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11/22/21, 2:30 AM
you should make it so he always has to sit in a guy's lap whenever he sits down. like, he can't use chairs

11/22/21, 2:11 PM
@MrSirTurtle Thanks! I really appreciate any and all ideas I'm at a bit of a loss.
11/21/21, 10:24 PM
I'm really glad to see this return. Can't wait for more :)

11/22/21, 2:56 AM
@Hargoni I wish I had more time and energy to write! I'm likely to do Caron next, then I *hope* to have a two or three chapter arc from Kean's perspective.
11/21/21, 2:05 PM
Awww, that was so cute! Loved it! Glad to see you returning to this story, and I love Emrys's writing!

11/22/21, 2:56 AM
@BobbyBlobfish I'm glad you like the writing style! I wanted to make the perspectives of each if the werewolves very distinct as more and more about their culture and personalities is revealed. I'm glad that Emrys resonates well with you guys! He was a lot of fun to write as a perspective character!
11/18/21, 5:42 PM
This is great! I had memories of the original reading some parts, the characters are all interesting and the build-up is unpecable! Could you please add the name of the POV characters? They were time I had no idea who was thinking what before several paragraphs. Was a bit confusing.

11/18/21, 8:02 PM
@BobbyBlobfish agreed

11/18/21, 10:57 PM
@BobbyBlobfish Yeah, this chapter has been done for a while. I actually forgot I hadn't put it up here, and gave myself a small heart attack when I came to see how it was doing and couldn't find it. I was afraid someone was going to say that. I was trying to have the last line before the POV switch direct the reader to who was going to be next instead of breaking the pace of the story with "(Character) POV"s everywhere. Were their specific transitions that caused confusion, or did the idea just not work at all?

11/20/21, 9:14 PM
@BobbyBlobfish @darkblade2814 I made an edit to hopefully clear up the POV switches. I'd be grateful if you guys could go through this chapter again to see if the transitions are better now.

11/21/21, 2:09 PM
@Johntheedoe Sorry I took so long to answer. For some, it was easy to figure out who it was, but for exemple, the first switch was about the football team. Without precising who amongst the football team we were following. The fact that there is such a huge cast mean it's really easy to lose track of who's who and where. Thanks for the small edits! Really helps to no end. =)
11/21/21, 4:36 AM
Very excited to see the next installment of this! Well done, man!

11/21/21, 9:31 AM
@Dace Thanks!
11/21/21, 7:44 AM
ahh dude great story i really loved the foot worship in part one
Gasuda
11/21/21, 5:31 AM
What a stunning reversal! The merging was hot, and Whit is finally, *finally* getting some of what he deserves. I can't wait to read more!

11/21/21, 7:14 AM
@Gasuda Thanks for your comment I've got almost 1,000 views on this chapter and you're the first to say anything, thank you! Feedback is always encouraged and I'm glad you're enjoying this. Whit is getting what he deserves, he could have taken the first deal but he was greedy. Oh well!
11/19/21, 11:15 PM
Took a bit to figure out who was narrating as the perspective shifted, but other than that easily fixable issue, I found this really hot, sexy and arousing. An incredible buildup that I can't wait to follow.

11/20/21, 9:08 PM
@Essex I have edited it to try and make it easier to tell who the POV switches to. I'd appreciate if people gave it another read through and told me if it's clearer now than it was before.
Kods
11/19/21, 11:50 AM
@Johntheedoe I think I caught that at one point, but now that you said that, it makes it easier to notice. However, I'd say we've been introduced to many characters so quickly that it's hard to keep track of them all. At this point providing a POV Header switch is easier for the readers. That said, I don't think the technique you implemented is a bad one inherently, but would be better suited if the story had a smaller cast, or used with a cast the readership knows intimately well that they can pick up on the different POV with context clues ( I.e. setting, their frame of mind, other charaters their with.) Even then might still trip up people. I think it's usually easier to do this techinque in third person though because all "I"s can run the same.

11/19/21, 1:22 PM
@Kods Agreed. The parts of the story I could follow were really hot, but I found it impossible to keep track of all the characters, and after about the second narrator shift, I just gave up trying to figure out who was talking.

11/20/21, 9:04 PM
@ Kods @Hypnothrill I've edited in some more lines to hopefully make it clearer who the POV switches to. If you guys would be willing to give it another read through and tell me if it's better or not I'd be grateful.
11/16/21, 9:59 PM
This was so fucking great. Best chapter I've read on the site in a good while. A lot really came together and paid off. Thank you for this! If there was one thing I would change, I would have found it really hot if the cock shrinking lasted until the next sex partner. That is to mean, changes would only occur during sex and then remain until Sam was having sex again. This still seems in line with the edit to me, and removes a piece of control. Also, it could later cause someone to see Sam's small cock - putting the idea in their head that it's hot to them, so they would want to keep it small when having sex with him. Still, perfect story. I actually read it yesterday and I'm still on the high of it.

11/18/21, 3:10 AM
Oh wow, thanks! Huge compliment! Huh. I think I like you're interpretation of that edit better than mine! I might figure out a way to make that happen in future installments. Personally, I'm a huge fan of SPH/shrinking (I love Secret Sauna!), but I deliberately kept it a minor element in this story since there's so much going on. @Dreamweavr

11/20/21, 3:37 AM
@Dreamweavr oh God, that would have been so hot! I'm guessing it would have led to an edit like "women don't care about big dicks" or something while he's still trying to get with Melanie (not that she's shown any interest, anyway)