Recent Comments

10/24/20, 4:55 PM
wow, you really write well and pace the story and the delivery of the facts beautifully. one of the best written and conceptualized stories I've read anywhere. i found myself wanting to be Slave Ian throughout the storyline. and you really turned me on mentally and physically, my dick was throbbing and i couldnt leave it alone while i was reading! i hope you plan on writing a lot more, i did read your other story listed here too, also very good.. you may be my new favorite!
10/24/20, 12:16 PM
> I hope Tully makes it out OK–I know she’s a relatively small character, but I’ve felt for her since the very beginning (plus I do like Gillian Anderson!). > I like Gillian Anderson, too -- I even like Tully, although Tully reminds me a little of Lois Lane sometimes. Like, c'mon Lois, you never noticed the glasses and the slouched posture and the vocal timbre and the big muscles under that cheap suit...???? I like smart characters -- and I hated that Tully couldn't figure it all out faster. I think she would've if not for the needs of the plot. Still, for obvious reasons, you'll see she continues to cling to the idea of "saving" the human host, even though as a forensic scientist, she knows that may not be possible. Now, a little extra truth-telling, since we're discussing Tully: a little upthread I spoke of one of the driving images of this series, the seeding of the farm, but there are several others -- all of which I'll talk about after Book Two has been completely released. One of these includes Tully -- and to be honest, it's the reason I've kept her around.
10/24/20, 11:34 AM
What a great chapter. I hope Tully makes it out OK--I know she's a relatively small character, but I've felt for her since the very beginning (plus I do like Gillian Anderson!). As others have said, you've also done a great job pivoting from eroticism to horror--we get so caught up in the fantasy of becoming a hugely muscled giant that we forget that these are alien creatures threatening to subsume the identities of every man on Earth in the name of "repopulation." And now all of the sudden, we're reminded of that through the assembly line-like seeding and the devoured Deputy. Fantastic stuff! :)
10/24/20, 11:17 AM
> I didn’t like the feminization of the soldiers: “honey,” throwing a kiss, sashay. > That's just Dobie -- he's an asshole. Can I argue that I don't see it as feminization, I see it as playful? As a musical-theatre snob (nerd), I imagine them as being the chorus boys (seabies) in SOUTH PACIFIC, friendly banter that's harmless, but supportive of the main scene. I just wanted a bit of "color commentary" in the midst of some really banal exposition.
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10/24/20, 3:27 AM
Great story!! Loved it!!!!
10/24/20, 1:38 AM
>the comments are really a big spoiler in kind of way > I promise I haven't given any spoilers -- I've merely given us some things to think about...
10/24/20, 1:03 AM
> I think of the Deputy more as “Frankenstein’s Monster” than anything else at this point. When he comes to life, will his power be containable? The Sheriff seems to think so… the comments are really a big spoiler in kind of way, underline the different between the old and young. about the sheriff the ambitions can destroy but a good "villain" always has a plan B over his hands (maybe Survival of the fittest).
10/23/20, 11:59 PM
I like this low key transistion. Lenoldi and the Coach, then to Snake and my dear Rugby Boy, only to be followed by the soldiers, and then....her. My heart sank. But it was so good. Do I trust her? At this point, I do. I didn't think I'd ever be interested in seeing her again, but now I look forward to seeing her again (and those are rare words in my life) On the flip side, I didn't like the feminization of the soldiers: "honey," throwing a kiss, sashay. Every other character seems to be growing in his masculinity (even Tully lol) and that just didn't fit.
10/23/20, 11:30 PM
> It’s also rare that I go for the happy ending, which can anger the audience, as well. I’m very curious about what kind of love I’m gonna get when all is said and done with Book Two. When I discovered the David DeCocteau Brotherhood series, I was disappointed to discover that the hero never joins the villains, because I always thought the idea of him joining him would be more interesting and sexier. Having good always prevail felt like a betrayal of horror and queer horror in general. Plus I think it has to do with my dominant and submissive sides enjoying a description of an irreversible act of submission So I, for one, will probably be quite happy with the results.
10/23/20, 10:00 PM
> Catering to the audience. And that’s fine… but I’ve always found erotic horror to have a little bit more meat to it > First of all, for the phrase "It’s an eroticized thanatos" you win the internet today! Congratulations! You said it so much better than I ever could -- I just write scary, but oddly erotic stories when I get high, man. I'm with you on erotic horror, tho. Many of my stories have some sort of sinister overtones that add a level of creepiness to the proceedings. It's also rare that I go for the happy ending, which can anger the audience, as well. I'm very curious about what kind of love I'm gonna get when all is said and done with Book Two. I think "horror" endings stay with a reader more than "happy" endings do. However, when people make emotional investments in characters and then those characters don't get the ending the reader wants and the reader FREAKS OUT!?! That's when I feel I've succeeded the most.