Recent Comments

Anonymous
9/21/20, 6:19 PM
Great story! For ideas, maybe Jay ends up being an Omega foot slave. :)
9/21/20, 4:49 PM
it is a really great story. can't wait for the next chapter.
9/21/20, 1:47 PM
The level of obedience from just a spiral felt a lil unrealistic. Regardless though I enjoyed the chapter and definitely had fun reading 😉
Anonymous
9/21/20, 12:26 PM
Love the direction that the story is taking, so can’t wait to see where it’s going to go next! That said, this part feels like it could have benefitted from some more editing, especially in the second half. There are places where punctuation starts to drift off and things needed a second take to make sense. With a little more honing in that area this could go from a good story to a great one!
9/21/20, 12:25 PM
I enjoyed chapter 2..looking forward to Collin being in love with Ian and turn against Jay. Would be fun to get Collin to flex in front of Ian just to annoy Jay.. My only negative in the chapters is the guys talking about alphas and betas.. I don't think in the 'real world' you would say it out loud as doesn't feel natural, and as someone else said some tightening up with editing and punctuation. People like this series so I imagine they would be happy to help with editing if you asked. Good work!
9/21/20, 12:05 PM
super hot! I love it!
9/21/20, 11:24 AM
Awesome chapter! I found the projector scene to be very hot. Take your time, and keep up the great work!
9/20/20, 7:37 PM
thanks for all the comments xx. next chapter is uploaded sorry editor haha bad timing.
9/20/20, 3:04 AM
Nice, keep the feet, love it <3
editor
9/19/20, 9:33 PM
Great story, please keep writing. Also...if you need an editor ask me to email you. I can help with spelling and such.