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1/20/22, 6:37 PM
While the story itself is simple, I like the expertly crafted the way it jumps in time to reveal information not before it is needed. It does a lot of world building without explicitly telling us everything, just welcomes us to accept this reality and enjoy a slice of it. And I always enjoy a good dom-bottom story.

1/21/22, 1:29 AM
This is super helpful for me! Knowing that this is something I did well will help me focus on improving it in the future. I think I started to comprehend this after chapter 5 of P&FB thanks to a comment by time.to.occur. It’ll definitely be a part of my next editing pass for the follow-up to this story. @Josh Slater
1/20/22, 5:51 PM
Well written, second story now for me that has shown me that it is possible to inject a tenderness and variety to sex scenes to try to keep things interesting. I did find the characterisation of "I would *never* loose this much cum..." a bit odd when just sessions earlier he was saying that he was ready to let it all go, not telling his husband that he was close

1/20/22, 6:16 PM
Ooh, I’m really glad that I was able to show you something new in that sense! I’m always trying to make sure that my scenes aren’t just repetitive. I’d like to think that what he thought earlier on was a result of Tobias’s powerful edging, and once Tobias cowed him he became a little more sensible again, but I understand if that rang kind of strangely after all! @A Possession A Day

1/20/22, 6:41 PM
@Soren Fitz Yeah that does make sense, I guess people are rarely going to be fully rational in the middle of a wild sex romp and everything haha. Just a minor thing
Archer19cm
1/14/22, 11:59 PM
Delightful read. And I am Team Eddy the Monster in some form. Kudos!

1/20/22, 1:27 PM
@Archer19cm Allegiance noted. ;)
1/11/22, 12:32 PM
Eddy could be monsterised, maybe on a part time basis where each is monster or human but cannot control the process e.g. They wake up each day as HH HM MH orMM

1/20/22, 1:23 PM
@Morph some interesting ideas. I think lore wise human to monster would be almost impossible ('never say never' with magic, but, regular human into a semi-magical beast? truly difficult). However, I hadn't considered the scenario of letting Yarif "spend a few days" as a human until I read your comment, and this would be no problem for a decent wizard or witch. With appropriate motivation, the mayor would probably do this for Yarif. The idea also appeals to me, because it would be akin to a 'walk in the enemies shoes' scenario. I have a potential chapter coming up where Eddy tries to bring Yarif to "the gay village", claiming "well, we're gay; we're as much magical beings and we are gay so these people are our tribe too, these *human* queers; and they're well used to being afraid to walk down the street alone for fear of danger". Maybe they meet a drag queen, (maybe like a "shock" drag queen, or some gruff but friendly looking bears).
1/20/22, 1:26 AM
Well, I tried to pace myself, but couldn't. Read all three chapters of this story almost without pause. Great story! Loved every bit of it. I realize that part of what was so great about it is your humor -- I really love the combination of humor and eroticism. I seem to remember other stories of yours were much more somber and dark. But this one (IMO) is just perfect and hope you will keep adding to it. Love the unintentional exhibitionism (especially of Joe and Frank) and look forward to the fulfillment of the ass action promised for Frank. Thanks for writing/posting this story -- it's made me very happy.
1/19/22, 11:37 PM
Second chapter was as hot as the first. Loved it! Great idea to have a gay frat and the Hardys in togas/briefs -- hands all over. Glad you're still keeping them (sort of) naive. They were born to be taken advantage of.
1/19/22, 11:06 PM
Always love your stories, Stimle! So happy to see them on this site. And this one! Wow! It was like my favorite fantasy I never knew I had. Hardy boys are the perfect sex objects (especially naive, priggish, well-built, cute Hardy boys -- which is just the way I always imagined them). Love the way their ex-teammates used them like sex toys (without quite being overt about it), especially the fingering of Frank's butthole and the general hands all over both their buttocks and tits. And then for them to get into the control of the cops (who had it in for them). I've just read the first chapter so far, but can't wait to get into the second! Thanks for a great story.
1/19/22, 5:53 PM
@bluesuedewho, hope you're doing okay!
1/18/22, 9:51 PM
Some later world building exposition would be welcome, even if not sexy~

Martin
1/19/22, 6:03 AM
@naturallyInconsistent Rly? I thought my "instruction manual" was enough boring text already :)
1/18/22, 9:54 PM
Am quite lost reading this. Isn't he said to be an incubus? But without reading the manual to the succubus part, he is a succubus in this chapter. But this makes meow hard!!!

Martin
1/19/22, 6:03 AM
@naturallyInconsistent You mean because he bottomed? For me I didn't draw the line between inbcubus or succubus at whether he's dom or sub. He's male, so he's an incubus by definition. The great thing about his new sexual awakening as an incubus is that he can and will accommodate every man's sexual desire. So if his 'victim' desires a sub as a partner, Chad will be the perfect sub slut for him. And vice versa. For me, that would be the greatest achievement. Being the best sexual partner you can be, having no issues adapting at all and while still enjoying it to the fullest!