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2/3/21, 9:17 AM
thank you for posting this! To be honest, this is one of my favorite stories in the site! I love your three characters, keep it up!
2/3/21, 7:55 AM
I actually don't think that this story's syntax is horrible. But I think the set-up portion of this story makes a mistake that I see in a lot of works by beginning authors: too many unnecessary descriptions. A lot of times, authors feel obligated to describe every single detail of what a character looks like, even if it has no bearing on the story's actual themes or character arcs. And some of the descriptions in this story actually make it harder to picture the characters, rather than easier; Micah is supposed to be a fit young 5'6' guy who also somehow weighs 200 pounds. And while we get these slow-paced descriptive passages, the human interactions seem incredibly rushed; within the course of a single paragraph, Ballard introduces himself, offers Micah a well-paying job, and Micah accepts it. But all of this is stuff that writers have to learn by experience: how to pace a story, what details to elaborate upon and what details can be omitted. @Meltedzentai, I hope you keep at this, and I'm sure you'll see constant improvement.
Anonymous
2/3/21, 6:45 AM
Your syntax is horrible. The insistence on piling multiple adjectives in front of every noun during the scene-setting part of the story is exhausting and laboured. And it is incredibly difficult to work out what's actually happening.
Anonymous
1/25/21, 2:44 AM
its so interesting wheres moareeee
1/19/21, 12:20 PM
Thank you guys. It took me more then a year to write it. Part II coming eventually.
1/19/21, 1:09 AM
What a fun and magical story. I loved the style of their conversations and the manner of their talk. Great job portraying how a wolf made into a man would act. And I appreciate your underlying theme of respecting the woods and the seen and unseen creatures that live in them.
1/18/21, 12:30 AM
I really enjoyed it, for obvious reasons. Looking forward to seeing additional chapters of this story. you're a gifted writer.
Anonymous
1/17/21, 3:26 PM
This is an amazing story. I can't wait to see more!
1/17/21, 6:24 AM
Great beginning! I look forward to more of this story.
1/17/21, 3:08 AM
A truly beautiful piece of writing and a great story. Very nice shifting of the perspectives between the wolf and the hunter that sets up the relationship between the two. I don't think there will be mind control in the story; it's more about the bond between the hunter and the wolf-man. I'll be looking forward to the next parts of this fairy tale.