Recent Comments

Anonymous
11/8/20, 9:45 PM
Decent idea, far better writing than most. Consider having them do some drinking, one of the four new guys tells a story about two others being in a game of gay chicken. The winner claims he's never been beaten More drinking, a spiral film, then group induction and suggestions. Darren or another can challenge the champion to a game of gay chicken, take it from there. Agree that talk of Alphas and Betas is off-putting. For now, I wouldn't worry about tightening and editing. Tell the story, get it out there, and do some tightening and editing later. Your writing is already well above-average. You can take some time to continue fleshing out the characters. I don't much like Ian's character right now, which means you've already built him enough to draw a reaction. Build the others as well. You're setting this up to be a slow burn, one of the more difficult genres but easily my favorite. You're writing a story, not a quick masturbation prompt.
11/7/20, 8:09 PM
Although spanking isn't one of my fetishes, I loved the romance between Lock and Sawyer and enjoyed this story immensely. Thanks for writing.
Nutiper
11/7/20, 6:55 PM
Gosh. The ending to this story still gets me, every time... *cradles emotions delicately in palm of hand* Gorgeous.
11/7/20, 6:50 PM
I hope Papa Werebear initiates new knights.
11/6/20, 6:47 PM
What a sweet romance! I look forward to the next chapter.
11/4/20, 4:58 PM
Such a great story! I'm beginning to wonder if this is going to have a twist like The Sixth Sense.
11/2/20, 7:00 PM
Thanks for all your wonderful comments, folks! I'm looking forward to hearing what you think about the other parts, and of course the whole thing once it's all been released! I'm so glad you're enjoying the story so far!
11/2/20, 6:08 PM
Loving this story! It's very well written and a delight to read.
nycboot
11/1/20, 10:32 PM
Upon seeing the title I immediately recognized it was a line from one of John Dowland's most famous songs, [**Come Again**](https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Come_Again_(Dowland)), so I had to read the story, if only to complete the missing words. These historic British (or Canadian) stories almost form a genre unto themselves. I'm looking forward to see what happens (and maybe that's the completion of the title).
11/1/20, 1:40 PM
An awesome start to a very well-written historical fiction story! I look forward to future chapters.