Recent Comments

11/5/21, 10:27 AM
Glad to see Jimmy become an active character again! Whit's ongoing transformations have been and are incredible.

11/7/21, 1:32 AM
@amul Jimmy was never out of the picture, but sometimes you have to let other actors have center stage for awhile... so they can get enough rope with which to hang themselves.
Annon
11/5/21, 2:41 AM
yup. loved this. more immobile stories! I'll be adding some myself but damn i wanna see more from you too haha : tight stories

11/7/21, 1:31 AM
@Annon I thought Whit deserved to discover what greed gets you the hard way.
11/6/21, 6:56 PM
Hot. Can't wait for more. great story.

11/6/21, 7:53 PM
@Jonanator Thank you so much! I'm glad you're enjoying it so far!
11/6/21, 5:04 PM
Thanks for the feedback peeps. I made more edits to keep it in third person and hope I fixed the issues.
11/6/21, 1:51 PM
I wanted to like this but as Razz TFs pointed out above, the change of perspective (1st, 2nd and 3rd person) was really distracting and made it quite hard to get into the flow. It’s a shame because it was otherwise a great premise.

11/6/21, 4:45 PM
@Ruffcub let me see if I can make some more edits. Sometimes things get missed in the editing process. Thanks for pointing it out.
11/4/21, 9:53 PM
I agree with Martin it would be hot for him to be accidentally turned into an Incubus as well.

Martin
11/6/21, 10:01 AM
@master1 Hold it... I reserve that idea for myself! I think I'm going to write a story with that theme in December :)
11/6/21, 3:10 AM
This was so good that I want to call the seduction "believable" except it's a literal demonic creature using literal seduction magic. Very hot, flirty, and fun to read. Thanks for posting!
11/6/21, 2:25 AM
what a hot story. love how the ghost or what ever change them from farther & son to brothers. Then to lover's. I really love the whole daddy part.
11/6/21, 1:03 AM
I did enjoy this story, because it was very descriptive in a pretty fun way of a lot of great kinks... but on the other hand, I found it difficult to read at parts. The perspective was shifting very quickly, from 1st person, to 3rd person, and at points even 2nd person, where the reader was David? Maybe it's my bad for reading while high and getting lost, but it took a bit of focus to follow. At parts it seemed like two different versions edited together, where it was morning and Nate was making breakfast, and it was afternoon/evening and he'd ordered pizza.
11/5/21, 4:05 AM
Nice. Can't wait for more.

11/5/21, 6:56 PM
@Jonanator Thanks for reading. I hope you enjoy the rest of the story!