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3/28/23, 4:35 PM
...this doesn't make sense. I'm reading a story that includes some of the dirtiest, most explicit sexual content I've ever read...and I'm _tearing up_. :p But seriously, this is truly incredible! Thank GOD you kept the flashbacks to Luke's childhood; the contrast between Coach gently taking care of Luke in the past to absolutely blowing his back out in the present was a work of genius (T.S. Eliot called that a "zeugma"--the "yoking" of two contrasting ideas). But it's also super-important because it absolutely explains WHY Coach is doing what he's doing. In the previous incarnation (which ended before we reached this chapter), the Coach's desire for Luke was almost too sexually-driven. Here, we see that what he does is ultimately an act of love and compassion--and not in a creepy "let's justify this sexual assault" way that many writers fall into, but a sense of genuine care for the kid. Your indications of consent and Luke being of age are also crucial to making the story work. Thank you for a truly incredible story. :)

3/28/23, 10:41 PM
@[Feed Your Head](/user/show/1170832) Thanks for the thoughtful comment. Yeah, it was really important for me to portray Coach as helping Luke, giving Luke what he needs, and not from any selfish lustful desires that he has. Love and compassion is the way to put it. TBH stories where coaches/teachers have sex with students make me very uncomfortable. So I really tried to create the right cocktail of circumstances for why it would be OK. I know I know it's just a silly porn story, but there is a certain ick factor for me. Glad you enjoyed the flashbacks, I'm happy that I kept them in too.
3/28/23, 6:09 PM
Am I sick for thinking that the janitor thing actually happend and he's subconsciously suppressing it to the point he's reliving it as dreams? Esp. with the panic episode and all that. (I know that's not the case, per your reply, but that's what I thought after reading the woke up yelling from a nightmare situation) Idk, that'd be both hot, traumatic, and would drive the story to a completely different spiral where he eventually confront the janitor again, and depending on if he has emotional support (coach & sammy etc.), wreck him. (Headcanon) I'm sick.

3/28/23, 6:31 PM
@[CieL](/user/show/748750) That’s a hot scenario, but yeah, not what I’m going for. I think I kinda messed up writing the dream. It’s not supposed to be scary; it’s supposed to be erotic and hot, leaning into a bit of degradation kink, contrasting the slovenly janitor with the clean cut jock. I don’t think Luke is even afraid, since he could easily fight the janitor off. I’ll have to give it another pass through.
3/28/23, 3:03 PM
Oh man, I read this SO fast - nicely, nicely done! I love the insight into Luke’s childhood, and the sensitivity you brought to the depravity he needs in his life. Hot, sexy, smart — I love this series!
3/26/23, 9:37 AM
I am so sorry someone stole your hard work. You have real talent! This wasn't going to go down a road I would have appreciated, but the attention to detail on the psychological corruption was out of this world.

3/28/23, 12:01 PM
@[DaymionMC](/user/show/10033419) let me assure you that the ending i ~~am~~ _was_ working towards ~~will blow~~ _would have blown_ your cock off. _alas, because some doucheknuckle cunts can't act like they live in civilized society, now nobody gets to play with it. i've taken my toys and gone home._
3/25/23, 9:35 PM
I’ve never left a comment on erotica before, but I have to say that I adore this story! I was just looking for something to get off to—and don’t get me wrong, you absolutely succeeded on that front—but I ended up invested enough to keep reading even after I finished. The way you played with the medium of choose your own adventure stories was so clever. But that by itself wouldn’t be enough to carry a story. No, what I’m really impressed me was your ability to efficiently characterize every member of a pretty large cast. And the mythology nerd in me loved how you handled the Norse stuff. Big fan of Woddin and her wolves allowing themselves to change and grow over the centuries rather than remaining mostly static. So overall, just wanted to say great work. I’m excited to read your other stuff after the challenge is over.

3/27/23, 10:51 PM
@[Lambsbridge](/user/show/1176976) I'm really touched by this comment! Thank you for leaving it, I really appreciate it! I definitely was juggling a lot with this story, and hearing that all these different aspects (characters, mythology, form) were working successfully for a reader is incredibly gratifying to hear. 😊 Thank you again for leaving this comment. It made my day.
3/26/23, 11:32 AM
I’m binge reading this story and can’t stop! I’m cascading through the “wrong” branch, after following the Micah branch, and really can’t wait to read about Xavier succumbing to all those greedy tops! My slutty self, though, is awed by his willpower facing down all those cocks in this branch! I think I’m recognizing the author you chose to get inspired by in this Zeus branch. I’ll keep my deductions until, hopefully, we get answers. I have a guess about who you are too, but as you asked in other comments I won’t reveal my guess either (although if I’m correct I love the punny pseudonym). Definitely rating this very highly for the contest. Fingers crossed 🤞

3/27/23, 10:37 PM
@[Yunnick](/user/show/10001783) I'm so glad you've been enjoying the story, this is such a nice comment to receive! 😄 And I'm also very charmed that people keep making guesses on the authorship, haha. I think readers have guessed at least three different authors at this point... But yes, keep the guesses private for now! Gotta keep it anonymous till results are announced...
3/26/23, 1:13 PM
Oh man! The sex banter in this chapter is soooooo hot 🥵 I think Bruno and Tony could make me cum just by talking to me like that!

3/27/23, 10:30 PM
@[Yunnick](/user/show/10001783) Oh, don't tell Bruno and Tony *that*, you'll just encourage them to try and make it happen... 😉
3/27/23, 3:20 PM
Dr. Ramoton's assumptions are not logical.
3/27/23, 8:28 AM
" ... just let his first customer of the day through so right? " I can't figure out what that sentence is supposed to mean?
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3/27/23, 12:10 AM
Long after this contest is forgotten, I think all of us readers are going to remember Carter and Brook. This is such a wonderful story, great characterizations - i'm sure the ratings will speak for themselves. Bravo!