Recent Comments

4/22/21, 12:48 PM
This story gets better with every chapter. Great work.
4/22/21, 9:09 AM
you are earnestly just a great writer. but man do you make a hot story as well. i love it when a new talented writer shows up! great series so far!
4/22/21, 4:07 AM
You really understand how to craft a story. Great job - again!
4/21/21, 10:21 PM
I originally had a longer comment typed up but it was deleted. Anyway, this was a great chapter, and I think was a return to what some of the older chapters were in terms of quality. If you’re looking for a spinoff, I think hearing about the uncle and Joey could be a fun time. I also think it could be good to have a chapter from Jake’s perspective. And as a sidenote, I definitely need a Jake in my life who is so patient and understanding LOL. Any tops looking to make a Willem, come cast a curse on me ;)
Anonymous
4/20/21, 9:18 PM
bnrilliant writing, I cannot stop reading, and good job I have loads of batteries....
4/17/21, 5:30 PM
Not your best chapter...

4/19/21, 8:53 PM
@jkstrapme Sadly have to agree. I want to preface and say that I think the overall story and concept are still pretty good, but I think that given some of the feedback that were provided from the last chapter, this chapter tries to rectify some plot holes and explain certain things in too direct a fashion that makes them feel a bit out of place. for example, I actually like the idea that he had somehow “stored away“ his memories, but I feel like that should’ve been introduced a few chapters ago and/or the ending of this chapter should’ve been delayed by at least one more chapter. I think it’s pretty clear at this point that there’s no going back (ie Willem is just gonna be gay), and I think that tension is completely gone. So I at this point, I don’t think there’s any reason to try to address any of the inner turmoil there, but more so how he may come to accept it and how he is going to adapt (eg coming out, etc.) I think moving forward, the thing that would be best to focus on is the evolving relationship and dynamic between the two main characters. I think any of the characters that happen from here on out should ideally serve as a reflection back to the core relationship and how Willem is evolving. for example, in this chapter, I think it would’ve been more striking if Willem had been confronted with this guy as a path he could have gone down had things not changed. I think one of the things that he should’ve taken away from this is that he doesn’t want to be like that, whether or not he is gay or straight. Anyway, I don’t wanna be too negative here, because like I said I still think there’s a lot to love here. To the author, if you want someone to look things over before you submit, I would be more than happy to do so.
Anonymous
4/16/21, 8:11 AM
> Attacking political parties I thought wasn’t allowed. I think people forget how homophobic Democrats are. They only pander to gays when it suits them. Please don’t post inflammatory political stuff. 🙄
4/17/21, 10:46 AM
Love it! Very well written. Great sex scene, and great job building up to it.
4/17/21, 6:26 AM
I'm enjoying your story so much. I agree the comment above: perhaps true love can better the spell. I think that the idea of Willem being versatile with Jake and Jake developing his inner surfer self can be a great path to the story. Thanks for writing
Geo
4/16/21, 6:24 PM
I hate to over think a fun sexy story, but I hate when a lighthearted sexy story turns into a story where someone is blackmailed into outing themselves or forcibly outed. It just makes me not like the characters doing that, which is too bad for this story cause I kind of dug Jake and Willem up to this point. I can't help but hope the direction swerves with a twist that they don't end up doing that. Also ditto to Taylor about hoping he doesn't lose his muscles. I feel like way too many stories lean too far into sissification/twinkification.

4/17/21, 6:23 AM
@Geo Yay, someone who agrees haha. I mean, don't get me wrong some of those stories are hot and all but...I'm a gay guy that is into men, and a lot of them end up making them extremely feminine with such small dicks that they refer to them as clits, which is just...unfortunate. Granted, I don't really like the whole dick shrinkage thing to start with because the bigger a dick is the better imo, so. And I would normally agree with you about the blackmail thing, but in a case for someone like him...I'm ok with it. He is in a position of power and could help pass laws or encourage sentiment that could get people hurt, or killed, and from the way he treated Willem during their encounter, I feel as if he would eventually end up hurting, killing, or causing the death of someone with his actions, because I mean seriously he suggesting PNPing to an 18 year old that had never done anything harder then weed and alcohol, that...is dangerous. I do however worry that, based on how they had sex, that if they do release the video that he'll claim it was rape...because he was being ridden by Willem and not actively fucking him. Speaking of weed, I find it interesting that it hasn't been mentioned any about Willem smoking anymore since the foursome with his former friends.