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11/3/20, 10:57 AM
Confessions Behind the HAIL GREAT ONE! I spent days trying to figure out how I was gonna feed all those people! There were 200+ people on the Farm and how were they gonna eat? Who could afford that, much less to set up and run the meal service? I went through every conceivable possibility until it occurred to me that the Great One could simply rejuvenate them at the end of their shifts, thereby getting rid of the NEED for food. And if the "rejuvenation" put them a little deeper in the Great One's power? More's the better! HAIL GREAT ONE!
11/2/20, 11:37 PM
I've been hanging on every word in many ways, but getting to the "HAIL GREAT ONE" and the way the plot moved there really got me going. I cannot wait for the next chapter. Thank you for doing this.
11/2/20, 7:00 PM
Thanks for all your wonderful comments, folks! I'm looking forward to hearing what you think about the other parts, and of course the whole thing once it's all been released! I'm so glad you're enjoying the story so far!
11/2/20, 6:08 PM
Loving this story! It's very well written and a delight to read.
nycboot
11/1/20, 10:32 PM
Upon seeing the title I immediately recognized it was a line from one of John Dowland's most famous songs, [**Come Again**](https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Come_Again_(Dowland)), so I had to read the story, if only to complete the missing words. These historic British (or Canadian) stories almost form a genre unto themselves. I'm looking forward to see what happens (and maybe that's the completion of the title).
11/1/20, 1:40 PM
An awesome start to a very well-written historical fiction story! I look forward to future chapters.
11/1/20, 10:47 AM
> I just thought that the mention that the Wizard was missing might be a subtle hint. > I considered having them discover him sitting in the car waiting, still obsessed with Vance, starving and filthy and afraid to leave the car for fear of the aliens (ala CUJO). But as you said... narrative clutter. Besides, Joe is a more experienced driver -- bet he bought his Jag from the Wizard, as well.
10/31/20, 10:54 PM
> Frankly, I left him out of the story for the same reason I got rid of Mr. Mac – it was just one more character that I would have to deal with that I didn’t need. That's fair. Keeping around characters who have served their purpose creates narrative clutter. I just thought that the mention that the Wizard was missing might be a subtle hint. I'll be curious to learn his final fate come Chapter 21.
Nutiper
10/31/20, 9:12 PM
Gosh, I know I'm biased because I got to watch this story being written, but I just love how cozy & autumnal this feels. A spooky, nostalgic, melancholic atmosphere... Plus, I always relate so heavily each time I read this line: > The first time that Sawyer turned that smile on Lock, the young man hadn’t been sure whether he wanted to befriend him or *be* him. I love these characters!
10/31/20, 11:31 AM
> Wait, I just noticed something: Wizwell is MIA. > Confession: I didn't know what to do with the Wizard. It's possible he was transformed, of course -- right there in the hornets nest, that's the most obvious conclusion. It's possible on the first day, when all the symbionts were compelled to the field, that Vance's power over the Wizard wore off and -- as you say -- he just got the hell out of Dodge (or in this case, Garden City). Frankly, I left him out of the story for the same reason I got rid of Mr. Mac -- it was just one more character that I would have to deal with that I didn't need. Replacing Mr. Mac with Joe gives me a humorous bit to work with -- Mr. Mac likes the boys' flagrant sexuality, and Joe is put off by it. The boys' constant attempts at seduction become funnier with Joe constantly rejecting them. You'll see a little more of this relationship in chap 19. There is a "role call" of sorts in chap 21, which I'm writing as I respond to this, where I have to decide the Wizard's fate one way or the other. We'll see what I write.