Recent Comments

2/6/22, 4:26 PM
Fantastic Love where this is heading

2/6/22, 6:26 PM
@stimle thanks man
2/6/22, 12:55 PM
I really hope there is more.

2/6/22, 4:36 PM
@Cutlerfan Spell checking and proof reading the finale as we speak!
2/6/22, 12:50 AM
Great story and I'm really looking forward to next installment with the other soldier. Would love a role play scene eventually with Marco as the commander before the series ends! Too early now but just wanted to mention it.
2/5/22, 11:46 PM
Good start. Looking forward to more.

Jonanator
2/5/22, 11:55 PM
@Beaner thanks. I'll probably post the next chapter either later, or tomorrow, when my laptop stops being stupid (it's always giving trouble) so stay tuned 🙂
2/4/22, 5:32 AM
That was heartbreaking. I don't think I've ever been so caught up in a story on this site. I love what others have written but the humanity and inequity in this is touching. I hope for my own sense of peace, that they find a way to be together

2/4/22, 7:01 AM
@Stroppy Author. Thanks for commenting, and thanks for being on the journey with them. Ehh... I want that for them, but, it's very hard to find a fix. I've just uploaded so I'm currently in Eddy's brain trying to handle things; perhaps scheme, perhaps flip out. I've got about three scraps of half chances, and maybe Eddy confronting The Mayor again? its gonna get worse before it gets better I think. I'm also thinking the next chapter will be double-length and final.

2/5/22, 3:44 AM
@The Dirty Spiders Email me if you want to brainstorm. I think I'm attracted to how well you captured the innocence of Yarif, and his vulnerability. And Eddies self reflection is so genuinely paced. There are so many humanistic features to this and so well done.

2/5/22, 1:30 PM
@Stroppy Author If I emailed you a draft script of all but the final scene, would you give me a rundown of how you think the story would realistically resolve, versus how you would like to see it resolve? I've never done this before, but I think I need outside insight. You would of course be spoiling the entire story finale for yourself.
Dec 18, 2021
2/5/22, 7:09 AM
Well I enjoyed it!
Anonym
2/3/22, 8:59 PM
Not gonna lie, this story is hot, but once you described the Prime Minister, I think I recognized him and that was a weird feeling. Your story writing and the hypnosis is very good, but I just couldn't continue to be aroused by it, once his face was there. But that's different tastes I suppose. (Since I have to know to sate my curiosity if I'm right... does the PMs name sound similiar to Furtz?)

2/4/22, 8:21 PM
@Anonym Interesting ... I had the opposite reaction. Your hint enabled me to figure out who this was, and once I googled some pics, I was much more into the story! :-)

Anonym
2/5/22, 12:16 AM
@Retrofantasia just to close to home for me I suppose. I dislike him in general and wasn't expecting to see a local politician here. But it'd be boring if everyone likes the same stuff. I'm glad my comment made you enjoy the story more

2/5/22, 5:35 AM
@Anonym i guess the mistery has been solved! i usually don't write about celebs etc. but first time i saw him i imagined doing to him what i wrote about. sorry to hear that you couldn't be aroused by the story!
Anonymous
2/3/22, 4:44 PM
Oh god, so glad you come back writing, I love your works so much!!!

2/5/22, 5:31 AM
@anonymous thank you so much! it means a lot
2/5/22, 5:14 AM
I really enjoy how Simon's power seems to work, Please keep them coming