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Johnthedoe
7/17/20, 6:57 AM
Yeah it is. The original intro gave more introduction to each of the characters present and made it more obvious the perspective was shifting at each break but it got cut when I was trying (and failing) to condense this monster to fit in under 10k words as per the rules of the challenge. The characters also each had longer sections for each of them and hinted a bit more at who was going next before everything got condensed and confusing. Once I start expanding it back over the multiple chapters it should have had to start with there will be fewer per chapter which should help keep what's happening straight. The idea really couldn't work on such a tight word budget and I wish I caught on soon enough to replace it as my entry with something smaller.
7/17/20, 6:29 AM
Is the story switching first-person narrators in each section? I was just so confused trying to keep track of all these characters and the complex mythology and (I think) the shifting perspectives.
Johnthedoe
7/17/20, 5:08 AM
Don't worry I still have all my design outline info. I won't just be cutting the end off though. Without the challenge limiting everything I can fully stretch it back out into what it was originally. The problem I had was that the story rapidly grew to the point it broke all but one rule of the contest. Supernatural theme: Check Single Submission: Not Happening 10k words or less: LOL we won't even be off the bus at 10k If I'd caught the problem sooner I could've put Wet Dogs on hold and whipped up a replacement entry which fit within the rules but I didn't and so the whole thing turned into a massive mess because I had to try and figuratively squeeze a whale into a shot glass. I'll start restoring it back to how it was originally before editing and continuing it in August after the challenge ends.
7/16/20, 4:55 PM
I like it and would like it to be continued also I think you made a good story that could go in a lot of good directions if carefully plan it and pace yourself.
7/16/20, 11:17 AM
I'd suggest remove the final couple of paragraphs and write all those extra chapters... you do have an entire world takeover to write potentially. I hope you saved the directors cut of this as I'm sure it will be popular. editing is far worse than writing, so many loose threads to unpick. I rarely do werewolves as there are many many stories out there... this one is noteworthy.
Johnthedoe
7/16/20, 7:05 AM
Yeah my first attempt to write (I guess admitting I'm new kinda ruins the suspense) ended up being more of a learning experience than anticipated. I massively underestimated how much world building my brain was doing and by the time I realized the tangled web I'd created wouldn't fit in a space remotely close to 10k the deadline was too close for a complete rewrite. I literally hit publish less than two minutes before the deadline after spending the last four days trying to untangle and extract enough plot threads to make a smaller story. Editing is effectively nonexistent as no part of the story escaped having massive chunks ripped out and hastily stitched back together in my attempt at shrinking it down. I spent the last few hours before the deadline franticly cutting sentences apart and trying to taxidermy them back into something coherent when the sentence structure inevitably broke. I didn't completely succeed and I'm sure half of the tags apply to bits that didn't survive the unwinding. You guys wouldn't believe how much got removed before I even started putting it onto the site. The original beginning got axed completely and the ending doesn't even go in the direction it was originally going to. I told myself I was going to post a story about a swim team getting dicked into werewolves for the challenge, and despite my traitorous brain's valiant efforts to stop me that's what I did. Now I know to limit the amount of world building I allow my brain to do the next time I try to write something with a word count limit. After the challenge is over I'll put this shambling zombie of word vomit down and properly resurrect the story as the multiple chapters it should have been from the start.
7/15/20, 4:16 PM
please continue this
Anonymous
7/15/20, 2:03 PM
Really needs editing as sentences run on or stop abruptly with periods, commas and semi-colons mixed up. First paragraph makes no sense... There might be a great story in there but my brain hurt trying to get through the first lines and gave up.
7/13/20, 11:40 AM
Your back!!! And I'm super interested in what is happening! Honestly, I'm okay with you taking your time, even if I do admit a year is a bit long... Actually, I'm more interested in the four other brothers than the dad! I wonder what they act like.
Anonymous
7/13/20, 12:19 AM
Great story, so hot. Love everything about this! I hope Ram gets to enslave his dad. Turn him into a muscle daddy slave. The power trips are especially doing it for me. Bravo!