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8/23/21, 10:43 PM
This chapter feels really well edited, considering the comment that this one was cut short/rearranged. The subtle tone shift was well executed as a transition chapter from full hot scenes to more plot development. I fell myself getting pulled into the larger story. Great job!
8/23/21, 5:29 PM
Very hot! I look forward to the next chapter.
8/23/21, 12:22 PM
Loved it! The three guys waking up together was sweet and hot at the same time, and I liked the tension and release between Robert and Luke. Hope Matt can come give Robert some peace of mind soon 😏 formatting and proofreading stuff are spotless too! Thanks for posting.
8/23/21, 7:56 AM
I love this series :)
8/18/21, 8:03 PM
Chapter 13* specifically. Their original meeting is in chapter 5.

8/19/21, 8:37 AM
@Norismo Oh boy, yes, that's a bit complicated. Okay, so it's another version of the meeting, with the changes from the latter chapters? Okay, it makes a lot more sense that way. Still confused by the manor bit, but that might get explained later on.
8/18/21, 7:10 PM
A huge follower of the main story on GSS. And now I'm even more confused on how much is/was changed by Billy Bonkers. It's great to see more from other people's perspective, but how the hell did Jack have memories of Daniel as an ex before Daniel was even there, but then the manor??? Really romantic, but oh boy was putting it in Dalton Creek made me think way too much about the lore and what is happening in the main story to fully enjoy.

8/18/21, 8:01 PM
@BobbyBlobfish I love the lore! Thanks for the support. This is basically happening during part 3 of the "Dream" bit, not chapter 4 (?) Right before Daniel wakes up. Daniel's memories of their meeting are also changed. It is a huge mess honestly. You need a pen and paper to follow along at this point . I might have to make a forum post 😂😂
8/17/21, 9:40 PM
I really like this story, but two big problems here: punctuation and uppercases are all over the place ( "ask me this **.?**", "didn't know **What** I was), some words are missing ( do you see *me* as a person or as an object), sometimes letters (an*D* only do things with me. I was the one who was supposed to *b*ring you her*e*)... So I had to stop to make sure I properly understood. I mean, English is not my first language either, but here it's getting in the way of reading. The second things is that it comes WAY too fast. Even with those explanations, nobody would forgive that easily. Even if Kai puts conditions, it still feel like he got over a lot of issues and sympathize too much with Jae. It's not credible, so I'm taken out of the story, because Jae's kind of behavior is very toxic. Even if that's the point, it doesn't come like the story criticize enough, and if it's involuntary, it means one of the character is bordering on bad guy without meaning to.

8/18/21, 4:01 PM
@BobbyBlobfish Thanks for the comment. Punctuation is something I will work on, I am not so good on it, so I will work on it. As for the second the second part, I'll try to explain and touch on that. Kai will actually still feel uneasy around Jae, and won't want to actually spend time with him, but traumatic event will bring them together, so that's all I'll say on that. I'll also touch on why Jae seems toxic, and it should give a reason as to why he may seem controlling at time in future chapter. Hope that gives you a sense of where this is going, at least a bit. I read a series on Nifty that kind of inspired me to kind of right my own, and in it the guys were somewhat what you described, and very controlling, but they still loved there partner. I kind of plan to make a series out of this, if this story goes well, so keep the comments coming.