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ObedientSlave
2/6/22, 8:13 PM
whens the next chapter?
hairyartist
2/6/22, 2:34 PM
So Hot Man, Thanks!

2/6/22, 6:27 PM
@hairyartist more than welcome!
2/6/22, 4:26 PM
Fantastic Love where this is heading

2/6/22, 6:26 PM
@stimle thanks man
2/6/22, 12:55 PM
I really hope there is more.

2/6/22, 4:36 PM
@Cutlerfan Spell checking and proof reading the finale as we speak!
2/6/22, 12:50 AM
Great story and I'm really looking forward to next installment with the other soldier. Would love a role play scene eventually with Marco as the commander before the series ends! Too early now but just wanted to mention it.
2/5/22, 11:46 PM
Good start. Looking forward to more.

Jonanator
2/5/22, 11:55 PM
@Beaner thanks. I'll probably post the next chapter either later, or tomorrow, when my laptop stops being stupid (it's always giving trouble) so stay tuned 🙂
2/4/22, 5:32 AM
That was heartbreaking. I don't think I've ever been so caught up in a story on this site. I love what others have written but the humanity and inequity in this is touching. I hope for my own sense of peace, that they find a way to be together

2/4/22, 7:01 AM
@Stroppy Author. Thanks for commenting, and thanks for being on the journey with them. Ehh... I want that for them, but, it's very hard to find a fix. I've just uploaded so I'm currently in Eddy's brain trying to handle things; perhaps scheme, perhaps flip out. I've got about three scraps of half chances, and maybe Eddy confronting The Mayor again? its gonna get worse before it gets better I think. I'm also thinking the next chapter will be double-length and final.

2/5/22, 3:44 AM
@The Dirty Spiders Email me if you want to brainstorm. I think I'm attracted to how well you captured the innocence of Yarif, and his vulnerability. And Eddies self reflection is so genuinely paced. There are so many humanistic features to this and so well done.

2/5/22, 1:30 PM
@Stroppy Author If I emailed you a draft script of all but the final scene, would you give me a rundown of how you think the story would realistically resolve, versus how you would like to see it resolve? I've never done this before, but I think I need outside insight. You would of course be spoiling the entire story finale for yourself.
Dec 18, 2021
2/5/22, 7:09 AM
Well I enjoyed it!