I'm really liking this series. Definitely one of my favorites in a good while. My only feedback would be to request that you spend a little more time describing the physical sensations Willem feels, especially near/during climax, and also maybe having slightly longer sex scenes. When you say stuff like, "The top came and Willem's cock shot in response," it's a hot visual but it feels more like 'showing' vs 'telling' when it comes to Willem's experience. I really love descriptions of physical sensations. What did Willem feel like as he came, and where did he feel it? Did it feel like a relief of pressure? A loss of control, or perhaps empowering somehow? You did this really well when you had Willem noticing after his second or third time that he didn't feel the same shame he felt previously. I would love if you brought a little bit of that description to his climaxes. The rest of my comment is not really feedback as much as some hot ideas I wanted to share. I would find it pretty hot if Willem came multiple times in a session, not just when the top finishes. Or, if he didn't finish at all, but realized he had no interest in finishing himself off without a cock in him - or if he felt completely satisfied just by being bred... please don't feel constrained to the formula of "sex starts, change position, then the top cums and that makes the bottom cum in response." When the bottom seems to only finish in response to the top finishing, IMO it sends a message that he's only cumming because the curse makes him cum when a top finishes inside him - rather than it being because of the raw pleasure he's feeling. Some other ideas I've been having (but please only consider them if it feels natural in the story to you): * have the curse escalate by having the pink glow not fade until Willem's completely milked the top dry. * Allow somehow for the curse to be satisfied (and for Willem to feel satisfied) by only performing oral (and of course the top doesn't even think about reciprocating). * Or, alternatively, Willem accidentally blows a guy to completion, and they're too tired to fuck him, so Willem's forced to squirm / receive another punishment because it takes too long for them to recover * Have a punishment involve nipple growth and sensitivity increase. * Have the pink glow fall on another total bottom, forcing Willem to somehow turn them, or perhaps more body modifications that make him more irresistable to top Again, really liking this series. I've wanked to each chapter, and some multiple times :) My feedback comes with best intentions and gratitude. I haven't been this excited about a series in a while.

Keep the chapters "cumming". I'll see myself out now...

Awwww. The ending actually makes it seem like the guys are going to bond. I like when stories have surprisingly emotional twists and turns. And note how none of Willem's so-called "bros" have checked on him...Jake seems like he could be a real friend. :)

excellent

Love where this is heading, love a good story of a straight jock turning into a bottom twink. Hope the curse takes more of his masculinity, shrinks him down and takes his muscles. Very hot progression in this installment.

This is a great series, it has character development, magical intervention, and a healthy dose of sexiness. what more could you want? Please keep on going, can't wait to see what happens.

What a great story! I love watching Willem's slow realization of what his selfishness is doing (plus seeing his homophobic father explains why he ended up the way he did), and Jake gaining more confidence as time passes. Excellent work!

This is easily one of the best stories on this site! Can't wait to read more!

This has quickly become one of my favorite series on this site, keep up the great work.

This has been a fantastic series, eager to see it continue!