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Nutiper
8/2/20, 8:12 PM
*Damn* what a start! From the first few paragraphs, I found myself anticipating (and hoping for) a delicious, gradual development of this promising dynamic between Yates and the werewolf regiment -- and boy, did this chapter deliver! Sets up a lot of hot tension; some *great* worldbuilding going on in the background; and five distinct characters who play off each other really well. And then, that surprise at the end, with Aed's hypnotic voice, making anything he says become the new reality for Yates: whew!! I liked how clearly reluctant Aed was to have to use this power on Yates, but also, how much it affected Yates... Dreaming about it afterward... even thinking of himself as "Roman" for a moment because that's how Aed described him... I'm really looking forward to reading more of this story!
8/2/20, 7:30 PM
Awesome first chapter! I look forward to reading more. Dace, you're one of my favorite authors on this site.
8/2/20, 5:40 PM
l really hope you continue this story. it has a great start.
8/2/20, 1:57 PM
I liked the original story and this shows great promise. More please!
Evan
8/2/20, 9:43 AM
Pity about the formatting glitch. Sorry you have to fix it up but I am looking forward to reading it when it's sorted out. The tags and concept sound really interesting.
8/2/20, 8:38 AM
Hummm.... Dace, You forgot to put paragraph in the text... It's readable, but could you please edit the story to add some space?
Johnthedoe
7/31/20, 5:35 AM
Yeah the original version was much less cramped but my brain added so many interconnected plot lines that trying to fit it in the word count allowance of the challenge scrambled everything. It's taking me quite some time to weave them all back together but I will make it happen.
7/30/20, 3:53 PM
Just wanted to say that I think upon a slight rewrite and expansion this saga would be really quite amazing. The individual scenes were quite compelling and enjoyable for all that I had some confusion on the pov switches and such.
Johnthedoe
7/22/20, 9:15 AM
No worries the rewrite is currently in progress and there'll be plenty of sequels after the true ending of this story. I do have an entire world to take over after all.
7/21/20, 10:31 PM
More please. This needs to be redone and drawn out day by day then continuing after transformation. Excellent story.