Recent Comments

Grey
10/21/20, 10:27 PM
hot as hell dude, please continue!
10/21/20, 1:53 PM
Great start! I look forward to seeing where this goes, and what the limits of the book are. As for cleaning up more, and wearing less, I know I'd love a maid in his underwear and an apron dusting in some hard-to-reach corners. So good job!
10/21/20, 10:41 AM
i love it!! cant wait for more!! was hayden aware he fucked himself for 12 hrs? can we see his reaction?
Evan
10/21/20, 7:47 AM
Very imaginative use of the book. Thanks for writing. Hope to see more experimentation.
10/21/20, 3:18 AM
Excited for more.
10/20/20, 9:45 PM
Please keep going! Off to a really great start.
Anonymous
10/20/20, 2:47 PM
Amazing start to the story! Looking forward to more
10/20/20, 2:47 PM
I really liked the pace of the story. I got to know the characters well enough. Please continue
10/20/20, 2:20 PM
I’d like to read more. This was a hot beginning!
ParadoxBear
10/19/20, 12:51 PM
> ** Still, there is a critical difference between Old Man Bowden’s transformation into the Great One and the Deputy’s and that may have an effect on the rest of the supporting characters** Off the top of my head, it's probably the fact that Bowden technically died while bonding with the Great One, and thus the Great One is 100% symbiont without Bowden's former humanity tempering the symbiont's drive to repopulate, whereas the Deputy is (presumably) health enough to survive the bonding, and thus this second Great One will have more personality- it still has a drive to repopulate, but is more willing to seek a symbiotic relationship between humans and the symbionts, rather than the original Great One, who seems to be willing to basically cordyceps humanity for the sake of the symbionts. So Lane, Snake, and Rugby Boy may yet retain their personality, while still winding up utterly devoted to the Deputy. Alternatively, the Deputy's time as a familiar will create a more equal relationship between himself and Lane, thus setting up the chance for some juicy conflict if Lane attempts to basically make himself king of the bonded- which, let's face it, he probably will try to do. All in all, the stage is set for an epic confrontation between Bowden and his army of symbiont drones, and the Deputy and his ragtag band of rebels. Whatever the outcome, I'm sure we will all be able to shoot loads to the resolution for years to come!