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1/31/24, 2:36 AM
The fact that the next chapter hasn’t come out yet is distressing to say the least
1/30/24, 11:33 PM
This chapter was a highlight of the series. Having Dan and Taylor be converted like that was incredible. How they each had different kinks that ultimately meshed together was also well done. The whole scene of these big muscular subs begging to be owned by a smaller top will never stop driving me wild. Also the melding the three jocks went through was well laid out. How they could become more of a single mind. Influencing each other. Building off each other was beautiful. What they felt. What they thought. What they wanted. Very compelling. Though I must admit to being a bit bummed with the epilogue. Our nerd essentially has three jock slaves that are constantly 'brainwashed' by their own desires to submit to their Sir. It feels like a lost opportunity to explore what they did moving forward from there. Having the 'Jockboy' do any manner of things at the order or request of their shared Sir. Such as them going back to that gym and showing off? Or that Sir orders them to only go to that gym with certain dress requirements. Or just generally taking more dominance and control over their lives in general? It was just more of a happy ending. Not to say that was bad, just felt...quick.

1/30/24, 11:41 PM
@[Marik29](/user/show/10021139) Thanks for the kind comments! I actually struggled on including the epilogue or not. I wanted to give a glimpse of the future but I also felt like it closed off future possibilities if I wanted to write them. What I ultimately decided is that I don’t currently have any plans to expand this story, so I included it. BUT, if I do want to explore these characters more, I can edit the story and insert more chapters before the epilogue. So, no promises, but if get inspired, I might write about the morning after, or the first time Simon develops the dual broadcaster/receiver. Or go past the epilogue and write what happens when the first commercial Neurobridge is released.

1/31/24, 2:27 AM
@[Naedre](/user/show/931338) Oh, I fully get why you did the epilogue. It definitely shows a window into the aftermath. The story could have excluded it and still would have worked. That ending was just the right amount where the readers would have gone 'where is the rest of it?' or 'it can't stop there!' because it has the sudden cut off with the story being concluded. It can make your audience go crazy because they want more. And I must admit I am partly guilty of that with this ending. I am much more into the master/slave troupe with obvious controls and dominance like collars, chastity, and rubber. And having such elements in the story with these characters would have been beyond incredible in my eyes. So I was trying to impose my own interests into the story. And that isn't how this story was set up. This is much more of the resounding happy ending. With the characters finding a balance with each other. Everything was mutual and agreed upon.
1/31/24, 2:19 AM
Once again, I am blown away by your talent. You can write a truly wonderful story, and this is no exception. Beautiful and moving, wonderfully told. Kudos!
1/30/24, 10:36 PM
Wow!
1/30/24, 4:56 PM
A genuinely well written, incredibly hot story. Very very much enjoyed it!
1/30/24, 12:30 AM
Oh my oh my oh my oh my!! Gdhdndhrfdg Do fucking good! Everything about this was amazing! So good! Great plot, great porn, great sex, great end. So good! So sexy.

Martin
1/30/24, 6:13 AM
@[Heru Kane](/user/show/56823) I hear you. This is one amazingly hot and cum-inducing story, well written, great concept, and prefect execution!
1/30/24, 2:42 AM
@Martin, I guess you mean January 30 in European time because it's January 29 in the States and I just finished reading this leg of the story. I like this ending. It's not an overwhelming change in Dan and Taylor; it's more Inception style without the whole depression. And all three being Simon's jockboys just comes gradually. It's really nice to see a story where the mind control doesn't dominate but comes on gradually and there is an acceptance of the control. And you left room for the story to go in different directions. Thank you for writing this story.

Martin
1/30/24, 6:12 AM
@[New Guy in Town](/user/show/820450) The intricacies of time zones :) The system always shows a timestamp adjusted for your local time zone. So I'm always talking MET :)
1/30/24, 4:56 AM
4 stars
1/29/24, 1:18 PM
I went back and re read this recently. Such a great series!

Anonymous
1/30/24, 4:20 AM
@[Mrdick](/user/show/1001656) Thank you so much!
1/29/24, 5:47 PM
Aww i feel bad for Jared. I mean im happy that Daniel is now part of the pact but all the drama he brought wirh him is not fun. He is stirring emotions and soon bringing danger. Looking forward for an update again.

Anonymous
1/30/24, 4:19 AM
@[DJeiKier](/user/show/10021357) Thanks a lot! Yeah, it's a bit difficult (It was difficult to write as well) but I promise it will all work out at the end.