Recent Comments

6/6/23, 11:56 AM
It seems to took every fetish I have and made the perfect story out of it. Reminds me of my first every erotica, _Seaside Delights_, but gay. Yay! Good work!
6/6/23, 1:18 AM
Oh this was hot. I like the ficking and the growing submission. Here's hoping to maybe some rimming. But yeah I like him producing cum and making them his. The dads becoming his too is hot too.
Flipper
6/5/23, 10:18 PM
This was hot but how do they leave the bed? They don’t have legs any more! Lawks.

6/6/23, 12:20 AM
@Flipper Let's say they phone a friend to help them to some water and then proceed to fuck his brains out? And a pod begins to form. ;)
Anonymous
6/5/23, 11:18 PM
I NEED more of this. One of the hottest stories on here for me. Great writing and premise and i really enjoy the characters as well as their interations, sexy kinky and otherwise
Anonymous
6/5/23, 5:57 PM
Excellent!!
Anonymous
6/5/23, 5:56 PM
Spectacular!!
6/5/23, 3:31 PM
Good first start and you can see the budding bromance to romance forming. I can't wait for more.
6/4/23, 10:56 PM
Pretty good for a first story! I’m looking forward to seeing the rest :)
5/28/23, 6:37 PM
Before I ever read a story the summery reals me in. A good story catching snip bit can really draw people in. So instead of you introducing yourself as a new writer, say something about your story and the characters in it. Your introduction can go right before the story begins inside a few (of these). That way people know it’s not about the story. That’s one way or another way is a line under your introduction to break it from the rest of the story. Here’s an example of one I did something like what I’m saying. https://www.gayspiralstories.com/story/show/10006069

6/4/23, 7:29 AM
@[Drake Nightstorm](/user/show/650184) Thank you for your feedback. I didnt realize as I was filling out the submission form that what I put there would end up as the intro displayed. I will look into adjusting it.

6/4/23, 10:37 PM
@[Bowtied boy Jason](/user/show/255330) Sure no problem! I believe that you got something here that could get more traffic.
5/31/23, 1:42 PM
I enjoyed would have like a bit more detail in the the clothing and how they were before the transition but I enjoyed none less.

6/4/23, 7:31 AM
@[nerdysuitedbaby](/user/show/164769) Thank you for your feedback. I will make sure to include more details like you mentioned in my upcoming stories.