Recent Comments

3/27/24, 1:36 PM
Would love to read more . Seems hot!
R P
3/27/24, 1:08 PM
This is hilarious and hot
Anonymous
3/27/24, 10:57 AM
Oh this is going to be a good series!! Canโ€™t wait for more.
3/27/24, 10:57 AM
I would love to see more, if you don't mind
3/27/24, 6:57 AM
Fun story. You've got a great ear for dialogue
3/27/24, 4:02 AM
Ooh this is a very interesting but also Hot story. I never thought a manuscript style story would be this so hot.

3/27/24, 4:08 AM
@[DJeiKier](/user/show/10021357) Thanks! I liked the idea of seeing what I could do without any visuals.
Dec 25, 2021
3/26/24, 10:44 PM
What a beautiful, and hot, Christmas story!
Mar 24, 2024
Muscle-Flex
3/25/24, 7:42 PM
Dropping us right into a mystery! This will be fun. I couldn't quite picture the full situation the narrator and Ben are in (lying on the floor, wrists and ankles bound?) Seductive start! I can't wait to see what game the captor has in store, who this amusingly fiendish dude is, and what his plans are for our three rugby studs. ๐Ÿ‰๐Ÿ’ช
3/24/24, 5:01 PM
This was beautifully conjured, you managed to make it bittersweet without making it tragic. However, it needed more 'meat' in the middle, you had a lot of short sentences. It does not mean the story is bad per se, it's really really good, but I feel this kind of story would have worked _even_ better as a longer novella.

3/25/24, 11:50 AM
@[Twan Andersen](/user/show/10018149) Thank you and it's true yes. This story is honestly the one that I would want to revisit the most, if I ever did that. I think giving the characters more breathing room to fully develop their relationships would be a pretty good idea. Also setting up some of the payoffs better. :heart:
Mar 24, 2024
3/25/24, 8:19 AM
I love the story, for someone who have an underwear fetish, this certainly hit the spot... MORE!!!