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8/27/21, 7:00 PM
Also, since when couldn't partial edits be made? I'm pretty sure that was allowed. So he should totally be ae to cross out "magic dick" but keep the rest. One of the frustrating elemebts of us following the "straight" guy is we never get to enjoy the sex scenes as the top or to completion. I wish marc's cock slipped into his while they were posing.

8/28/21, 11:43 PM
@Heru Kane It's not so much they can't make partial edits, as they're both too panicky and too sex-addled to think through all the myriad variations, so they don't even try.

8/29/21, 12:03 AM
Exactly! Gabe and Sam are horny dumbasses who aren't thinking 100% logically about how the book works. @HyperMuscleDirk

8/29/21, 12:12 AM
@bluesuedewho I miss the logic of the starting chapters. They were quite enjoyable. Now its thoughtless decisions rather than the ones where they were smart enough to protect the book and to make sure they couldn't write themselves out of reality and such.

8/29/21, 12:48 AM
I'm not sure either Gabe or Sam are especially logical thinkers! Gabe might have been a bit more relatively thoughtful about edits (and Sam has the occasional lucid moment), but both of them are mostly just thinking about getting off at the end of the day. Not that there aren't smart edits planned for future chapters -- just expect most of the drama to come from wacky changes! @Heru Kane

Anonymous
8/29/21, 2:05 AM
@bluesuedewho @Heru Kane I mean, I personally kind of *like* the fact that they aren't making perfectly logical decisions. It lets things spiral out of control and create... you know, conflict, drama, intrigue. One of the fun things about this story for *me* specifically is that things don't go as planned, and we get to watch two well meaning sex motivated idiots warp reality and scramble to deal with the consequences. I'm not sure if the early chapters were really "more logical" so much as just... things hadn't escalated as much yet, there wasn't horny juice in the water supply, and the two of them were a bit more cautious about using the book. Idk! I've loved this story a LOT so far and I trust bluesuedewho to create an interesting plot without needing it to come from Sam and Gabe's direct intentions. Nothing has felt out of character really for me so much as just a natural progression from where we started given the changes so far.

8/29/21, 9:42 PM
@Anonymous agreed! this has been fun while not throwing away previous plot points like Marc being into Sam or the people in
BearBoi
8/29/21, 12:46 AM
i don't know about anyone else, but I imagine Bussy with the voice of Jiz https://youtu.be/xAK108u2xAs
8/28/21, 11:33 PM
Great story and character development. Thought there would be some great sex. May be next chapter. Luv where this is going.....
8/28/21, 11:23 PM
FIrst time (virgin) reading one of your stories. I'm hooked and need to read more. Your detailed descriptions of the characters are great and keep me hard & leaking. Keep up the great work as I read on....
SC Walker
8/28/21, 7:03 AM
As always, an excellent chapter. Your sex scene descriptions are so illustrative and hot, I love how you can use words to really paint a picture of what is happening. I wish you could teach me how to write like that lol I'm really intrigued by the "black suits" subplot. My guess is that it's related to another one of your stories ;) The mystery is very intriguing and I have tons of theories about the female teachers... Maybe it's the big softie in me, but I love how caring and attentive Marc is. I actually kind of ship him and Sam. Not sure if that is your intention. I agree with the other reader that more than anyone I want Marc to have a happy ending. Sam and Gabe both can act like jerks, but Marc has consistently been portrayed as a very sweet, but extremely horny and gifted, stud. I will say, though, that tension and anticipation and build up are good, but sometimes too much build up can lead to disappointment if the end result isn't worth it. by that I mean, I hope by the end of the story what all your readers are likely hoping for will happen to Sam. I can be patient (and intrigued), but it also makes me nervous that I'm going to end up disappointed.

Nutiper
8/28/21, 7:37 AM
@SC Walker Oh! What are you hoping will happen to Sam? Like, a happy ending? Or are you thinking something more specific (like anal)?

SC Walker
8/28/21, 12:52 PM
Yeah, I'm hoping eventually Sam will get fucked. I think the story is getting there, but I'm not 100% sure. Maybe it's just me being inpatient but I could never write a story with this much teasing haha. @Nutiper

SC Walker
8/28/21, 12:56 PM
To be more specific, the goal of this chapter seemed to be humiliating and embarassing Sam, which isn't that appealing to me. I just feel bad for him. I enjoy it more when Sam is enthusiastic and enjoying it, not when he's cumming against his will, humiliating himself in front of people. @SC Walker

8/28/21, 2:13 PM
Thanks for the compliment! Revise, revise, revise is my best advice! The first draft was done a while ago, but I've been tweaking it with Nu and MM's help for weeks. Coming back to something you wrote the next day (or a couple days later) is helpful, I think! I won't spoil anything with teachers and blacksuits, but there's definitely a lot more plot mixed in with the porn in future chapters. Hopefully Gabe and Sam aren't coming across as *too* jerky. I'm trying to write them as (other than pushing each other's buttons) horny college guys who are really making an effort to be "ethical sluts" -- eager to try new things with new people without hurting anyone's feelings -- and it comes a little more naturally to Sam who's a bit of a people pleaser, even if he always has sex on the brain. @SC Walker

8/28/21, 2:17 PM
Some of that I included because I like a little light humiliation, but *also* every time Sam gets embarrassed (or potentially embarrassed) it pushes the plot/changes forward because one of his defining characteristics is his need to maintain his "straight" reputation -- even if it gets a little ridiculous! @SC Walker

SC Walker
8/28/21, 2:35 PM
I totally understand that, sorry if I came across trying to dictate your story to you. I think you've put in alot of effort into making Sam likeable sure he's a dumbass , but as you said he is just trying to enjoy himself. Creating such syampathetic character is a win in itself @bluesuedewho

8/28/21, 6:49 PM
Oh no, you're good! I was just worried things were still coming across as darker than I intended. @SC Walker
8/27/21, 8:44 PM
the way how this story has a strangle hold on my cock and orgasms... I love it so much!

8/28/21, 2:03 PM
Thanks! What a compliment! @Thexshxboi
Aug 27, 2021
8/28/21, 4:05 AM
Hot, sexy story with a lot of group sex...my kind of story! Excellent writing...you felt like you were there in the shed with all the guys (wish I was). The hairy boss sounded super sexy, the character descriptions were great and the sex scenes had me hard an leaking the hole time. Keep up the great and write more!

8/28/21, 8:24 AM
@MuscleSon69 Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it!
8/28/21, 4:23 AM
so fucking hot! cant wait to see what else he puts into the agenda!
8/28/21, 2:02 AM
I do hope Sam can accept that he likes doing "gay stuff" eventually.
8/28/21, 1:04 AM
I love the story, and I especially love the interactions between Gabe and Sam. I can definitely see that Sam and Marc are being pulled together with the edits made, but I hope that even if Sam eventually succumbs to Marc magic dick he doesn't lose his relationship with Gabe. No matter what happens, this is a fantastic story, and I'm super excited to see what changes and events you write in future chapters, keep up the awesome work!

8/28/21, 1:47 AM
Thanks! I try to avoid spoilers (although I'm probably bad at it...) but I will say that Sam and Gabe are still close friends at the end of the story! @Jacker