instance, I think Part 49 would have been hotter if it was told from the perspective of the waiter, and we only got overheard snippets of the Lenoldis' conversation.
9/25/20, 7:32 AM
I wonder what is Travis's goal for Ian and if Andy isn't in the way. The cooking Ian made for Travis is making my mind go wild over the possibilities...
9/25/20, 5:41 AM
I'm loving it! Cant wait to see whats next!!
9/24/20, 5:36 PM
Looking forward to the next chapter, in which Ian ... ... ends it with his girlfriend ... takes up smoking ... gets his head shaved ... moves in with Master Andy ... realizes he no longer needs/wants his "white noise" ... embraces his identity and destiny
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9/24/20, 3:09 PM
can't wait for the next chapter, please continue!
9/24/20, 10:58 AM
fucking love it. Exactly what i'm looking for
9/24/20, 5:59 AM
A good start to an interesting story. One technical note: It's a bit odd the story is written in present tense, considering it's written like a diary which I think is a great way to present the transformation. Since he'd be writing these entries after the fact, I think past tense would fit better.
9/24/20, 1:52 AM
Awesome first chapter! I look forward to what happens next.