Really enjoying this story, it is fantastic. So often erotic stories sacrifice character development for sex scenes but you have masterfully combined both. I'm definitely on board for more of Willem's trials and tribulations. I did think this chapter missed a trick by not having the cop shove that nightstick inside Willem while he was fucking him - I love DP scenes and the one with Josh and the twins was over all too soon for my liking! I don't know if you'd consider a spot of fisting - I can envision a scene where Josh and/or the twins inflict that on Willem. And I would really like to see Willem publicly humiliated - wearing skimpy clothing, coerced into nude modeling or porn if he wants to get the dick that he wants. Desperation for dick could easily be the lever for guys to push him into stuff like that, especially if they know he's homophobic and a bully.

Definitely love how the story is going. I will say I think Willem's character development might be rushed just a tad. We're at 94 more tops and he is already kind is okay with being a bottom. It seems like to me he should have much more inner turmoil trying to reconcile how pleasurable he finds the sex, with how he sees himself and where he wants to be after meeting the requirements of the curse. That, plus his budding relationship with Jake, will make it much more believable that he's worked through these issues if your plan is to make him stay gay. I do like how you are showing that he cannot simply return to the status quo and how maybe he social becomes kind of trapped being gay, so even if he wanted to go back, it's more complicated. I also think that the curse should come with some more unexpected conditions and loopholes. For example, it could be a hot ending where he never bottoms for 100 different guys because he falls in love with Jake and accepts that he will never go back to the way he was, but is not punished by the curse. Or have Jake start to be affected by the curse if he and Willem keep fucking. Like Jake becomes super dominant and masculine, while Willem does the opposite. Anyway, I think this story is incredible and you have a real knack for writing. If I was going to have the story go anywhere, Willem likely needs to start dressing and looking (maybe sounding) more gay. If he is a surfer, make his new suit of choice a speedo. Maybe he is forced to shave his body. Maybe he hooks up with a UCLA frat bro and goes into college with everyone thinking he's gay (again he gets trapped in the socialization that he's gay). So many hot options! Keep them coming!

I'm really liking this series. Definitely one of my favorites in a good while. My only feedback would be to request that you spend a little more time describing the physical sensations Willem feels, especially near/during climax, and also maybe having slightly longer sex scenes. When you say stuff like, "The top came and Willem's cock shot in response," it's a hot visual but it feels more like 'showing' vs 'telling' when it comes to Willem's experience. I really love descriptions of physical sensations. What did Willem feel like as he came, and where did he feel it? Did it feel like a relief of pressure? A loss of control, or perhaps empowering somehow? You did this really well when you had Willem noticing after his second or third time that he didn't feel the same shame he felt previously. I would love if you brought a little bit of that description to his climaxes. The rest of my comment is not really feedback as much as some hot ideas I wanted to share. I would find it pretty hot if Willem came multiple times in a session, not just when the top finishes. Or, if he didn't finish at all, but realized he had no interest in finishing himself off without a cock in him - or if he felt completely satisfied just by being bred... please don't feel constrained to the formula of "sex starts, change position, then the top cums and that makes the bottom cum in response." When the bottom seems to only finish in response to the top finishing, IMO it sends a message that he's only cumming because the curse makes him cum when a top finishes inside him - rather than it being because of the raw pleasure he's feeling. Some other ideas I've been having (but please only consider them if it feels natural in the story to you): * have the curse escalate by having the pink glow not fade until Willem's completely milked the top dry. * Allow somehow for the curse to be satisfied (and for Willem to feel satisfied) by only performing oral (and of course the top doesn't even think about reciprocating). * Or, alternatively, Willem accidentally blows a guy to completion, and they're too tired to fuck him, so Willem's forced to squirm / receive another punishment because it takes too long for them to recover * Have a punishment involve nipple growth and sensitivity increase. * Have the pink glow fall on another total bottom, forcing Willem to somehow turn them, or perhaps more body modifications that make him more irresistable to top Again, really liking this series. I've wanked to each chapter, and some multiple times :) My feedback comes with best intentions and gratitude. I haven't been this excited about a series in a while.

Keep the chapters "cumming". I'll see myself out now...

Awwww. The ending actually makes it seem like the guys are going to bond. I like when stories have surprisingly emotional twists and turns. And note how none of Willem's so-called "bros" have checked on him...Jake seems like he could be a real friend. :)

excellent

Love where this is heading, love a good story of a straight jock turning into a bottom twink. Hope the curse takes more of his masculinity, shrinks him down and takes his muscles. Very hot progression in this installment.

This is a great series, it has character development, magical intervention, and a healthy dose of sexiness. what more could you want? Please keep on going, can't wait to see what happens.

What a great story! I love watching Willem's slow realization of what his selfishness is doing (plus seeing his homophobic father explains why he ended up the way he did), and Jake gaining more confidence as time passes. Excellent work!

This is easily one of the best stories on this site! Can't wait to read more!