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10/20/20, 2:47 PM
I really liked the pace of the story. I got to know the characters well enough. Please continue
10/20/20, 2:20 PM
I’d like to read more. This was a hot beginning!
ParadoxBear
10/19/20, 12:51 PM
> ** Still, there is a critical difference between Old Man Bowden’s transformation into the Great One and the Deputy’s and that may have an effect on the rest of the supporting characters** Off the top of my head, it's probably the fact that Bowden technically died while bonding with the Great One, and thus the Great One is 100% symbiont without Bowden's former humanity tempering the symbiont's drive to repopulate, whereas the Deputy is (presumably) health enough to survive the bonding, and thus this second Great One will have more personality- it still has a drive to repopulate, but is more willing to seek a symbiotic relationship between humans and the symbionts, rather than the original Great One, who seems to be willing to basically cordyceps humanity for the sake of the symbionts. So Lane, Snake, and Rugby Boy may yet retain their personality, while still winding up utterly devoted to the Deputy. Alternatively, the Deputy's time as a familiar will create a more equal relationship between himself and Lane, thus setting up the chance for some juicy conflict if Lane attempts to basically make himself king of the bonded- which, let's face it, he probably will try to do. All in all, the stage is set for an epic confrontation between Bowden and his army of symbiont drones, and the Deputy and his ragtag band of rebels. Whatever the outcome, I'm sure we will all be able to shoot loads to the resolution for years to come!
10/19/20, 12:14 PM
> i cant wait to see where this goes next! > Thank you -- I'm super-glad you're enjoying it! I know what's going on in Book Two isn't everybody's cup of tea, but it really is my intent to create the best plant-based-alien-assimilation-muscle-growth-mind-control story out there. I confess, I've been enjoying writing Book Two WAY more than I thought I would -- perhaps that's why I'd put it off for 15 years -- and I'm curious how you're all gonna feel at the end...? For the record, I initially plotted ten chapters, which would take us to chap 19, but I slowed a sub-plot down (on purpose) and it looks like that's gonna force another chapter out, giving us chap 20 for the end of Book Two. (That means five chapters left from this point.) And believe me when I say it's a twisty-turny journey from here.
10/19/20, 12:05 PM
> If what happened to Murdock after meeting the Great One is anything to go by... > Yeah... it doesn't look good for our cast. Still, there is a critical difference between Old Man Bowden's transformation into the Great One and the Deputy's and that may have an effect on the rest of the supporting characters. (We'll talk more about this in a few chapters.) Still, I think your analysis is spot on.
Ozark
10/19/20, 8:37 AM
i cant wait to see where this goes next!
ParadoxBear
10/19/20, 1:44 AM
If what happened to Murdock after meeting the Great One is anything to go by, I think it's safe to say that any bonded men who meet Him get fully taken over by their symbionts, which in turn get fully enthralled to the Great One's will. Which is to say, most of our cast of characters are essentially dead- erasure of personality is such an erotically twisted trope in mind-control stories. This, of course, raises several questions about the Deputy once he is transformed into a Great One. The obvious implication is that some combination of Lane, Snake, and Rugby Boy will be enthralled to Deputy Great One. I can see Lane's arrogance coming back to bite him in the ass; getting enslaved and erased by the very being he sought to control would be deliciously ironic. Of course, this does raise the question of what happens with Snake and Rugby Boy: the affection between them is so palpable I can see them making it out of this with their individuality intact, but at the same time, I'm expecting the tragically sexy twist of one or both coming under the Deputy's sway. If that is the case, I think Rugby Boy is the more likely of the pair, thus presenting Snake with the cruel choice of having to flee and have to deal with his grief while still resisting, or submit and join his new lover in slavery to the Deputy.
10/19/20, 1:30 AM
The sheriff may end up telling the new great deputy "I submit to muscle". Another Absman classic that can keep me hard.
10/18/20, 1:07 PM
I'm not sure if im confusing this with another story, but it seems this one has been edited since it was published and is missing most of the story i read the first time
10/18/20, 11:36 AM
> I really enjoy the Sheriff’s and Snake’s “rebellion.” Snake calls it resistance but I see more rebellion in the Sheriff > Absolutely agree! As a matter of fact, in Chapter 16, you will see just how committed the Sheriff is to this idea. > I can’t really say the Deputy is a bad man, just a loyal one. > I don't think it's the Deputy that's the problem. Imagine you're some kind of Machiavellian Dom Puppetmaster and you "create" a super-powered being who's completely within your control? The weapon's not bad, right? It's just there to be used.