Pretty good for a first story! I’m looking forward to seeing the rest :)

Before I ever read a story the summery reals me in. A good story catching snip bit can really draw people in. So instead of you introducing yourself as a new writer, say something about your story and the characters in it. Your introduction can go right before the story begins inside a few (of these). That way people know it’s not about the story. That’s one way or another way is a line under your introduction to break it from the rest of the story. Here’s an example of one I did something like what I’m saying. https://www.gayspiralstories.com/story/show/10006069

I enjoyed would have like a bit more detail in the the clothing and how they were before the transition but I enjoyed none less.

I loved the story but it MUST continue. It is just a start. If not it will be just another good story not a memorable one, And, of course, the two main character have to unite as a team with Kenneth & Thad.

This was a hot set of sex scenes, and I’m glad Papi got to unload in Thad’s ass after all; Kenneth stealing that cumshot was positively wicked! I also understand why Papi is reconsidering—this situation was incredibly stressful, I’m sure, and no one should have to walk around with a career-destroying secret on their shoulders all the time. I appreciate that he’s seriously thinking about it.

Wow! Just found this story. It's incredible. Didn't realize this type of premise would be so hot!! Cannot wait to see what happens next. Thank you Elmara for introducing me to the world of dumb jocks :)

An amazingly tender story, which was so unexpected and delightful. Beautifully written. Many thanks.

Not me, found the image online.Have asked around but no one know where it is from.

Fantastic so far! Looking forward to part 3, hopefully!

The work-out scene and the bondage that follows it were exceptional pieces of writing. There was plenty of detail which gave it an aura of authenticity, yet the reader does not get distracted by the details. The character development for Marcus and Stanley moves ahead -- relentlessly. I am in awe of your skills, Puff. And I am a sucker for an S/M author who takes time to describe how things smell. Your work smells more than most. ;-) Now as to the issue of the morality of Marcus, our main character, I am not as distressed by him as are some readers. Somehow I never was. (Maybe its my sadistic side coming out.) There is no more malignant behavior in Marcus than there is in an average antagonist in a "Law and Order" or "The Blacklist" episode. Of course, we have to assume that this is being read by a reasonably discerning adult audience -- just like we do with a TV later night program. Every chapter reveals some small trait of Marcus' personality, which makes him like most humans -- a mystery both fascinating and terrible. I'd like to know if Marcus is an alter-ego for you Puff, or a combination of men you have known (or want to know) in real life? Whoever he may be, I have always sensed that there is something quite likable about him. I'd like to hang out with Marcus if he were a real guy and rummage around with him in the dark corners of my fantasies. Puff, I know that you are not telling us everything about Marcus for reasons that you have chosen to uncover only in small pieces. I wait for a revelation that shows him to be better than he appears. Proof of my intuition here stems from the deep seated friendship that Stanley exhibits toward him, time and time again. While evil is attractive, here's a case where Stanley is somehow not converted to evil when he is with Marcus. Hypnotism and "Moth to the Flame" do not seem to be adequate explanations. Beside the obvious benefits of friendship, both men are changing each other in ways that helps them grow into a deep and weird love. Can't think of too many other stories of this genre that are driven by such a well articulated character progression.