Recent Comments

10/23/20, 1:05 PM
Huh. So the bonded men haven't been stripped of their identity- the older men, anyways, the younger men may be a different story. Mr. Lenoldi and Coach trying to stage an uprising among the adults sounds interesting, but I have a feeling that endeavor will be doomed to failure. The army boys are ready to make their move, I'm excited to see how that turns out. The tone of the scene with Snake and Rugby Boy sure does seem to foreshadow that Deputy Great One is not going to be the solution that Lane seems to think he will be- I think it's all but certain that at least one of the three will be getting enslaved. And yet again, Lane is setting up a scheme that has massive potential to blow up in his face, though I have a sneaking suspicion that Tully might wind up dead at "Murdock's" hands for her trouble. All-in-all, this was very much a set-up episode, but I can't wait to see what happens next- I've been practically vibrating with excitement all morning waiting for this to drop!
10/23/20, 12:49 PM
Right now, I'm reading the upcoming "war" between the two symbiote factions as a metaphor for how two of your main strengths as a writer--coming up with distinctive characters and devising plots that revolve around depersonalization/dehumanization--are going to war in this story. Right now, your love for your characters seems to be winning, which I can relate to as a writer. As a reader, though, I keep hoping that we'll get more scenes of depersonalization and dehumanization, from the perspective of the symbiote-controlled humans (and not just from the viewpoint of outside observers).
10/22/20, 5:12 AM
This is a delight! I’m very excited to see where it goes!
Grey
10/21/20, 10:27 PM
hot as hell dude, please continue!
10/21/20, 1:53 PM
Great start! I look forward to seeing where this goes, and what the limits of the book are. As for cleaning up more, and wearing less, I know I'd love a maid in his underwear and an apron dusting in some hard-to-reach corners. So good job!
10/21/20, 10:41 AM
i love it!! cant wait for more!! was hayden aware he fucked himself for 12 hrs? can we see his reaction?
Evan
10/21/20, 7:47 AM
Very imaginative use of the book. Thanks for writing. Hope to see more experimentation.
10/21/20, 3:18 AM
Excited for more.
10/20/20, 9:45 PM
Please keep going! Off to a really great start.
Anonymous
10/20/20, 2:47 PM
Amazing start to the story! Looking forward to more